The Blader's spirit

Poll: what did you think

great
38.46%
20
ammusing
32.69%
17
ok
13.46%
7
bad
15.38%
8
Total: 100% 52 vote(s)
Why do you always say Matthew E. just call him Matthew......
The first one is the main character's friend, while the second one, Matthew E. is the main character's cousin who lives in Bermuda.
It cuts down on confusion as to who is talking...
Which I support.
now no more character request I MEAN IT THIS TIME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I have a question:
How come you don't put the chapters in spoilers? It would make the story easier to navigate though instead of scrolling down so far to find the chapter someone would have liked to view.
this story has potincial
I don't like the story because it's boring, and the characters have no character.

This thread is full of SPAM! I might have to report it! No kidding!
(Apr. 18, 2012  6:07 AM)Fakirs Duck Wrote: I don't like the story because it's boring, and the characters have no character.

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dont please i worked so hard on this and i want to see it through to the end

(Apr. 18, 2012  12:36 AM)Takasu Wrote: I have a question:
How come you don't put the chapters in spoilers? It would make the story easier to navigate though instead of scrolling down so far to find the chapter someone would have liked to view.
well the thing is....................................i dont know how
Oh man, I can't belive I forgot to tell you that nations XD
It's simply [ spoiler ] story [/ spoiler] without the spaces in the []'s.
It should become this:
(Apr. 18, 2012  7:16 AM)nationsbeyblade Wrote:
(Apr. 18, 2012  6:07 AM)Fakirs Duck Wrote: I don't like the story because it's boring, and the characters have no character.

This thread is full of SPAM! I might have to report it! No kidding!
dont please i worked so hard on this and i want to see it through to the end

(Apr. 18, 2012  12:36 AM)Takasu Wrote: I have a question:
How come you don't put the chapters in spoilers? It would make the story easier to navigate though instead of scrolling down so far to find the chapter someone would have liked to view.
well the thing is....................................i dont know how

Alright... I'll give you another chance... I understand how hard you worked...
thank you i will learn from my mistakes and not spam
Can i be on it?
And my name is NPB then! Remember it!
Bey is Ray Sagittario D125 SF.
Personality: Happy and likes running.
It's like Nations and Luck are just spamming this thread. Don't worry, you'll learn. Smile

Anyway, you need some help, huh? I recommend you go to The Writer's Handbook and Stairs on Becoming A Better Writer for help and stuff. It will improve your grammar and spelling and other very important things a story should have.

Now, I recommend that you put in more description and not only dialogue. I mean, talking's all good but there should be a part in where you describe the environment and problem of the Protagonist and his pals. Now on to, character. Character development is critical for a story, so to start the development is personalities. Work on those and you'll do well. Also, please please please, put punctuation and capital letters. With these too, your on the steady road to become a better writer.
3 more chapters uploaded
im feeling in a writing mood