I think it's pretty good except, us readers don't know alot about the main character, so when we first read it we're like: "what is going on?" Just keep trying and i'm sure you'll be a great author some day. And i think the people who are saying it's trash should try to critis in a more gentle way.

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Please click on one of the dragons above, you don't want them to die, do you?

If you want to challenge my team near Manchester post a challenge on this thread: http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-beyblasters-now-global

yeah but xxron is noe my editor and michaels history is a mystery....FOR NOW!

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Yep, Unless i reveal it... lol, joke!

dont give spoilers

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I'm SO sorry for not editing it... I just had so much school work, so that kept me from doing it...
I'm working on it now, just so yuo know. It should be up at least by sunday.

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Credit to DeX for this amazing signature!
Want a ok story that's readable? With actual grammar? Check out Everything Spins Into Chaos: A beyblade story
I use Hasbro beys. Because I have no acsess to TT or Sonokong beys. Hopefully that'll change soon.
~X

Hey ur story was great i liked it and i can't wait to read more

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thanks xxaron
also rock leone thank u

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thnx to everyone 4 the ideas but i cant take any more requests

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Hey dude the hawks is my username what a coincidence or it is something more than that ?????

dunnp the hawks was named after my hometown HAWKinge

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yeah. named after hawkinge, but naming a blading team hawkinge would suck . . .

yeah blad (i is gansta)

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yeah man , i is gonna pwn u in bladin' blad

thats bull

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o' really?
come on en'

bring it (wat were we talking about?)

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Nations, you can go ahead and post the unedited chapter, I got a lot to do, including school.
WEhich means no comp time, which means no editing for me.
I can post the unedited version, if you want.

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Credit to DeX for this amazing signature!
Want a ok story that's readable? With actual grammar? Check out Everything Spins Into Chaos: A beyblade story
I use Hasbro beys. Because I have no acsess to TT or Sonokong beys. Hopefully that'll change soon.
~X

its ok i will post the unedited version good luck with school (i know how u feel)

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the next chapter will be posted on friday

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It's good, but needs some editing, plus it's quite short...

yeah............i know

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If XXaron's busy i can always help out .

Sorry, I just got back form a field trip, I almost have the chapter done, only a little more editing.
My story is suffering due to all my projects (A comic on one forum, trying to get my Youtube channel set up, school, helping with this story).
But it makes me happy helping people out.

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Credit to DeX for this amazing signature!
Want a ok story that's readable? With actual grammar? Check out Everything Spins Into Chaos: A beyblade story
I use Hasbro beys. Because I have no acsess to TT or Sonokong beys. Hopefully that'll change soon.
~X

thanks man you is epic!

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hey make me a charactor
name: flare a 13 year old boy, hair is fiery red, green eyes and has a comment about everything
bey: flame virgo sw145 ES, special moves: knockout blast, magnitude shock, and burn cyclone
everything about him is either funny or happy it takes a whole lot to p him off

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sig my me ^.^ I accomplished something