Chapter 15
Ragnarok’s Debut
Next episode is
Fighting gets exciting!
Ruckus Joins the Air ship!
Ragnarok’s Debut
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Next episode is
Fighting gets exciting!
Ruckus Joins the Air ship!
[Fan Fiction] Close This Thread @“CitrusNinja3”
So this is what the air ship is like the dorms are not big there like a a closet and they sleep in sleeping bags and there stuff is on the side so the plane does not crash and they are 3 planes one for the battles, another for the dorms, and the one that’s just empty and is for storage
(Jun. 30, 2021 6:25 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: So this is what the air ship is like the dorms are not big there like a a closet and they sleep in sleeping bags and there stuff is on the side so the plane does not crash and they are 3 planes one for the battles, another for the dorms, and the one that’s just empty and is for storage
thats pretty awesome, better than what i was gonna think of lol
(Jun. 29, 2021 6:49 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 15
Ragnarok’s Debut
Spoiler (Click to View)
Next episode is
Fighting gets exciting!
Ruckus Joins the Air ship!
Grammar: 3/5. I noticed quite a lot of mistakes.
Story: 2/5. It was kinda meh, I felt like you could've added more action and maybe come out with a new Roktavor or something.
Characters: 3/5. You Should've shown us more about Rukus like more of his personality and you should've made the episode about him so we could learn more about him.
Dialogue: 2/5. Like I said before it would've been better if the chapter was better structured around Rukus.
Length: 4/5. It's getting there the one thing you need to work on is taking the time you need if it's a really long chapter take out some unnecessary stuff that doesn't benefit the plot
Total: 14/25 It's getting there you just got some work to do I Know you can improve
(Jun. 30, 2021 6:41 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:(Jun. 29, 2021 6:49 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 15
Ragnarok’s Debut
Spoiler (Click to View)
Next episode is
Fighting gets exciting!
Ruckus Joins the Air ship!
Grammar: 3/5. I noticed quite a lot of mistakes.
Story: 2/5. It was kinda meh, I felt like you could've added more action and maybe come out with a new Roktavor or something.
Characters: 3/5. You Should've shown us more about Rukus like more of his personality and you should've made the episode about him so we could learn more about him.
Dialogue: 2/5. Like I said before it would've been better if the chapter was better structured around Rukus.
Length: 4/5. It's getting there the one thing you need to work on is taking the time you need if it's a really long chapter take out some unnecessary stuff that doesn't benefit the plot
Total: 14/25 It's getting there you just got some work to do I Know you can improve
Thx dude!
(Jun. 30, 2021 6:46 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:(Jun. 30, 2021 6:41 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Grammar: 3/5. I noticed quite a lot of mistakes.
Story: 2/5. It was kinda meh, I felt like you could've added more action and maybe come out with a new Roktavor or something.
Characters: 3/5. You Should've shown us more about Rukus like more of his personality and you should've made the episode about him so we could learn more about him.
Dialogue: 2/5. Like I said before it would've been better if the chapter was better structured around Rukus.
Length: 4/5. It's getting there the one thing you need to work on is taking the time you need if it's a really long chapter take out some unnecessary stuff that doesn't benefit the plot
Total: 14/25 It's getting there you just got some work to do I Know you can improve
Thx dude!
Anytime
ill be having a beyblade contest you guys have to submit a bey you want in the story and i will make a character for it
ill announce the winners on July the 4
UnseenBurst do you wanna enter?
ill announce the winners on July the 4
UnseenBurst do you wanna enter?
(Jun. 30, 2021 7:19 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: ill be having a beyblade contest you guys have to submit a bey you want in the story and i will make a character for it
ill announce the winners on July the 4
UnseenBurst do you wanna enter?
Sure but give me some time I need some insperation
(Jun. 29, 2021 6:49 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 15
Ragnarok’s Debut
Spoiler (Click to View)
Next episode is
Fighting gets exciting!
Ruckus Joins the Air ship!
Grammar: 3.5/5- A lot of the grammar is wrong, if you were typing this in a hurry, then I'd give you a like 20000/5 on your 'hurry grammar' XD.
Plot: I haven't read the whole fanfic, so I'll give this chapter a 9.9/10.
And the last one, Biggness of the Chapter: It's short, so I'll give it a 5/10.
(Jun. 30, 2021 8:18 PM)NamanSpryzen Wrote:(Jun. 29, 2021 6:49 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 15
Ragnarok’s Debut
Spoiler (Click to View)
Next episode is
Fighting gets exciting!
Ruckus Joins the Air ship!
Grammar: 3.5/5- A lot of the grammar is wrong, if you were typing this in a hurry, then I'd give you a like 20000/5 on your 'hurry grammar' XD.
Plot: I haven't read the whole fanfic, so I'll give this chapter a 9.9/10.
And the last one, Biggness of the Chapter: It's short, so I'll give it a 5/10.
Yo, NamanSpryzen could u rate my chapter
(Jun. 30, 2021 8:18 PM)NamanSpryzen Wrote:(Jun. 29, 2021 6:49 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 15
Ragnarok’s Debut
Spoiler (Click to View)
Next episode is
Fighting gets exciting!
Ruckus Joins the Air ship!
Grammar: 3.5/5- A lot of the grammar is wrong, if you were typing this in a hurry, then I'd give you a like 20000/5 on your 'hurry grammar' XD.
Plot: I haven't read the whole fanfic, so I'll give this chapter a 9.9/10.
And the last one, Biggness of the Chapter: It's short, so I'll give it a 5/10.
Thx!
Name: Ruckus De Le Russo
Bey: Crash Ragnarok
Personality: a kid with a high ego but is Kind and forgiving
Appearance: He wears a Black jacket that is long liken Ranjiro and white shirt and a black jean and a Bubble gun in his mouth all the time
Name: Finn Sumiye
Age: 16
Personality: Very intense blader he's rude to most people and he's one of the strongest blades around messing with him would be a mistake. He's always practicing to be the best and never stops his defense is one of the best out there. He's beaten Delta Zakuro before (Not the DeltaZakuro from WBO) and he's beaten Dante Koryu.
Bey: Monarch Forneus GigaWheel Universe (Green)
Layer: Monarch Forneus: It's set up to have a defense like a tank it has metal on it to giving it extra weight.
Disk: GigaWheel: It's the heaviest disk ever it's meant to make sure defense beys never get knocked over.
Universe: it's Universe except for o being green.
Attacks: Monarch Defense Monarch Drift Ultra Monarch Drift Monarch Crash!!
Alliance: He has no friends
Age: 16
Personality: Very intense blader he's rude to most people and he's one of the strongest blades around messing with him would be a mistake. He's always practicing to be the best and never stops his defense is one of the best out there. He's beaten Delta Zakuro before (Not the DeltaZakuro from WBO) and he's beaten Dante Koryu.
Bey: Monarch Forneus GigaWheel Universe (Green)
Layer: Monarch Forneus: It's set up to have a defense like a tank it has metal on it to giving it extra weight.
Disk: GigaWheel: It's the heaviest disk ever it's meant to make sure defense beys never get knocked over.
Universe: it's Universe except for o being green.
Attacks: Monarch Defense Monarch Drift Ultra Monarch Drift Monarch Crash!!
Alliance: He has no friends
(Jun. 30, 2021 8:22 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:(Jun. 30, 2021 8:18 PM)NamanSpryzen Wrote: Grammar: 3.5/5- A lot of the grammar is wrong, if you were typing this in a hurry, then I'd give you a like 20000/5 on your 'hurry grammar' XD.
Plot: I haven't read the whole fanfic, so I'll give this chapter a 9.9/10.
And the last one, Biggness of the Chapter: It's short, so I'll give it a 5/10.
Yo, NamanSpryzen could u rate my chapter
K! The latest chapter for the one I entered the character contest?
(Jun. 30, 2021 7:19 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: ill be having a Beyblade contest you guys have to submit a bey you want in the story and I will make a character for it
ill announce the winners on July the 4
UnseenBurst do you wanna enter?
Wait another one?
(Jun. 30, 2021 10:48 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote:(Jun. 30, 2021 7:19 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: ill be having a Beyblade contest you guys have to submit a bey you want in the story and I will make a character for it
ill announce the winners on July the 4
UnseenBurst do you wanna enter?
Wait another one?
It’s more of you make a beyblade and I will make a character for it
(Jun. 30, 2021 10:48 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote:Sometimes when you don't have character ideas or want to spice up things you make these character contests. The reason can be:(Jun. 30, 2021 7:19 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: ill be having a Beyblade contest you guys have to submit a bey you want in the story and I will make a character for it
ill announce the winners on July the 4
UnseenBurst do you wanna enter?
Wait another one?
A. The ones listed above
B. Atract more attention to your fanfic
C. Just for fun
D. Idk more but i have sure there's more
(Jun. 30, 2021 10:53 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:(Jun. 30, 2021 10:48 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote: Wait another one?
It’s more of you make a Beyblade and I will make a character for it
(Jun. 30, 2021 10:54 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:(Jun. 30, 2021 10:48 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote: Wait another one?Sometimes when you don't have character ideas or want to spice up things you make these character contests. The reason can be:
A. The ones listed above
B. Attract more attention to your fanfic
C. Just for fun
D. Idk more but I have sure there's more
Oh. So.. let me think of a bey
So let me explain this so you make a Beyblade and I create a character for it and you explain the bey in detail
Yo yooooooo
Yes indeed a "yo yooooooo" is worthy of a like.😆
Yes indeed a "yo yooooooo" is worthy of a like.😆
Chapter 16 sorry if this feels lazy!
Battle Island
Alright so the next chapter is gonna be way longer
Battle Island
Spoiler (Click to View)
(Jul. 02, 2021 9:11 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 16 sorry if this feels lazy!
Battle Island
Alright so the next chapter is gonna be way longerSpoiler (Click to View)
awesome
(Jul. 02, 2021 9:36 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:(Jul. 02, 2021 9:11 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 16 sorry if this feels lazy!
Battle Island
Alright so the next chapter is gonna be way longerSpoiler (Click to View)
awesome
Thx mind rating?