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SacredXcalibur · Jun. 25, 2021 4:50 AM

(Jun. 25, 2021 4:46 AM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jun. 25, 2021 4:42 AM)SacredXcalibur Wrote: please don't self promote on someone else's thread. it's rude.

ok my bad

It's fine.

hi

LegendJustice · Jun. 25, 2021 3:49 PM

(Jun. 25, 2021 4:50 AM)SacredXcalibur Wrote:
(Jun. 25, 2021 4:46 AM)BladeKingX Wrote: ok my bad

It's fine.

It's okay cause he is new!

Also can anyone rate my recent chapters?

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

ColdFlames13 · Jun. 25, 2021 3:53 PM

(Jun. 25, 2021 3:49 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jun. 25, 2021 4:50 AM)SacredXcalibur Wrote: It's fine.
It's okay cause he is new!

Also can anyone rate my recent chapters?

Can I?

LegendJustice · Jun. 25, 2021 4:01 PM

(Jun. 25, 2021 3:53 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote:
(Jun. 25, 2021 3:49 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: It's okay cause he is new!

Also can anyone rate my recent chapters?

Can I?

Sure!

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

ColdFlames13 · Jun. 25, 2021 4:20 PM

Alr here goes...

Grammar: 8/10 I can tell your really improving here.
Story: 6/10 I mean.. So far some bladers have been met and now they are on an air ship..
Length: 3/10 This was a short episode and I get why.
Characters: 6/10 Pretty good. I love how Satsu and Ronan have a rivalry.
Dialouge: 5/10 Your getting better.

Overall: 28/40-50 Your getting really good. Better than me.

LegendJustice · Jun. 25, 2021 4:27 PM

(Jun. 25, 2021 4:20 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote: Alr here goes...

Grammar: 8/10 I can tell your really improving here.
Story: 6/10 I mean.. So far some bladers have been met and now they are on an air ship..
Length: 3/10 This was a short episode and I get why.
Characters: 6/10 Pretty good. I love how Satsu and Ronan have a rivalry.
Dialouge: 5/10 Your getting better.

Overall: 28/40-50 Your getting really good. Better than me.

Thx!

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

UnseenBurst · Jun. 25, 2021 4:27 PM

(Jun. 25, 2021 4:20 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote: Alr here goes...

Grammar: 8/10 I can tell your really improving here.
Story: 6/10 I mean.. So far some bladers have been met and now they are on an air ship..
Length: 3/10 This was a short episode and I get why.
Characters: 6/10 Pretty good. I love how Satsu and Ronan have a rivalry.
Dialouge: 5/10 Your getting better.

Overall: 28/40-50 Your getting really good. Better than me.

He's right

The One Piece is the friends we made a long the way.

LegendJustice · Jun. 25, 2021 4:28 PM

(Jun. 25, 2021 4:27 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jun. 25, 2021 4:20 PM)ColdFlames13 Wrote: Alr here goes...

Grammar: 8/10 I can tell your really improving here.
Story: 6/10 I mean.. So far some bladers have been met and now they are on an air ship..
Length: 3/10 This was a short episode and I get why.
Characters: 6/10 Pretty good. I love how Satsu and Ronan have a rivalry.
Dialouge: 5/10 Your getting better.

Overall: 28/40-50 Your getting really good. Better than me.

He's right

Thx!

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

LegendJustice · Jun. 27, 2021 9:22 PM

Get ready for the First match on the Air ship

Remington Vs Satsu

UnseenBurst LegendJustice

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

GenesisBlader · Jun. 27, 2021 9:30 PM

YO this gonna be so epic

"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz

UnseenBurst · Jun. 27, 2021 9:38 PM

(Jun. 27, 2021 9:22 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Get ready for the First match on the Air ship

Remington Vs Satsu

UnseenBurst LegendJustice

Get ready to get recked boi

The One Piece is the friends we made a long the way.

LegendJustice · Jun. 27, 2021 9:51 PM

(Jun. 27, 2021 9:38 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jun. 27, 2021 9:22 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Get ready for the First match on the Air ship

Remington Vs Satsu

UnseenBurst LegendJustice

Get ready to get recked boi

Hehe satsu: .... Remington I'm so pretty your mom called me kitty

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

UnseenBurst · Jun. 27, 2021 9:52 PM

(Jun. 27, 2021 9:51 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jun. 27, 2021 9:38 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Get ready to get recked boi

Hehe satsu: .... Remington I'm so pretty your mom called me kitty

Beating you will be fun

The One Piece is the friends we made a long the way.

LegendJustice · Jun. 27, 2021 10:11 PM

(Jun. 27, 2021 9:52 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jun. 27, 2021 9:51 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Hehe satsu: .... Remington I'm so pretty your mom called me kitty

Beating you will be fun

Grr!

Character Contest is over winners

UnseenBurst @BeyI0v3r ColdFlames13

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

ColdFlames13 · Jun. 27, 2021 11:29 PM

(Jun. 27, 2021 10:11 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jun. 27, 2021 9:52 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Beating you will be fun

Grr!

Character Contest is over winners

UnseenBurst @BeyI0v3r ColdFlames13

Funny

LegendJustice · Jun. 28, 2021 4:58 PM

Chapter 14
Battle Of A Lifetime
Satsu Vs Remington

Spoiler (Click to View)

Jacob and shun are great friends

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

UnseenBurst · Jun. 28, 2021 5:13 PM

(Jun. 28, 2021 4:58 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 14
Battle Of A Lifetime
Satsu Vs Remington

Spoiler (Click to View)
Satsu: How is this plane flying? It’s so huge if we get lost in a storm we’ll die.

Ronin: Don’t think like that!
(Ronin says scared and demanding)

Satsu: Haha cute, you so scared! Ha do you need your mommy!?

Ronin: **tears come out his eyes** M-my mom is dead……..

Satsu: Oh.
(Satsu said disappointed in herself)

Hanami: Bladers! The plane is landing and where in Korea! Now for the first match of the day we have drum rolls please!! SATSU VS REMINGTON!!

Ronin: Good luck.
(Ronin said kinda still upset)

Satsu: Thanks! **leaves room**

Satsu: I feel horrible! But let’s see the others beys.

Gizmo: Rip!

Satsu: Hello there!

Gizmo: Hello, I’m Gizmo

Satsu: Yeah, I know who you are.

Gizmo: Oh, Okay!

Satsu: Nice bey!

Gizmo: Thanks! This is Ground Glitch.

Satsu: Cool, but nothing beats my Sunset!

Gizmo: Well see, We’ll see.

Hanami: Satsu please come to the battle room!

Satsu: Well I have to go do my match! Catch you on the flip side!

Gizmo: Later!

Satsu: Now, Where is the battle room?

Guard 1: Do you need help?

Satsu: Yes please?

Guard 1: Oh the battle room is on the other plane.

Satsu: But, aren’t we flying?

Guard 1: Nope We landed a few hours ago.

Satsu’s mind: WHY DIDN’T NO ONE TELL ME!!!

Satsu: Thx **leaves to go to the other plane**

Remington: Finally!

Reff: Ready? Set!

All: 3! 2! 1!

Satsu & Remington: Let it rip!!

(Both of them pull of a Red launch)

Remington: RABOOT! LETS GO! Kick attack!

(Raboot gains speed)

Hanami: WOWZIE!! What’s Sunset gonna do to get out of this pickle?!

Satsu: **Smiles** SATOMB SMASH!!! 💥

(Sunset Uses the rails on the stadium and Smashes on top of Raboot)

Remington: **Gasp**

(|Both auras start Firing up)

Satsu & Remington: AAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH CHARGE!!!

(Huge explosion 💥)

Hanami: **Covers eyes** Who will win?!!!

(Sunset burst)

Satsu: N-no….

Hanami: REMINGTON IS THE WINNER!

(Jacob & Shun run in)

Jacob & Shun: Satsu!
Jacob and shun are great friends

Yes I won

The One Piece is the friends we made a long the way.

LegendJustice · Jun. 28, 2021 5:29 PM

(Jun. 28, 2021 5:13 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jun. 28, 2021 4:58 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 14
Battle Of A Lifetime
Satsu Vs Remington

Spoiler (Click to View)
Satsu: How is this plane flying? It’s so huge if we get lost in a storm we’ll die.

Ronin: Don’t think like that!
(Ronin says scared and demanding)

Satsu: Haha cute, you so scared! Ha do you need your mommy!?

Ronin: **tears come out his eyes** M-my mom is dead……..

Satsu: Oh.
(Satsu said disappointed in herself)

Hanami: Bladers! The plane is landing and where in Korea! Now for the first match of the day we have drum rolls please!! SATSU VS REMINGTON!!

Ronin: Good luck.
(Ronin said kinda still upset)

Satsu: Thanks! **leaves room**

Satsu: I feel horrible! But let’s see the others beys.

Gizmo: Rip!

Satsu: Hello there!

Gizmo: Hello, I’m Gizmo

Satsu: Yeah, I know who you are.

Gizmo: Oh, Okay!

Satsu: Nice bey!

Gizmo: Thanks! This is Ground Glitch.

Satsu: Cool, but nothing beats my Sunset!

Gizmo: Well see, We’ll see.

Hanami: Satsu please come to the battle room!

Satsu: Well I have to go do my match! Catch you on the flip side!

Gizmo: Later!

Satsu: Now, Where is the battle room?

Guard 1: Do you need help?

Satsu: Yes please?

Guard 1: Oh the battle room is on the other plane.

Satsu: But, aren’t we flying?

Guard 1: Nope We landed a few hours ago.

Satsu’s mind: WHY DIDN’T NO ONE TELL ME!!!

Satsu: Thx **leaves to go to the other plane**

Remington: Finally!

Reff: Ready? Set!

All: 3! 2! 1!

Satsu & Remington: Let it rip!!

(Both of them pull of a Red launch)

Remington: RABOOT! LETS GO! Kick attack!

(Raboot gains speed)

Hanami: WOWZIE!! What’s Sunset gonna do to get out of this pickle?!

Satsu: **Smiles** SATOMB SMASH!!! 💥

(Sunset Uses the rails on the stadium and Smashes on top of Raboot)

Remington: **Gasp**

(|Both auras start Firing up)

Satsu & Remington: AAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH CHARGE!!!

(Huge explosion 💥)

Hanami: **Covers eyes** Who will win?!!!

(Sunset burst)

Satsu: N-no….

Hanami: REMINGTON IS THE WINNER!

(Jacob & Shun run in)

Jacob & Shun: Satsu!
Jacob and shun are great friends

Yes I won

Well in a couple of chapters remingtons bey gets smashed to 6 pieces

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

GenesisBlader · Jun. 28, 2021 5:41 PM

dang i'm about to get some popcorn to watch this episode!

"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz

UnseenBurst · Jun. 28, 2021 5:44 PM

(Jun. 28, 2021 5:29 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jun. 28, 2021 5:13 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Yes I won

Well in a couple of chapters remingtons bey gets smashed to 6 pieces

The One Piece is the friends we made a long the way.

GenesisBlader · Jun. 28, 2021 5:44 PM

wow this episode is pretty gosh barn diddly darn fiddly farn good

"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz

LegendJustice · Jun. 28, 2021 5:58 PM

(Jun. 28, 2021 5:44 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jun. 28, 2021 5:29 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Well in a couple of chapters remingtons bey gets smashed to 6 pieces

Yup but he builds an even stronger bey that’s all I’m telling you

(Jun. 28, 2021 5:44 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: wow this episode is pretty gosh barn diddly darn fiddly farn good

Thx

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

LegendJustice · Jun. 29, 2021 6:08 PM

(Jun. 28, 2021 5:41 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: dang i'm about to get some popcorn to watch this episode!

Thx Dude!

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

UnseenBurst · Jun. 29, 2021 6:09 PM

(Jun. 29, 2021 6:08 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jun. 28, 2021 5:41 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: dang i'm about to get some popcorn to watch this episode!

Thx Dude!

Your getting better I'll rate your next chapter

The One Piece is the friends we made a long the way.

GenesisBlader · Jun. 29, 2021 6:20 PM

(Jun. 29, 2021 6:08 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jun. 28, 2021 5:41 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: dang i'm about to get some popcorn to watch this episode!

Thx Dude!

no problemo

"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz