AAAANNNNDDDDD!!!
Yep!
Same criteria as last time, mostly an improvement!
scarab:
Plot - 10 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 15 points
Character Development - 10 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 75
Since it's unfinished, Character Dev and Plot couldn't be developed. Good start.
NDS:
Plot - 20 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 100
I cried okay, I cried. That just made me cry.
Kaizer/Kira:
Plot - 20 points
Grammar - 18 points
Atmosphere - 18 points
Character Development - 15 points
Vocabulary - 19 points
Total: 90
Overall Solid, just minor errors here and there with a lack of character dev and powerful words.
Ultra:
Plot - 20 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 15 points
Character Development - 16 points
Vocabulary - 19 points
Total: 90
Pretty good, just doesn't really sway the reader.
Ga:
Plot - 17 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 16 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 93
Didn't really get the plot, but it works. Character dev is also lacking.
Trickst3r:
Plot - 18 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 98
Interesting, very interesting.
Thunder Dome:
Plot - 17 points
Grammar - 19 points
Atmosphere - 16 points
Character Development - 18 points
Vocabulary - 17 points
Total: 87
Not bad, just didn't amaze or suck.
Dragon King:
Plot - 18 points - Cheesy much?
Grammar - 10 points
Atmosphere - 16 points
Character Development - 15 points
Vocabulary - 17 points
Total: 76
Just didn't really endear itself to me. Plot was cheesy, too many grammatical errors and lack of emotion or development in it.
NOOODDOOOOOO WAIIII!!! I had to punch a wall to feel manly again :3 XD
JK, but I had a few man tears, lol. Great work on that NDS.
Overall awesome work ya'll, great improvement!
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