Hey guys this is my Fan Fiction, The Mysterious Dragon Blader (TMDB). I'm really looking forward to actually be able to have others read my writing and don't be afraid to give feed back it will really help me so yeah thanks and enjoy
So i've just finished the main character. He is:
Name: Graham Dragon
Age: 11
Height: 110 centimetres (3’6 foot)
Gender: Male
Beyblade Name: Dragon Fenrir
Beyblade Powers:
In Defence mode it absorbs the beys incoming attack damage and put it into Its spin using the four claws that are tucked into the bay at north, south. east and west so it can absorb damage from every direction.
In attack mode those claws push out like turbo blades increasing the bey’s attack power but it loses its absorb ability.
Spin direction: Dragon Fenrir spins anti clockwise in defence and clockwise in attack
Personality:
Graham is very hype and energetic when it comes to blading and he is always willing to accept a battle. However, once he is in battle, he becomes super intense to the point of creeping you out. He is very friendly and tends to make friends wherever he goes.
Appearance:
Graham has a scar going through his left eye from the day a dragon claw in the local museum fell and clawed at his face. His nose is short and pointed and his mouths is almost always smiling or grinning except when he is battling then it is angry.
Hair Colour:
Graham has cyan blue hair with a purple streak at the front
Eye Colour:
Graham has bright red eyes.
Special Moves:
1. Life Break: (Starts in Defence mode) This drains the opponents spin speed and feeds it to its own spin speed then when it hits a certain speed it breaks off and changes to attack mode and jets around the stadium ten times then comes down straight to the opposing bey which are then most likely to burst.
2. Dragon Flight: (This happens when the bey is sent into the air) Dragon Fenrir’s claws in attack mode are long enough for it to glide when its in the air and it uses this to glide to a spot above the opponent then it changes to Defence mode and uses gravity plus its own spin speed to come down on top of the bey.
Flux: (Must make a NEW flux)
Grahams flux is the same colour as fire.
Flux powers:
Dragon Fenrir and Grahams flux allows them to increase their attack and they move unpredictably like fire
Flux Backstory:
Graham discovers his flux with Dragon Fenrir when they must face someone who has a corrupted flux in a stadium made up of dragon bones with plastic melted into the holes in the stadium. The boy with the corrupted flux currently has 2 points and Graham only has one it is the third battle and the other boy is on the verge of winning when Graham first connects with Fenrir. Fenrir is in attack mode and they opposing bey has just thrown it into the air and Fenrir reaches out to Graham and Graham reaches back then Fenrir glides over the top of the other bey and changes to defence mode and Graham yells out “NOW FENRIR USE ULTRA DRAGON FLIGHT,” and they burst the other bey and destroy the boys corrupted Flux the boy then thanks them and promises never to let himself get corrupted again
Flux Moves:
1. Ultra-Life Break: This is like Life Break but twice as strong and it moves twice as fast and unpredictably like fire.
2. Ultra-Dragon Flight: This is like Dragon Flight but instead of gliding its spinning so fast that its flying up to a spot above the bey then I change and come crashing down.
3. Dragon quadruple whip: (this can only happen when Dragon Fenrir is using attack mode) this is kind of like all the other whips but instead of it only being in one spot its on all four of its claws the longer it goes without making contact the quicker it spins and the more dangerous it becomes.
Character Backstory:
Graham Mum and Dad were museum owners and they would often go for walks around the museum and that’s how Graham learnt the things he knows about dragons. One day Graham went walking alone even though his parents told him he was not allowed to and he was standing beside a huge dragon admiring it when its claw fell of and scratched his eye, he spent the next couple of weeks in hospital and a few months learning how to see with only one eye.
but i want to know if he's too op though so if you could tell me that would be great and i'd be really thankful.
first six chapters.
Chapter One: Enter! Graham Dragon
Chapter two: Dragon Fenrir’s born
Chapter Three: Dragon's rage
Chapter World's greatest friend
Chapter Four and a half: Free De La Hoya!!!!!!
Chapter Five: Special training??!!
Chapter Six: The connection between Partner and bey
So i've just finished the main character. He is:
Name: Graham Dragon
Age: 11
Height: 110 centimetres (3’6 foot)
Gender: Male
Beyblade Name: Dragon Fenrir
Beyblade Powers:
In Defence mode it absorbs the beys incoming attack damage and put it into Its spin using the four claws that are tucked into the bay at north, south. east and west so it can absorb damage from every direction.
In attack mode those claws push out like turbo blades increasing the bey’s attack power but it loses its absorb ability.
Spin direction: Dragon Fenrir spins anti clockwise in defence and clockwise in attack
Personality:
Graham is very hype and energetic when it comes to blading and he is always willing to accept a battle. However, once he is in battle, he becomes super intense to the point of creeping you out. He is very friendly and tends to make friends wherever he goes.
Appearance:
Graham has a scar going through his left eye from the day a dragon claw in the local museum fell and clawed at his face. His nose is short and pointed and his mouths is almost always smiling or grinning except when he is battling then it is angry.
Hair Colour:
Graham has cyan blue hair with a purple streak at the front
Eye Colour:
Graham has bright red eyes.
Special Moves:
1. Life Break: (Starts in Defence mode) This drains the opponents spin speed and feeds it to its own spin speed then when it hits a certain speed it breaks off and changes to attack mode and jets around the stadium ten times then comes down straight to the opposing bey which are then most likely to burst.
2. Dragon Flight: (This happens when the bey is sent into the air) Dragon Fenrir’s claws in attack mode are long enough for it to glide when its in the air and it uses this to glide to a spot above the opponent then it changes to Defence mode and uses gravity plus its own spin speed to come down on top of the bey.
Flux: (Must make a NEW flux)
Grahams flux is the same colour as fire.
Flux powers:
Dragon Fenrir and Grahams flux allows them to increase their attack and they move unpredictably like fire
Flux Backstory:
Graham discovers his flux with Dragon Fenrir when they must face someone who has a corrupted flux in a stadium made up of dragon bones with plastic melted into the holes in the stadium. The boy with the corrupted flux currently has 2 points and Graham only has one it is the third battle and the other boy is on the verge of winning when Graham first connects with Fenrir. Fenrir is in attack mode and they opposing bey has just thrown it into the air and Fenrir reaches out to Graham and Graham reaches back then Fenrir glides over the top of the other bey and changes to defence mode and Graham yells out “NOW FENRIR USE ULTRA DRAGON FLIGHT,” and they burst the other bey and destroy the boys corrupted Flux the boy then thanks them and promises never to let himself get corrupted again
Flux Moves:
1. Ultra-Life Break: This is like Life Break but twice as strong and it moves twice as fast and unpredictably like fire.
2. Ultra-Dragon Flight: This is like Dragon Flight but instead of gliding its spinning so fast that its flying up to a spot above the bey then I change and come crashing down.
3. Dragon quadruple whip: (this can only happen when Dragon Fenrir is using attack mode) this is kind of like all the other whips but instead of it only being in one spot its on all four of its claws the longer it goes without making contact the quicker it spins and the more dangerous it becomes.
Character Backstory:
Graham Mum and Dad were museum owners and they would often go for walks around the museum and that’s how Graham learnt the things he knows about dragons. One day Graham went walking alone even though his parents told him he was not allowed to and he was standing beside a huge dragon admiring it when its claw fell of and scratched his eye, he spent the next couple of weeks in hospital and a few months learning how to see with only one eye.
but i want to know if he's too op though so if you could tell me that would be great and i'd be really thankful.
first six chapters.
Chapter One: Enter! Graham Dragon
Chapter two: Dragon Fenrir’s born
Chapter Three: Dragon's rage
Chapter World's greatest friend
Chapter Four and a half: Free De La Hoya!!!!!!
Chapter Five: Special training??!!
Chapter Six: The connection between Partner and bey