This thread is for beginning writers who want to see their pontencial from a different point of view pm either of us two paragraphs of your story to get a review
Fakir and Fakir's duck Writing Reviewing
Never saw this coming XD
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I've already read it and it truly is amazing but you need more romance and conflict. Maby like another guy likes her or she has a boyfriend alredy or she likes another guy
But what do you guys mean you never saw this coming
But what do you guys mean you never saw this coming
(Apr. 27, 2012 9:47 PM)Fakir Wrote: I've already read it and it truly is amazing but you need more romance and conflict. Maby like another guy likes her or she has a boyfriend alredy or she likes another guy
But what do you guys mean you never saw this coming
I didn't expect you and duck to team up and review stories. Or did you decide this on your own?
I pmed her the idea and we set this up TOGETHER
Sorry pressed caps lock button but any ways we did this together
Speaking of reviewing, Review Synchrom Smash. Too lazy to copy and paste
Didyou write it
No I asked if it was someone elses story you asked me to review but any way I read it and its preety good can't wait till next chapter
rate my story
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What story what's the name and could you just copy and paste then pm it to me
(Apr. 27, 2012 9:47 PM)Fakir Wrote: I've already read it and it truly is amazing but you need more romance and conflict. Maby like another guy likes her or she has a boyfriend alredy or she likes another guy
But what do you guys mean you never saw this coming
Haha,I can write love stories.But not love stories with drama in it
The next chapter is probably going to be the last
I'm moving on to a different story
well it's your call
Please review my story, Fakir. It's link is in my sig. Thanks! Just post what you think in the thread!
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Fakir and I DID do this together! I will review nationsbeyblade's story, the Blader Spirit. Please PM me your best 2 chapters! SarabScientist, I actually prefer love stories with drama. Lots of drama!
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Takasu just finished your story and it's really good I can't wait to see how you use the characters to your advantage but I suggest that you put in conflict
Erm.... Fakir? I suggest to stop putting up things like romance and conflict and carp. I really think that you should leave the story be and let the author just decide forthemselves since they made the story. I don't look at this as a typical review thread because seeing at what Fakir's doing, he's just putting in some words that won't really help the author.
BTW I like the Title. xD
BTW I like the Title. xD
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Alright. I really want to see how you guys can be reviewers. And I do Want some criticisms on my story so I'm asking either of you to review or both of you. The link is in my sig.
aeon I honestly dont care what you say everyone is entitled to their opinions and the title was duck's idea
(Apr. 28, 2012 2:44 AM)Aeon Wrote: Erm.... Fakir? I suggest to stop putting up things like romance and conflict and carp. I really think that you should leave the story be and let the author just decide forthemselves since they made the story. I don't look at this as a typical review thread because seeing at what Fakir's doing, he's just putting in some words that won't really help the author.
BTW I like the Title. xD
Aeon, please find out what is going on before you rant. SarabScientist's story is SUPPOSED to be a Beyblade love story. It's only natural for a love story to have romance: this was Fakir's point. Also, EVERY story should have conflict, it just depends on what kind of conflict the writer wants. There can be self-conflict, conflict between rivals, conflict between the protaganist and problems or natural disasters, or conflict between good and evil.
Could you please review mine, check my avatar for the main character.