World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc. Off-Topic Forums Your Creations

A story im working on

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Mar. 22, 2011  3:42 AM
 
Hey guys since everyone is making a story i decided to make one,Tell me if it is good or bad (If it is good i will accept requests ...)
Chapter 1: Whats Wrong?
The sun was blazing across the sky. Dante just sat there with his sunglasses staring at it. Then looked at his Blazing HawkHeart C145WD. "I wish dad was here to teach me to beyblade." Dante muttered. Dante's dad had been arrested for trying to rob a B-Shop. Dad said "Here take Blazing HawkHeart C145WD, and keep it as if it was your own son." Dad said. Those were the last things he heard from his dad since he was arrested. But mom never let me visit him so i'm still investigating why. "Why dad Why!" Dante Cried out pitifully. Then there was a wretched scream in the air. "Huh?" Dante said very confused. Dante began to climb up the stairs leading to the upper surface of the beach. The scream rang in his ears again as he heard it. Then he saw a girl trying to run away from something. "Help!" she said obviously talking to me. "What's Wrong" Dante Called back. "He's destroying my beyblade!" The girl said screaming.Dante rushed over. Getting ready to launch Blazing HawkHeart C145WD with his string launcher. "Where are you.you coward!" Dante yelled. "I'm in the shadows." A voice said laughing. Dante launched Blazing HawkHeart C145WD. "You think you can beat me?" said the voice. "Y-yes" Dante choked. "Think again little boy!" The voice said also adding "Special Move, 1,000 Raptor Strike!" The bey glowed red revealing its uncovered spot. It began to circle Blazing HawkHeart C145WD and then smashed into it stripping it into pieces. "One by one i'll shred your beyblade apart!" The voice said. "Agh!" Dante screamed. "Stop!" Said another voice. "Yomai, leave this boy alone he has done nothing!" Then Dante passed out.
Mar. 22, 2011  3:54 AM
 
awesome sauce!!Character NameTongue_outhantom
Bey:MF Haunting Phantom F135 IR2F
Gender:Boy
Side:Good or bad...doesnt reall matter to me as long as he's a main character.
Age:15
Type:Attack,Left spin
Bey Descripton:The face bolt says Phantom across and black surrounding the word.:The energy ring is black wth a little shade of dark purple there are P's on the left and right side of the energy ring with an oval in the middle of the ring and spikes surrounding the P's.The fusion wheel ,Haunting, is like pegasis energy ring with the wings only their stickin out of the side of the fusion wheel and there are 3 like the points of a triangle and in the gaps are little needles about 5 millimeters long sticking out too.The spin track ,F135, stands for fabric and it wobbles so when the opponent tries to attack the track they'll just fall over,but it's a mystery how it supports the fusion wheel,energy ring, and facebolt.The performance tip ,Ir2f,stands for invisibleR2f.If you take it off of the spintrack it becomes visible again.
Personality:Mysterious,dark,doesn't talk much,doesnt really use his full power,trustworthy until u make him mad,he's always cool and contained even when he loses,doesn't love any thing exept his family,friends,and bey.He knows karate and only battles strong opponents.
Looks like:He has black eyes,brown drooping hair like reiji over his right eye,he's about 5'11'',wears all black,black jordans,skinny jeans,black open sweatshirt with a black t-shirt,and black gloves that the UFC fighters wear.(can he be Yomai's brother and hate Yomai?The guy who defends Dante?)
Mar. 22, 2011  3:58 AM
 
Thanks C-Dub your character will totally be a good guy (Sorta) sounds pretty good and so far i have a good hunch on how they meet
Mar. 22, 2011  4:03 AM
 
very dramatic i like it

Billy Draco

Bey Stamina Volcanic Fico change ad145/ad230 metal defense
Beys moves (2) Burning assault goes around like storm bringer except fire like a attack type on tornado ridge except i gaining stamina the fire is hurting you and then i win because the time is up im too close your bey just got knocked out at low stamina second flame crasher melts the stadium and feroucesly attackes wih fire while other is trapped loses stamina in stadium (note fico is a good meteo l drago (no spin steal thtas what it looks like with the pheonix mixed in)

All about the character the wash out of the famous draco beyblade clan is a disgrace for not living up to expectations with a horrible back story

good guy
Mar. 22, 2011  11:41 AM
 
Okay thanks i'll have to put Billy Draco in some other time Dub's char is going in first so you won't come in until awhile but i will use him thanks ^^
Mar. 22, 2011  11:51 AM
 
You should fix the words,as they looks like sticking together.

LikeGrinante's dad had been arrested for trying to rob a B-Shop.

His dad said ,
"Here take this Blazing HawkHeart C145WD, and keep it as if it was your own son."

Those were the last things he heard from his dad since he was arrested. But mom never let me visit him so i'm still investigating why.

"Why dad Why!" Dante Cried out pitifully. Then, there was a wretched scream in the air.



Also,if you want characters,please watch my story:
The beyblade Galaxy-Heroes saving the entire world.
Mar. 22, 2011  11:59 AM
 
Well so far here it is
Chapter 2 Hey,whos the strongest!?
Dante was waking up when he heard a bunch of gasp's. "Whats going on" Dante groaned. He heard cheering and screaming. "Huh?" Dante said confused. "Welcome to the WolfHowl club." Said a voice. "Who are you" Dante said. Dante still couldn't see clearly so everything was a blob of something. "I'm Frost" She said. "I'm Dante" He said. "Nice to meet you Dante." Frost said giggling. "Heres your beyblade back said another voice. "Who are you" Dante asked. "I'm Rev the one who saved you from Yomai." "Oh well then when can i start training?" Dante asked. "Um, now i guess." "Sweet!" Dante.
"Who do you want to battle?" Rev asked. "Him" Dante pointed to the back room corner. "Oh well um okay then" Rev said stuttering. "Phantom, This boy here wants to battle you" Rev yelled. The boy sat up and began to walk over. He had All black jordans,skinny jeans, black open T-Shirt, Black T-Shirt and black gloves that ufc fighters wear. He had black eyes brown drooping hair and is about "5,11". Then he just got his beyblade and launcher out. "Meet my best friend, MF Haunting Phantom 135 IR2F." "Meet Blazing HawkHeart C145WD." Dante said sneering. "Three , Two , One LET IT RIP" Dante screamed. They bey crashed and clanged into eachother. Striping the piece's of metal of each other. "Enough!" Phantom screamed. "SPECIAL MOVE,DUSK BLAZE SHOT!" Phantom screamed the words. "What, Not Possible!" Dante screamed back. MF Haunting Phantom 135 IR2F was circling around Blazing HawkHeart C145WD and start to smash into it. Soon enough MF Haunting Phantom 135 IR2F began to go purple and black mixed together. Then MF Haunting Phantom 135 IR2F launched Blazing HawkHeart C145WD. "Stadium-Out, And your not strong" Phantom Sneered. "Wanna bet, SPECIAL MOVE BLAZE SHOT!" Dante yelled. "What?" Phantom screamed. "Look up" Dante said. There was Blazing HawkHeart C145WD on fire about to crash into MF Haunting Phantom 135 IR2F "GOOOOOOOOOO" Dante yelled. The huge blast knocked Dante back. With all remaining strength he looked to see who won....
Mar. 22, 2011  12:03 PM
 
Well........
you still didn't fix the format problem .
The words stick together that makes me don't have the urge to watch it.
Still the story is good,but conflicts and plots are needed in the story.
Mar. 22, 2011  12:05 PM
 
lol ~chuckles~ I'll try this is my first so you really can't judge me lol
(Mar. 22, 2011  3:54 AM)C-Dub Wrote: awesome sauce!!Character NameTongue_outhantom
Bey:MF Haunting Phantom F135 IR2F
Gender:Boy
Side:Good or bad...doesnt reall matter to me as long as he's a main character.
Age:15
Type:Attack,Left spin
Bey Descripton:The face bolt says Phantom across and black surrounding the word.:The energy ring is black wth a little shade of dark purple there are P's on the left and right side of the energy ring with an oval in the middle of the ring and spikes surrounding the P's.The fusion wheel ,Haunting, is like pegasis energy ring with the wings only their stickin out of the side of the fusion wheel and there are 3 like the points of a triangle and in the gaps are little needles about 5 millimeters long sticking out too.The spin track ,F135, stands for fabric and it wobbles so when the opponent tries to attack the track they'll just fall over,but it's a mystery how it supports the fusion wheel,energy ring, and facebolt.The performance tip ,Ir2f,stands for invisibleR2f.If you take it off of the spintrack it becomes visible again.
Personality:Mysterious,dark,doesn't talk much,doesnt really use his full power,trustworthy until u make him mad,he's always cool and contained even when he loses,doesn't love any thing exept his family,friends,and bey.He knows karate and only battles strong opponents.
Looks like:He has black eyes,brown drooping hair like reiji over his right eye,he's about 5'11'',wears all black,black jordans,skinny jeans,black open sweatshirt with a black t-shirt,and black gloves that the UFC fighters wear.(can he be Yomai's brother and hate Yomai?The guy who defends Dante?)
whats the special move because i had to make one lol (Read chapter two if you don't know your special move)
Well i haven't got any new replys so heres chapter three
Chapter 3 BURNING ASSAULT.
Dante crawled to the edge of the stadium. "I won" Dante shrieked. "N-n-no ..." Phantom said. "How could i los-" Phantom was about to say but he passed out. Blazing HawkHeart was wobbling only to lose all of its spin. "Ugh that was intense." Dante said. Struggling to stand up. "What Happened!" Frost asked. "Epic Battle, thats all." Dante called back. "Well atleast nothing is really damaged." "Do you need help getting up?" "No but lets treat Phantom first." "Okay good idea" Frost said. Still struggling to stand up he noticed someone was watching him. He just stared and stared at him. "Who is he?" Dante muttered. "Huh who's what?" Frost asked. "What i didn't say anything." "Anyway i'll catch up with you later" Dante said. Dante began to walk over to the mysterious person. "Who are you" Dante said cautiously. Billy, Billy Draco" The boy said. "And i challenge you Dante!" He added. "Your on bring it!" "
"Three,Two,One LET IT RIP" The boys screamed."Volcanic Fico ad145 GO" Billy screamed. The beys smashed into each other. Stripping and chipping off chunks of metal from their beys. "Agh, Too strong." Dante said "BUT NO GIVING UP HOPE!" "GOOOO" Dante screamed. "Heh, BURNING ASSUALT!" Billy screamed. His roar ringed around the stadium. Volcanic Fico ad145 began to spin around the stadium with a flare behind it with orange speckles of light. "GOOOOOO" Billy's scream brought Dante back to reality. "Agh!" Dante said as his beyblade was knocked out of the stadium. Dante was knocked back to. "H-how not possible" Dante said groaning. "Whoa you were good!" Billy said. "Thanks" Dante said standing up to retrieve. His beyblade. Clash Clang Clatter. Then a scream rang into the stadium. "WHAT THE" Dante and Billy said.
Mar. 22, 2011  9:22 PM
 
Okay Guys im gonna be posting um Chapter 4 soon because i need some new characters so right now help me Out!!!
Mar. 22, 2011  10:59 PM
 
ok i got the move:
Haunting Soul StrikeTongue_outhantom's symbol flashes and Phantom's bit beast(Grim Reaper) comes out ans scrares the carp outta the opponent and just literally tears apart the other bey and it's spirit and the opponent has a nightmare that looks like his or her soul is being taken so it weakens them.If that doesn't work look at next move.
Absorbing MoveConfusedpirit stealerTongue_outhantom's eyes turn red and lifeless and his bey glows white and just steals spin and looks as if it's invisible and only Phantom can see the bey.
Mar. 22, 2011  11:33 PM
 
Okay thanks and uh get some other people to send in some requests to!!
Mar. 23, 2011  2:46 AM
 
Sorry for the long wait guys but here it is. CHAPTER FOUR
Chapter 4 HellShadow
"Let me go" Frost screamed. "Why should we,we've only come to take your soul. Said a voice "No you'll never have it! Frost said. "Wanna bet, launch her beyblade into the stadium now!" The voice said again. "No Frost Drakkix!" Frost screamed. "Mellonami Raptor 145WB ATTACK NOW!" The voice said. Mellonami Raptor 145WB was about to smash Frost Drakkix but all of a sudden MF Haunting Phantom appeared out of no where. "Leave Frost alone" Phantom said. "I've been waiting for the day to beat you so you would never return again!" Phantom said. "Why do such a harmful thing brother!" The voice said. "Don't call me brother anymore Yomai!" Phantom said. "Ha make me BROTHER!" Yomai teased. "Grr GO MF HAUNTING PHANTOM 135 IR2F SMASH HIM!" MF Haunting Phantom 135 IR2F charged at Mellonami Raptor 145WB. "Heh i'll take your soul. Yomai said. The beys crashed and grinded each other until Yomai said. "ENOUGH,CERTAIN KILL RAPTOR SMASH BARRAGE!"Yoami Yelled. Mellonami Raptor glowed black duplicating itself. Four duplicates smashed Phantoms beyblade into the air. Two more duplicate smashed Phantom higher into the air. The real Mellonami Raptor 145WB was at the top. "RAPTOR SMASH STRIKE!" Yomai yelled. Mellonami Glowed red then pulverized MF Haunting Phantom into the ground making it lose all of its spin. "I-I-I feel so weak." Phantom said dropping to the ground. Just then Dante bursted through the door,Staring at disbeilf as a shadow came out of Phantom. Phantom's Soul picked up Phantoms bey and looked at his Souless body. Then crushed Phantoms Beyblade, creating a new one. MF Soul Phantom 135 IR2F. Then he disappeared. "I'm gonna go train" Dante said going out to the stadium.
And to the people who are still reading this, THIS IS A VERY IMPORTANT SPEECH. I NEED SOME NEW CHARACTER TO PUT IN SO PLEASE SEND EVEN OVERLOAD THIS THING WITH CHARACTER REQUEST NOTE:THE FIRST 5 WILL DEFIANTLY MAKE IT
Mar. 23, 2011  4:13 AM
 
Name: Shin
Bey: Kinetic Dragon SC145MWD

Description: The facebolt depicts the Chinese zodiac sign, Dragon. The clear wheel is red and the design is pretty much a pegasis clear wheel combined with a pisces clear wheel. So the clear wheel is a red clear wheel with edges shaped like wings and shows a shark swimming through the ocean. The Kinetic fusion wheel is like the Rock fusion wheel but the edges are spiked. SC145 is Spiked Claw145. It's like C145 but the claw are facing downward and a little bit sharper. The Claws are now adjustable to the angle you want if you launch it.It's useful if you want to hit your opponent. And last MWD is just simply a wide defense tip but just metal and its "wideness" is decreased.

Character Description: Shin always wears a blue jacket and a yellow-japanese styled shirt. He wears grey jogging pants and white sneakers with red lines. His hair is like Yugi's hair but a little bit shorter and is color black. His personality is like Ginga's and has an alter ego whose personality is like Sasuke. He is kind and confident in his skills.

Special Move: Kinetic Shredder- Kinetic Dragon will charge towards the opponent's bey and then Kinetic Dragon, using the spikes on the metal wheel, will shred the opposing bey's metal wheel causing a lot of damage and loss of spin.
Name: Shuu

Bey: Typhoon Tiger UA85RS

Bey Description:The facebolt depicts a tiger. The clear wheel is green and has a design that shows the fangs of a tiger. The Typhoon is left-spin metal wheel and has a shape useful for attack. It has no recoil. It also has spikes. UA85 is Ultimate Attack Height 85 is low and has ZERO recoil and since it is low, the spikes on the Typhoon metal wheel can hit the opponent's track. (or maybe even the tip)
And for RSF you probably know it.

Character Description: Shuu always wears a chinese-styled black jacket with a yellow japanese-styled shirt. He also wears a wristband on his right hand. (The wristband is heavy.) His pants are black jogging pants and his shoes are yellow with blue stripes. His hair is like Super Saiyan Goku's hair only black with some streaks of yellow. He is generous and overconfident in his abilities but is a great blader to back it up.

Special Move: Typhoon Strike- Typhoon Tiger will circle the stadium fast. Then, it will jump up into the air and it will drop down and smash the opponent's bey. If strong enough, it might break the facebolt of the opponent's bey.

Hope I helped by giving you characters. Smile
Mar. 23, 2011  5:28 AM
 
I only skimmed the first chapter of your story. If I were to say one thing, I'd say that the chapters are waaaaaay too short. I don't know if it's only like that for the first chapter, but nothing really happens, and what does happen is wrapped up into a single sentence instead of written about in story-like fluency. Try adding in more details to flesh out your story. Developing Dante as a character and telling his backstory could probably pretty easily be a several page chapter (in terms of Microsoft word), with him hearing the girl at the end to cliff hang for chapter two, and with the battle taking up that chapter or something. Just suggestions though. Overall it's not bad, but not good either, y'know? either way just keep at it and you'll improve with time :3 practice makes perfect~
Mar. 23, 2011  11:42 AM
 
Potter:Thanks for the characters i'll have to use them for sure
Rhoder:Thanks i've been thinking that to so hopefully i'll make a chapter that will have alot more details
Here you guys go Rhonder hopefully this is good
Chapter 5 Training
"Come on who wants to battle!" Dante yelled. Everyone was just staring at him with wide eyes. No one wanted to battle Dante. They just sat there like logs. "Is EVERYONE here a coward." Dante yelled. With that someone got up and came up to Dante. "What did you call us." He said. "C.O.W.A.R.D coward" Dante said. "Alright your on" He said. "By the way i'm Shin." The boy said. "Three, Two, One LET IT RIP!" Both boys yelled. The beys launched into the stadium almost instantly started grinding and smashing each other. Blazing HawkHeart C145WD was about to smash into Shin's Kinetic Dragon SC145MWB but he disappeared. "HA, Don't think a little charge move is going to work!" Shin sneered. "What can I do, he's way to fast." Dante thought. "I've got it." He said. But it was way to late for thinking now. "SPECIAL MOVE KINETIC SHREDDER" Shin yelled. His beyblade charged toward Blazing HawkHeart C145WD. "Like you said a charge attack won't work!" Dante yelled. "This is different" Shin said. His bey was giving off electric sparks from the back of it and increasing it's speed. "GOOOOOO" Shin yelled. When his bey crashed the tree's around them shuddered. The ground shaked. "SPECIAL MOVE, FLAME STREAK BLAZE!" Dante yelled.Blazing HawkHeart glowed a Light so bright it blinded everyone. All you could here was ching's coming from the beyblade smashing up Kinetc Dragon SC145MWB. The light faded and everyone chould see again. The stadium was scorched with ashes and black. So was Kinetc Dragon SC145MWB was cracked and scorched black to. Shin picked up his beyblade and watch a piece of it crumble. "N-no why would you do this to me!" Shin said Pitifully. "Hey you mess why my brother you get messed up to!" another voice said. "Shuu..." Shin said. "Don't he'll destroy your beyblade to." Shin said. "Yeah right you just watch!" Shuu said. "But my beyblade it needs fixing." Dante said. "What ever go fix it" Shuu said. Dante walked down the wooden halls. He took a left to and enter the fixing room. "Hi there Dante" Frost said. "Hi Frost why are you here?" "Our bey fixer Xhaust wants me to help him since my beyblade is gonna take almost a week to fix" Frost said sighing. "Oh well can you fix my beyblade for me?" Dante asked. "Sure" Frost suddenly was interested. After an hour later Frost came back with Blazing HawkHeart C145WD. "Here you go Dante" Frost said. "Thanks Frost,Tell Xhaust i said thanks to" Dante said. Dante walked back to the Training room. It was empty. "What ever i'll find Shuu and beat him next time." Dante said. Dante was going back to his room. Until he had a bag over his head.
Mar. 23, 2011  12:10 PM
 
Thanks for using them XXXBeYsTeAleR!
Mar. 23, 2011  12:41 PM
 
Hey guys tell me what you think and what could be done and not be done thanks
Mar. 23, 2011  10:53 PM
 
Any more Character requests?
Mar. 24, 2011  12:09 AM
 
Cool story bro! I gotta see the outcome

Character: Curtis Joe, The Leader of the Canadian WBBA Representative Team "ShadowKlan"
Bey: Revenge Nemesis XT140EXF (Extreme Typhoon 140 Eternal Extreme Flat)
Special Attack/Move: Vengeance OverDrive

Description: Curtis always has a New Era Cap on either backwards or wearing it front/normal (in battle, when he wears the cap forward it means Nemesis is in a stamina/calm form - when he twists the cap back he flies into a rage and Nemesis goes into attack form and obliterates the other Blader's bey)
Always wearing a black jacket (either a leather skin-tight one, or a black vested hoodie), Skinny Jeans, and Skate Shoes
His Bey Spirit is VERY strong matching Gingka's - he has a long history with Revenge Nemesis like Gingka has with his beloved Pegasis

Revenge Nemesis has two clear wheels (this is going to be a 4D Bey) one underneath that holds the upper one in place because the upper clear wheel moves in a fan-like fashion (free spinning) so that if a bey tries to attack from above, the clear wheel's blades would slice it up or create strong winds higher so the other bey would be blown away. The Metal Wheel has an outer ring of long blades stretching out like a spiders arms going out or a starfish's legs curling out. The inner Metal Wheel stays stationary because the other metal is free spinning. The spin track (Extreme Typhoon 140) is made up of many sharp blades that push wind up when spinning, making the upper clear wheel spin even faster. The tip would be EXF - Eternal Extreme Flat (making it a defense/stamina AND Attack Bey) Oh yeah, the whole bey is pretty much clear - the "metal" wheel being made up of strong crystals and everything else clear as in to camouflage in with the stadium, until the "Revenge" strikes the other bey and it's all over for the other Blader.


Character: Mattias Joe (brother of Curtis)
Bey: Tempest Leviathan VF135WHF (Vacuum Force 135 Wide Hole Flat)
Special Attack: Behemoth Tsunami Extermination

Mattias is the younger brother of Curtis - and instead of being close to his brother they are rivals. Always competing against each other at every match (with Curtis usually ending up as the victor). Both of their Beys, Nemesis and Leviathan, are legendary - they discovered them while they were hiking in the Himalayas. They had been camping in a cave and they saw murals of Beyblades. They got curious and started chipping away carefully at the stones trying to free some of the anciant paintings from the walls to take back with them as souvenirs of their trip. Instead, after chipping away, some of the stones fell out, revealing words that they could understand: "Legendary Beys. Only wield if powerful enough or strong enough willpower." Of course Mattias and Curtis took their pick. There were 4 More (Titan Kronos, Hunger Typhon, Illusion Calypso, and Crescent Artemis). They brough back all the legendary Beys so their closest friends who Bladed could feel the power - of course, none of the others could match Nemesis' or Leviathan's power but they were still more powerful than any other beys on the planet. Curtis' mission was to set out for the origin of the legendary Beys - Mattias went the opposite direction and started competing for his own selfish reason. Curtis and his friends (who had the 4 other beys) found out that the 6 Legendary beys had fallen from the sky and got embedded in the Himalayas for millions of years.
Mar. 24, 2011  12:10 AM
 
they're two chapter 4's!!
Mar. 24, 2011  12:30 AM
 
i KNEW THAT LOL
Mar. 24, 2011  2:07 AM
 
thanks man its epic did i include the Change 145/230 AD or defense function in my beyblade well if i didnt here it is and still its really cool your story the 230 145 function is the swich of heights the ad is affected too it is a normal ad145 but when i'm trying as had as heck in a very very intense battle i will use 230 making m stamina doubke and give me more fierce attacks and defense i will explain even more later
Mar. 24, 2011  3:46 AM
 
Okay thanks Billy I will use this for another chapter ^^
Chapter 6 Hostage.
"Let me go!" Dante said. "HaHa, Keep sqiurming COWARD" The voice said. "That voice... Shuu!" Dante said. "Thats right i'm gonna make you pay for what you did to my brother!" Shuu said angrily. "It was his fault" Dante said. "Doesn't Matter!" Shuu said. Dante was still struggling with the bag over his head. "Get this stupid bag off of my head!" Dante yelled "Whatever, It doesn't matter anyway" Shuu said. "We're here." Shuu said sternly. "Did you bring him?" A voice said. "Yes,Brother here he is" Shuu said. "Good, were's his beyblade." Shin said. "Right here" and with that Shuu took Dante's beyblade. "No,Blazing HawkHeart C145WD!" Dante said his blood pumping with anger. "Hand it to me" Shin said. "Yes,Brother." Shuu handed the beyblade to Shin. "Now i'm gonna keep you and your beyblade hostage until I beat you." Shin said. "What why!?" Dante asked starting to relax. "Because my beyblade is messed up so i'll just use yours." Shin said. "Grrrrr" Dante growled. "Come along Shuu leave this COWARD to himself." Shin said. "Okay be right there." Shuu grabbed his beyblade and ran out the door.
"Stupid Beyblade!" Shin yelled. "Blazing HawkHeart can't win for anything!" Shin said. "How could you have lost,Blazing HawkHeart C145WD beat you before so why can't it win again?" Shuu asked. "I don't know" Shin said. "But i'm just gonna get rid of it." Shin said. "What why, lets destroy it infront of Dante." Shuu said. "So much for fun" Shuu said sneering. "Good idea, why didn't I think of that" Shin said. "Because I wont of it first" Shuu said. "HaHa, So true my little brother",With that he patted him on the head. Billy was watching Shin and Shuu closing. "Huh, no it couldn't." Billy said. "Its Dante's beyblade!' He said his head filling with thoughts on what to do. "But let me finsh this he muttered." "SPECIAL MOVE BURNING ASSAULT" Billy yelled. Volcanic Fixo ad145 began to become a huge fire ball circling the stadium. Then Volcanic Fico ad145 crashed into the opponents beyblade sending it flying. It flew across the air so fast it almost took down the whole wall. The beyblade was lodge in the wall with its metal wheel scratch and scorched black. "N-no!" The boy said. "It's okay now i gotta run" Billy said. Billy ran full speed to catch up to Shin and Shuu. "How should we destroy Dante's beyblade?" Shuu asked. "Hmm, you could use your special move over and over again." Shin said. "Good Idea" Shuu said. "Not if i can help it" Billy said. "What" Shin and Shuu said. "Billy what are you talking about!" Shin said. "Don't act stupid Shin, Why do you want to destroy Dante's beyblade!" Billy said angrily. With that Shin and Shuu ran through the door. "Come back here you cowards!" Billy yelled. Billy ran through the door only to find himself infront of a stadium. "If you win we give you Blazing HawkHeart C145WD and Dante back. "If you lose you, you get lost" Shuu said. "Deal" Billy said. "Three, Two, One LET IT RIP" Shuu and billy said. The beys grinded each other. They bashed and smashed into each other. "I'll finsh this now, SPECIAL MOVE BURN ASSAULT!" Billy said. Volcanic Fico ad145 turned into a fire ball and smashed Shuu's beyblade but didn't win. "HaHa, That won't work" Shuu said. "GO" He yelled. His beyblade started to go at unbelievable speeds smashing Volcanic Fico ad145. "Agh!" Billy yelled. Volcanic Fico ad145 was losing metal from its metal wheel. "Hehe i made it up myself, I call it the Metal Stripper." Shuu said. Volcanic Fico ad145 was at its last strip of metal. "GO" Shuu yelled. Shuu's beyblade smashed into Volcanic Fico ad145 and it was defenseless. "Agh!" Billy yelled. Dropping to the floor billy began to grow angry. "N-n-no!" Billy yelled. "Please not now!" Billy screamed again. "AAAHHH!" Billy screamed his eye turned yellow and his bey glow white reforming itself. "Volcanic Fixo ad230 GO" Billy yelled with a demon voice. Vocanic Fico ad230 smashed and pounced on Shuu's Beyblade. "Huh!?" Shuu yelled. Billy's eye returned to normal scared and frightened. "W-What happened" Shuu asked.
Mar. 24, 2011  12:06 PM
 
Hey guys here you are.
Chapter 7 Free, OH COME ON!
"Y-y-you destroyed it!" Shuu said shuddering. "But why?" Shuu asked again. "Leave now or else!" Billy screamed. Trying to do his special Demon voice effects. Shin and Shuu ran out of the room leaving him and Dante.
"Dante,Are you okay" Billy asked. "Yeah... But what happened with your eyes back there" Dante asked. "Well long story I rather not talk about it" Billy said looking away. "Okay I understand" Dante said. "Why don't we just battle?" Dante said. "Okay It could get my mind off of some things." Billy said. The boys found a stadium to beybattle at. They readied their beys. "Three...Two...ONE LET IT RIP!" The boys yelled. Volcanic Fico ad145 was in the middle of the stadium. Blazing HawkHeart C145WD was going to smash into Volcanic Fico ad145. "GO BLAZING HAWKHEART!" Dante yelled. "Volcanic Fico ad145 DISAPPEAR!" Billy yelled. The bey disappeared and it was nowhere to be seen. "Huh, how did you do that?!" Dante asked. "GO VOLCANIC FICO AD145" Billy said not hearing Dante. Volcanic Fico was on the edge on the stadium smashing into Blazing HawkHeartC145WD."Agh!" Dante yelled. "GO CLOSE RANGE BURN ASSAULT" Billy screamed. Volcanic Fico ad145 pushed Blazing HawkHeart C145WD out of the stadium threw the room's wall and out into the open. "Hey come back here!" Dante yelled. His bey was covered over a flurry of feet. "Move it move it move it!" Dante screamed. "Found you!" Dante yelled diving for it. But another hand clasped it. "Oh hey you found my beyblade!" Dante said. They realized who it was
Read the next chapter to find out who!
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