Tournament and Technique. Still needs a bit of improvement.
[story]Bob, the Bey Breaker. (chapter 10 is up)
Poll: how's the story?
good |
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5 |
not the best i've ever read |
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3 |
around the middle |
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0 |
not the worst i've ever read |
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4 |
terrible |
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4 |
Total: | 100% | 16 vote(s) |
i fiished chapter 5!
In chap 5 who will Ally face up with?
I don't get it. In chap 4 the sheet said Ally and now on Chap 5 it say Sokka. Whats up with that?
Chapter 6 is complete!
You need to make your chapters longer. And is that all that happenned in the fights? They end to quickly.
Chapter 8 is done! after 8 chapter's this one is DEFINATELY in the top 10. and things get a little romantic between a couple characters too.
Yeagh! CHAPTER 9 IS UP! great story bro.
Awesome story!I just can't believe they kissed...and you should write more details in your chapters because we don't know how ally and mike met...
chapter two.
she heard a battle from the woods, wanted to be a random person, and jumped in!
are you just gonna cut it short at chapter 9, bro?
well, with school and stuff and also work... i have very little time to write the rest of this.
:0 awsome story it was the best can u make another one put me in it my name is zeronie my bey is dark fireblaze i dont know the track but its the same as dark wolfes spin track and a sf perfomance tip
p.s.im the leader of team lightning launchers
p.s.im the leader of team lightning launchers
so.. dark fireblaze df145sf? cool. is it ok if i just shorten it to zero?
Seems as if chapter 10 is up. nice work E.
That is exactly what's up. Working on chapter 11 after number 10 of my other story.