chapter will Jason be able to beat aargo?
pm me or beybladefoever about your answer
pm me or beybladefoever about your answer
(Sep. 18, 2012 7:08 AM)wingedpegasus Wrote: This story has way too much dialogue!. You should have a bit less taking and more action. Describe what is happening and describe how they are or why they are doing the things that they do! Also add more background story to the character or else no one will know why they are doing those things.(other than that everything is good)
(Sep. 18, 2012 2:22 PM)beybladefoever Wrote: Yeah pm it to me or kyoya