really why do you think that

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season 3 will be a movie type story

Season two ended too quick because season 1 was 8 or9 chaptrs

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ok then i'll make it longer or try to

Just make the next seaso longer

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should i make a different type of story like change the people but keep the beys

This thread saddens me.

Alright.

First of all. You have too many dialouges. Shorten the amount.
Second. The dialouges are extremely short. Try to extend them.
Third. You don't describe your surroundings enough. Describe.
Fourth. Your grammar, it kills me. Read or at least eat a dictionary.
Fifth. Your characters are very underdeveloped. Please, give them at least a little background

And finally. Your chapters are too short and only contain what I stated above.

Either correct these problems, or quit writing.

I beg of you.

For the sake of humanity.

first of all do u have a teacher license dont think so, so be quiet i dont think this is grammar class

This thread saddens me.

Alright.

First of all. You have too many dialouges. Shorten the amount.
Second. The dialouges are extremely short. Try to extend them.
Third. You don't describe your surroundings enough. Describe.
Fourth. Your grammar, it kills me. Read or at least eat a dictionary.
Fifth. Your characters are very underdeveloped. Please, give them at least a little background

And finally. Your chapters are too short and only contain what I stated above.

Either correct these problems, or quit writing.

I beg of you.

For the sake of humanity.

first of all do u have a teacher license dont think so, so be quiet i dont think this is grammar class

ohhh you just got schooled in the art of "smack talk"

He is right though...and only make constructive posts please.

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this story is good for a first start