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Samuel's Revenge!(A beyblade story)Accepting character requests!

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Jan. 16, 2011  2:23 AM
 
Here it is!!!Chapter 10:Questions?

There was a pause."What if I say yes?"Ethan asked."We'll go adventuring for 3 reasons.1.So I can settle the score with the Equinox.2.To become the best team ever and be friends.and 3.To settle everyone else's score with people who have hurt other people's family."I explained.Ethan had a certain flare in his eye.I could sense it!"...Yes...Yes i remember when they hurt my family so YEAH i'll join"Ethan said intensly.I smiled like the grench."Welcome to Time Dynasty...Ethan Nightly!"I said putting my hand out.He shook it."Ethan Nightly is officialy a member of Time Dynasty!!!!"Ethan said to the crowd.The crowd roared espicially Jeff."Well Sam we got another member!!!"Kevin said to me."Yep...but I don't think Jeff can be a contender.He's too young.I mean think abot it.This tournament was divided!We need to get another member!"I worried sick."Where are we gonna find another member"Kevin said.All 4 of us worried as we went text tournament.It Indionapiolis,Indiana.We talked it over and we were going to walk this one.When we entered the City border a blader popped out of nowhere and launched at us!!!!!!

Comment!!!and RATE AND VOTE!!!!
Jan. 16, 2011  2:27 AM
 
awesome chapter man.oh yeah i posted another chapter
Jan. 16, 2011  2:33 AM
 
I'm so pumped!!!!
Jan. 16, 2011  2:34 AM
 
fo what
Jan. 16, 2011  2:36 AM
 
Chapter 13 on urs of course!!!!!!
Jan. 16, 2011  2:38 AM
 
ohhhhh
Jan. 16, 2011  3:37 AM
 
this is an awesome story
Jan. 16, 2011  3:57 AM
 
coolio bro =D id say it sounds pritty cool =D
Jan. 16, 2011  4:15 AM
 
I wonder who the blader is

Also read my story i need characters http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-The-adventures-of-Jp
Jan. 16, 2011  4:35 AM
 
Well i made it OBVIOUS on post #122!!!!
Jan. 16, 2011  4:36 AM
 
hey c-dup chapter 14 is up in my story
and can you plz have me use eclipse drahellecs his special move is in chapter 14
its called eclipse oblivon
Jan. 16, 2011  4:43 AM
 
No man i'm sorry but it's allittle toooo complicated...sorry Uncertain
Jan. 16, 2011  5:38 AM
 
im ready for the next one
Jan. 16, 2011  3:14 PM
 
Here it is folks!!!!!Chapter 10 part 2:Frienemy then the enemy!!

When we were about to walk into Indionapolis,Indiana for our next tournament it was a four laddered one so me,Kevin,Ethan,and another member of our group can win!So like I was saying when we're about to cross the city border a blader jumped out of a bush and launched at us in mid-air!Ethan steeped up and launched at the guys bey."LET IT RRRIIIPPP!!!"Ethan said.The beys smashed against each other."Get out of here...B-Killas!!!!"The boy said.He was about our age."What did you just call us?!?!??"We all said."I called you the B-Killas!!Now beat it!!"He said.Me,Kevin and Ethan looked at each other then looked at him."SPECIAL MOVE...B-"Ethan was interrupted."SPECIAL MOVE!!!SOLAR ASSALT RING!!!!!!"The guy shouted.All of a sudden his bey harnested the energy from the sun and then attacked Comet Dranzer furiosiously!Then it smacked Dranzer in the sky and came down...FAST!"IT AIN'T OVA!!!!BLAZING COMET RAINSTORMMM!!!"Ethan shouted.While Dranzer was getting slammed up there until his Comet's kicked in!Dranzer and the other bey plunged into the earth but the comet's hit the other bey JUST as hard!Then there was an HUGE explosion like World WarII!When all the smoke and anticipation cleared it was DRANZER who kept spinnin'!!!I looked at Ethan and he was hanging on barely so was the other guy."Y-yes!*cough*I won!"Ethan said and with that he was knocked out.I gently settled him down and rushed to the other guy."Are you ok??!?!?!?!?"I asked."Comet Dranzer.oh i know who u guys are!You're Time Dynasty!Can i join."He asked.His little eyes just dying to know."Yeah man you can join on 1 condition:What's your and your beys name?"I asked politely."Joseph Phillip.Just call me JP though.My bey is Solar Tiger C145HF."And with that he was knocked out.I put his bey back in his hand and weiredly he clutched it.So did Ethan with his bey.We took them to the hospital on our shoulders.I was holding JP and Kevin was holding Ethan.We were walking to the tourney that's when another person came to us."Oh come on!!"

TO be continued in the next chapter!!
(Spoiler:2 beys will evolve in ethier the nxt or seconth chapta afta this one!!!!
Jan. 16, 2011  8:28 PM
 
change my bey to eclipse sirius cw85sr2f with eclipse oblivon as its special move.sirus is an angel with 6 wings in armor not covering his head though and the clear wheel is six wings in a circle(for those of you who read my story this is a huge SPOLIER
so just the clear wheel,face bolt,and special move are differnt
the special move eclipse oblivion is in chapter 14
Jan. 16, 2011  8:52 PM
 
good thing i dont hate spoilers!
Jan. 16, 2011  11:03 PM
 
Name :Nagato
Bey: beyfixer
bio: wears goggles has a grey shirt and cargo pants. perky and excited
good
Jan. 17, 2011  1:40 AM
 
uhh urrr i need someone ELSE who HASAN'T made a character.
Jan. 17, 2011  3:11 AM
 
change my bey to eclipse sirius cw85sr2f with eclipse oblivon as its special move.sirus is an angel with 6 wings in armor not covering his head though and the clear wheel is six wings in a circle(for those of you who read my story this is a huge SPOLIER
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so just the clear wheel,face bolt,and special move are differnt
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the special move eclipse oblivion is in chapter 14
Jan. 17, 2011  3:22 AM
 
Uhh urr one evolution per bey sry Uncertain
Jan. 17, 2011  3:35 AM
 
no i mean turn shooting star pegasis into eclipse siruis
Jan. 17, 2011  3:48 AM
 
So not Eclipse PEGASIS?Alright so basiccaly siruis is an angel?That's stupid to me but ok
Jan. 17, 2011  3:57 AM
 
well read chapter 15 in my story(which i just posted) and you will find out why i choose siruis but you can choose bewteen eclipse pegasis or eclipse siruis whichever you want to use it is your story
Jan. 17, 2011  4:41 AM
 
ALRIGHT HERE IT IS!!Chapter 11Confuseday Wha!!!!!!

"What do YOU want!"I said angrily."To help you of course!"Said the boy."We don't need any more bladers on our team!"I said to him."I'm not a blader!I'm a bey MODIFIER!'He said."I do simulations and fix beys not battle!"He explained."I'm acually Modoka's little brother!"He said.I believed him too,he had the glasses and the laptop but he wore a gray shirt and cargo shorts like mine."Ok.What do you want?And what's your name?"I asked."Nagato.Now let's get your hurt friends to the WBBA infirmary if you let me join ur allience!"He said."Alrigth ok ok!!!Just help our friends teammate!!"I awnsered.?Nagato led us to the infirmary and Ethan and JP got healed just in time to sign up one for each block."Here's the way it's goin down guys!I hear Equinox entered too!"I told them."Sayomi entered mine,Bryce entered in Kevin's block,JC entered JP's block,and an unknown member is in Ethan's block.Let's get ready!"I said to the team"And me and Nagato will cheer u guys on!"Jeff cheered."Ok let's see how many points everybody has!I have 4,000!"I said."I have 3,000"Kevin said."I have 1,500!"Ethan said."I have 1,350 points!"JP said."Together that's...9,850 points!We each need 50,000 points to get in battle bladers!This is just gettin' started after this it's separate ways until battle bladers!"I explained to everyone."Even me?"Jeff asked."Jeff if you want to travel alone you can or travel with one of us.That's a long time from now so let's win this tourney!"I said confidently.And with that we went into our blocks locker room to begin our last tourney together!

After this their will be 4 more parts!!
To be continued!!!Comment rate and vote!!
Jan. 17, 2011  5:15 AM
 
I hope Jp is actually good
Not a sucky person that thinks he is good
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