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Poll: Should I make more stories?
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BATHE ME IN YOUR POETIC FUNNESS |
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It's going good,but like Takasu said you shouldn't switch through POVs so many times.It can get really confusing
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And, it feels too confusing with the switching POVs. Its hard to understand. The changes in location are confusing...
I think you should try to make it less confusing...
Quote:It's going good,but like Takasu said you shouldn't switch through POVs so many times.It can get really confusing
I'll try shifting it to mainly Mike's POV
PS. Michael=Mike
Sorry for the long time no post, but I'm back! With more fun chapters this time!