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(Aug. 30, 2012  12:47 PM)Ajitumari Wrote: [ -> ]“And this is how to make an orange,roll.

You forgot a quotation mark here.

And, it feels too confusing with the switching POVs. Its hard to understand. The changes in location are confusing...

I think you should try to make it less confusing...

It's going good,but like Takasu said you shouldn't switch through POVs so many times.It can get really confusing

Quote:You forgot a quotation mark here.

And, it feels too confusing with the switching POVs. Its hard to understand. The changes in location are confusing...

I think you should try to make it less confusing...

Quote:It's going good,but like Takasu said you shouldn't switch through POVs so many times.It can get really confusing

I'll try shifting it to mainly Mike's POV
PS. Michael=Mike

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