(May. 20, 2020 8:51 PM)Xtend+ Wrote: (May. 14, 2020 1:14 AM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: Did you ever think about why your fanfic might not be getting recognition? I have some obvious reasons I can share as a writer, but I dont want to offend anyone in case theres unwarranted harshness
Theyre general reasons, really
Can you please tell me? I myself have a fan fic which only had 1 other person post on it.
I will be blunt here since this is a fanfic-discussion thread and people are allowed to criticize upon request:
* Lack of spacing. When starting a new dialogue (the " " things when people talk), you start a new paragraph by pressing "enter" on the keyboard. As far as I see it, you chucked all dialogue into multiple huge paragraphs, which makes it hard to keep track of who is who. Thats why people leave threads and decide to look for something else to read on WBO
* Unoriginal character. The protagonist in your story is just like any other Blader 193719731 unexperienced writers wrote about on WBO. Theyre the typical happy guy who likes to Blade and find an opponent. Im not saying yoiu should restart your character, but you really have to work on making them more interesting. Im pretty sure people here would love to read about someone different, so challenge yourself to see how far you can go
* The dialogue seems lifeless. Characters dont really say anything interesting and all I can imagine is that they have the same voice. Its just " 3 2 1" and Beyblade talk and nothing else, really
Sorry if this seems a little too tough, but this is the constructive criticism you asked for. Your choice to treat it seriously or not at all, but its there sinced you asked
Call me either Sands/Suns! That one female Beyblade fan
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