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Beyblade: Legends
NightWolf7919

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Hi everyone! I'm NightWolf and I've always had this great idea for a story. I'll be posting the first episode of Legends soon and any constructive criticism is welcome!

I will not use your characters until the National Tournament. All characters WILL be accepted and used, but later!

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Dec 30 2010 10:57 PM
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NightWolf7919

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Beyblade: Legends

Episode 1: Origins: Beyblade!

It was his first time in Tokyo, a poor boy from Kyoto coming with his family on vacation. Vacation, more like escape. As he apprehensively traversed the wide city streets, he mentally compared the environment of the metropolis to his poor slum known pejoratively as the Narrows. He shuddered at the memories, the horrible scarring experiences that he had gone through. This city was different. In Tokyo, people laughed. In Tokyo, people weren't killed on the streets.

Suddenly two children shoved their way past him and ran into what looked like a fun house on the side of the street. The boy read the sign: Toi Syoppu
He shrugged and entered the colorful emporium. Inside there were planes flying on strings and toy trains running obediently on plastic tracks and countless boxes of amusing machines and contraptions.

"Why hello there!" said the shopkeeper in perfect English, "What's your name?" His blond hair fell in wisps and his green overalls were stained. However, despite the man's age, his smile was that of a 10-year old boy.

"R-Reiiji" he said timidly. The shopkeeper began to say something, but he was interrupted by the screams of several boys in the back of the shop. Reiiji and the shopkeeper walked over to the mob of children to see what all the commotion was about. As they approached the crowd, Reiiji noticed they were crowded around a large dish.

"Haha, theres no way your blade could ever beat mine!" one boy said.

"Oh yeah? Go, attack!" the other boy said. Reiiji fought his way into the mob to take a closer look at the action inside the dish.

"Wow," he said in fascination as he watched the two tops clash. Eventually one overpowered the other and the crowd cleared, but Reiiji stayed, still amazed.

"So, you like Beyblades do ya?" asked the shopkeeper. Reiiji nodded his head ecstatically, preferring not to speak English.

"Reiiji!" a man shouted from the outside the shop. Suddenly the door swung open and in came Reiiji's father, Tsukuyo. He clumsily walked to the back of the store.

"What are you doing here?! I told you not to wander off!" he shouted in slurred speech. Then he grabbed Reiiji's arm and stormed out of the shop.

"You're going to be punished for this. Severely punished. I told you to wait outside the back of the pub" Tsukuyo yelled. Reiiji wasn't fazed by this reprimand in the least. He had found a new purpose in life. And it's name was Beyblade!

Next on Beyblade: Legends

Episode 2: Origins: Entering the Regional Tournament! Part I

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Dec 31 2010 12:20 AM
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Furious

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Nice story! Keep up the good work. Are you taking character requests?

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Dec 31 2010 01:04 AM
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NightWolf7919

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Hmmm...Okay. But I'll have to set some conditions. Any character requests must have beyblades that don't have bit beasts. Just describe the blade that the person has and I'll see if I can get the character through.

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It's pretty sweet. Kinda short, but sweet.

Is Reiiji gonna get a beyblade or will he stay a spectator?

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Dec 31 2010 01:09 AM
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NightWolf7919

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No, he's going to get a beyblade alright. Or rather...he's going to make one

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Dec 31 2010 01:11 AM
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Nice vocabulary used, not something I usually see in a fiction on this site to be quite honest.

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Dec 31 2010 01:34 AM
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NightWolf7919

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(Dec 31 2010 01:34 AM)REtread Wrote:  Nice vocabulary used, not something I usually see in a fiction on this site to be quite honest.

Lol, thanks. What do you think of the story though?

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Dec 31 2010 01:41 AM
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Good story are you gonna be taking requests on what beyblade he's going to have or
have you already decided?

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Dec 31 2010 01:54 AM
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great job on the story so far, so whats gonna be his bey?
Dec 31 2010 01:58 AM
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NightWolf7919

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Sry guys, I kind of already decided, and Ryuki, he's gonna have at least one before he gets his main blade

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awesome work!

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Wow!!! That's really good!!!! Can't wait for the next installment.

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NightWolf7919

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Beyblade: Legends

Episode 2: Origins: Entering the Regional Tournament! Part I


Finally, it was complete. It had taken days, weeks, and months of scrounging up pieces of plastic and metal off the floors of Beyblade arenas and trying to find ways to assemble them, but it had all been worth it, in the end. In Reiiji's hands he held the final product. In his hand he held his Beyblade.

It had been at least 4 years since the fateful vacation to Tokyo which had changed Reiiji's life. He recalled that pleasant memory in the Toy Shop and smiled. But he knew not to celebrate yet. He had to put his blade through the final test.

He opened a drawer and took out his crudely made launcher. He inserted the ripcord into it and then attached it to his Beyblade. He anxiously put his finger into the ripcord and counted down.

"Tsuri, Tu, Wan, Gooo Shoot!" He quickly pulled on the ripcord and his beyblade went flying into the scratched metal bowl. This was it: the moment of truth. One of Reiiji's older creations had fallen apart the moment it touched the bowl. Another had disassembled in midair.

With a loud clang the tip made contact with the bowl and the Beyblade began spinning. Reiiji anxiously waited to see if it would break down. Steadily, the spin began to decrease, ever so slowly until it came to a permanent stop.

"Yatta*!" he shouted with joy. He grabbed his blade and hoisted it into the air. Finally he had his Beyblade. Finally, he could fulfill his dream. Reiiji's glee was short-lived, however, for his victory cry had attracted Tsukuyo's attention. Reiiji's father stormed into the room holding a beer bottle in his left hand.

"What are you...doing in heere..." he babbled. Reiiji quickly pushed the launcher under his bed and hid his Beyblade.

"N-nothing Daddy...I just found something I lost a long time ago" Reiiji meekly replied.

"Did you...do your homework?..." he asked.

"Y-yes Daddy...like always. Don't you see me doing it when I get home from s-school?" he said.

"Well do it again! We don't have room for drop-outs in this house!" he mumbled.

Drop-out. The word echoed in Reiiji's head. He was quite the opposite. In fact he was top of his class and he excelled in school. Unlike most children living in the Narrows he went to school in downtown Kyoto in the Kyoto Academy for Higher Education. His father resented this as the cost was well over what they could afford, but they managed to scrape by nonetheless.

"Get out your books, you good-for-nothing!" Tsukuyo yelled. Reiiji quickly took out a piece of paper and pretended to write. After a while his father fell asleep and Reiiji put away his books. Then he climbed out the window with his beyblade and set out for downtown Kyoto.

*"I did it!"

Next on Beyblade: Legends

Episode 2: Origins: Entering the Regional Tournament! Part II

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Dec 31 2010 04:56 PM
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if i have a character does the beyblade have to be made with original or real parts?
Dec 31 2010 08:15 PM
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NightWolf7919

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Not at all

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Dec 31 2010 08:19 PM
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Great i like it Smile if you are taking character requests heres one John bey Lightning L-Drago 100RF clothing jeans sneakers ans a t-shirt with L-Drago's face on it. brown hair. Gets a little crazy in battle.

Just try to defeat the forbidden Bey. Sorry if i spam. Unhappy But if i do please pm me so I can fix it. I dont want to spam again. Heart of a Lion. Body of a Dragon. Let It Rip!
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NightWolf7919

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(Dec 31 2010 08:19 PM)LDRAGO KING Wrote:  Great i like it Smile if you are taking character requests heres one John bey Lightning L-Drago 100RF clothing jeans sneakers ans a t-shirt with L-Drago's face on it. brown hair. Gets a little crazy in battle.

Can you make it a Japanese name? And no bit-beasts for now unless you can wait a looong time. If you want it to be in the next 7 or so episodes, make it without a bit beast, just describe it

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LDRAGO KING

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name Yamato what do you mean no bit beast

Just try to defeat the forbidden Bey. Sorry if i spam. Unhappy But if i do please pm me so I can fix it. I dont want to spam again. Heart of a Lion. Body of a Dragon. Let It Rip!
Dec 31 2010 08:37 PM
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NightWolf7919

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I mean it doesn't have a spirit inside of it, unless you can wait until the National finals which is kind of a long ways away

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