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beyblade the storm has been broken ( beyblade story)

Feb. 03, 2011  9:58 PM
 
hey guys i am writing a stroy and you guys can give me people to put in the story and i might put them in.

ok here it gos.
Max wakes up in his bed the sun is shining though the blinders. he heres his sister say max you late to the big tornament! Max jumps up grabs his stone hephestus and runs out the house. he gets up to the local arena and finds out what his battle will be. his challanger will be, jack battleslicer and his bey sythe hydes. the battle starts and the beys collide in the air there is a big explosion and when the dust settles...

tell me if i should keep going i need three people and then i will finish chapter one.
i am going to keep going any ways


... max look around the arena is destroed it looked as if every one dissapeared like they were never there. jake is gone but hydes is spinning in the stadium and hephestus is buried deep under the stadium max trys to get hephestus out but he is stuck max pulls and flys back when hephestus becomes free. max grabs hydes and hephtus and runs off. max walks home andfinds his mom and dad are gone even his sister but the car is still there. he runs next door and there gone to he gos to the mall and its compleatly empty. max thinks about all those twilight zone shows he used to watch and thinks wow thins must be a dream.

end of chapter one. what do you think please comment!
Feb. 04, 2011  12:52 AM
 
wow good story so far
i want to hear the next chapter like,realy,realy,realy bad thats also how bad i want a beypointer
Feb. 04, 2011  2:04 AM
 
Um you are not using past tense with past tense sentences...
Feb. 04, 2011  2:28 AM
 
ok chapter to

max hears rumbling and sees many beys flying his way. max shoots bothe beys with his dooltron launcher. hydes flys though the air and slices strait though all the beyblades he picks up the nearest bey and looks at it. its his best friends bey is says posiden on it. then he sees him jack but he is difforent he is bigger and stronger. jack says max good to see you haha i think thats my bey you have there. and i want it back! max says battle me first! ok then out of his pocket he pulls out a bey that has black mist floating around it. jack says meet sythe cronos! max says ok meet stone hephestus! 3 2 1 goooo shoot! the bey dance around each other but never touch then cronos speeds up and flys at hephestus. hephestus explodes and the face bolt flys up and lightnig hits hit. jack walks away. the face bolt lands then kids with biks go riding down the street cars drive by and people can be seen watching tv in the living rooms.


end of chapter three.
Feb. 04, 2011  2:41 AM
 
is there any other chapters?
also can i wriite a story here?
Feb. 04, 2011  2:42 AM
 
yeah i am working on one and please dont put it in this thread but you can make a new topic and write one there.
ok heres chapter 4

max picks up his face bolt and looks at it its difforent it says zues. max thinks zues isnt that gingas kids bey? hmmm i need to talk with aliose. max walks to alioses house and aliose scans tyhe face bolt and says well you goy your self a zues beyblade know my friend i think you got lucky and the beyblade stars made hephestus evolve... here since every part exsept the face bolt broke i will give you this. alioso gives max a gold beyblade that shines in the dim lighting thats the only other parts of zues exsept for the face bolt so i guess i will give it to ya. max and aliose smile and max gos running out the door with his new bey lightning bolt zues!

ebd of chapter 4
Feb. 04, 2011  2:58 AM
 
will he destroy the guys bey/what happens next?
also ok but can i pm youthe story? i mostly asked because iwanted to show you.
Feb. 04, 2011  3:02 AM
 
ok yeah sure! pm it to meh and i will tell yea what i think!
max runs down the street and run home he tells his mom and dad ( that also reapeared) that he was going on a journy to defeat jack. his little sister yell i want to come toooo!!!! maxes mom says max please alice with you her and her athena need some good training! max says yeah... sure mom... alice jumps up with exsitment and yells lets go athena! mom would it be ok uf i could bring more friends with me? sure hony call owen akio and bobby. ok mom... on the phone: guys you want to come all three boy yell yeah! all of the kids meet up at the park when a gang of blader force them to battle them. they all launch there beys bobby yells go love affrodidy! owen yells go sea posiden! and akio yells go demi hephestus but before any of the kids bey touch maxes bey breaks the other teams metal ring and they all fall apart the gang runs away and the kids all stare at max and zues!

end of chapter 5
bye the way i am accepting new characters
the team walks to the edge of the bey forest witch is were every one meets there first beyblades. then out of know were max spotts jack and yells hey jack battle? jack turns around and tounches his cronos then max launches lighning bolt zues zues and cronos slames into zues and zeus fly up into the air and comes down charged with power then cronos eems togrow blades on the sides and slashed atzues but zues spins 2x faster and creats a static bolt and it shoots strait a cronos,cronoses fusion wheel flys off and hits zues, zues seems to almost grabe the ring and flings it at the other bey! cronos explodes and zueses bit beast yells father you have been killed justr like the last time it is over go crawl back to tarterus! maxes cell phone rings and it says slowen higane. max opens the cell phone and says hello. slowen says max i would like to ask you if you would like to join me and my father ginga to finaly defeat ldrago destoy once and forall! pluse you can bring any one you want Smile max heads off to coma village the higanes and max all walk into the woods ready to battle in the biggest fight of there life.
Feb. 04, 2011  10:00 PM
 
No offense, but I hate this story, it's too messy.
Feb. 05, 2011  3:49 AM
 
for the charecter that im e-mailed you

name:sam:
bey:burn leone 85 wd
bey description:burn wheel is painted metalic red the leone face is red and the clear wheel is a clear red,the track is clear red and the wd tip is clear ice-blue
charester description: just like keyoyu exept there is a red leone face and skin color is tan,and his clothing is black.
special move:leone fire rinnger its track winds up as it circles the stadium and the bey creates a vacume wich then jumps in the air and comes down like pegisis star blast attack,then is coverd in fire and hits the bey head on, then the track lets loose and spins twice the speed it was launched[the track only will let off if the bey uses its special move.
bio:sam is very cool, acutly extremly nice,but hates losing
his life was very bad he always ran aaway ans his mom and dad got a divorce and hated sam.
Feb. 05, 2011  4:14 AM
 
ok cool i will keeep going.

max and slowen are told to go around the woods because many bayblades meet here and we need to be at are best. ginga gos thought the forest. max and slowen walk and make camp at 9:00 they sleep ( lol guh Smile )
slowen wakes max up at 7;00 and they get moving. they fianly get to the end of the forest and ginga is stitting there waiting... max and slowen say wow your really fast... oh well... ginga says guys here i destroy mountin ldrago should be here. but reandomly and kid dressed in mostly black runs out of the forest. two beys are chasing him... ginga shoots and bigbang pegasus hits both beys shattering them. two large men walk out looking ready for a fight. the biggest takes a swing at ginga but ginga just pokes him on the back and the man faints the other man trys the same thing but also fails... The boy walks up and bows thank you sir. ginga says no prablamo! we ask the kid his name and he replies Sam. we tell him our names and we make camp sam stays the night and when we ate dinner we told him what we were doing and offered to help he sais sure! the next day they start up the hill bye the time they are on the top it is 4:00 pm. a small cave opening is on top they all walk in. we all se a man about gingas age sitting inside of a purpalish rock his bey is right next to him. the mans eyes open and symbols on his arm appear. the rock breaks he loads his launcher we launch ours we all say 321 gooooo shoooot! all of our beys hit each other lighning bolt zues and burn leon both hit ldrago destroy. ldrago flys up in the air and two other bey fall down with it there is know a lightning ldrago and a meteo ldrago to now. all the ldragos slam into burn leone and leone flys though the air and never comes down next it lighting blot zues they hit it and it flys and is stadium outed pegasus trys to stay in but also is shot out... but then sam yell leone fire rinnger! he flys down and hits lighning ldrago then flys strait into meteo ldrago then flys up again and lands strait on the last ldrago and ldrago breaks into one million tiny parts the energy flows out of every part and dissapers forever we think...

end of stoy or is it... Smile
Feb. 05, 2011  4:36 AM
 
put quotess (These things ------->"") around your sentences when some one talks. EX: "Don't give in!" Joseph said, "Go! Majinken!"
name: Joseph
Bey: Manslayer Batousai SA145F
Bey Bio:His bey (not batousai, but Bakushin Bull DF145BS) was given to him by his brother Al who got killed by an organization call Darkness Devouring. Joseph hides this fact. SA is for Sword Attack, it is a free spinning track with for swords for upper attacks
Bio:His bro died because an organization killed him. Ever since then he has been destroying every bey he fights. One day, his bey lost, so he smashed it, and stole the other bey. He regregts destroying Al's memento. He has not lost since.
Special moves: Majinken(SA145 throws the opponent out.) Akisazame(SA145 rapidly attacks the opponent until he has nearly lost his spin then attacks him head on.) Hitenshouku(SA145 throws opponent in the air and Batousai flys up and slams the bey down.) Tenshou Kenhouzan(SA145 throws bey up in the air then Batousai keeps on attacking from the ground.)
he;s GOOD (after destroying his bro's memento, he began blading for good.
Feb. 05, 2011  4:40 AM
 
yeah i know i forgot... oh well i stink at writing in school so i not to great here i just want to get my story out...
Feb. 05, 2011  4:52 AM
 
its still a good story tho dont get me wrong
Feb. 05, 2011  4:58 AM
 
hey at least he stoped writing like.. joe look around room as shoe jump from wall
Feb. 05, 2011  5:06 AM
 
new bad guy the slayer please let sam defeat him[funny my name is sam]

name:the slayer
bey:axe sayer
beys special move: axe slayer!!!!!
axe slayer disipears and usaly hits the opponet from behind causing a stadium out
it also glows after words.
bio:has had a very evil life is part of the dark nebula he is also brothers with ryuga
ryuga oringally had axe slayer but wasnt good with it and had no special move. but little did ryuga know that axe slayer was more powerfull than lightning ldrago and meto ldrag combined sams ultimate gaol was to defeat the slayer.
charicter discription: all black wears a mask and never likes to talk outloud.
Feb. 05, 2011  5:43 AM
 
I have something to say (sorry for off-topic) but leone=best are you the same person as Leone=best?
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Nightmar...LADE-STORY
referenc ^^^^
Feb. 05, 2011  6:23 AM
 
well theres no posibilaty of that for 3 reasons
1:i do not no how it is possible to have two acounts?!
2:since you said leone=best arnt you leone=best? that means that its the same pearson because you cannot have two same user names.
3:i have already tried somting like rock leone =the best or somthing and it wouldnt work.
please continue with youre storys they rock! Smile
also if you need help for ideas or somthing[even spelling]
then dont bother to pm me not only that i like helping people[not that im a hippie,im not that much about *peace* and all that carp]
also [sorry for being off topic] but im not going to be hee tomorow that much im at my dads house and have other things to do im not sure though

might get him to order a bey pointer off of ebay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that would be awsome.
Feb. 06, 2011  2:59 AM
 
i saw someone with ur name but with sol blaze as an avatar
Feb. 06, 2011  5:29 AM
 
? thats weird because how could somone have the same username as me?
mabye he spams.
Feb. 06, 2011  4:56 PM
 
he has a capital L
Feb. 08, 2011  4:27 AM
 
seryiosly hotskunk can u finish the story?
Feb. 16, 2011  3:23 AM
 
ok guys time to finish... ok so it is 40 years later many a bey called lightning zues took over the world woth his master Arasnow. few bey survied one called bomb soosanoo. his master Akio is hiding from a group that works for arasnow call the beyblayers there leader Slayer. Akio runs out his house with his bey. slayer and his crew see him and jumps off the building they were hiding in. the team launches they beys at akio and akio klaunches his all they bey hit in mid air breaking to of the beys slayers bey flys at soosanoo and slices off one part of the bomb wheel soosanoo all most hit s the ground but flys in to all of the other beys sneding out to more now the only one left is slayers bey. it is an all out battle but akio uses his beys spical move and breaks slayers bey. slayer cries like a little girl and fall down. akio walks over and hand cuffs him on a poll and and asks questoins. " so were is your boss? " I am not gonna tell you " akio slaps slayer hard! " ok ok i will tell you he is in the cave inside pegasus mountin. " " you will take me slayer take this bey and your coming with me lets go. "

end of this chapter.
Feb. 17, 2011  2:34 AM
 
ok also can you allow pm on your account so i dont have to e-mail you?
Feb. 17, 2011  3:10 AM
 
you need to work on lengthening your chapters
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