This is my first story I might upload more if u guys and I want

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zilon slowly walked down the dark road hoping to find a place to rest after the attack.... It happened earlier that day, he was walking to his blade practice dojo and suddenly an object burst through the sky and before he even comprehended it, there was a giant explosion at the military base. He immediately ran to the dojo where he found the others looking out in the front yard , looking at the burning military base miles away, zilon joined them and everyone was in so much shock they never even noticed that he came, then master Talio told them to go inside and hide as helocopter flew through the sky.
" Call your parents, I think it's terrorists, we need to evacuate to somewheres safer" commander master Talio,
"do u think its the dragons?" Asked Zilon. "I don't know" said master Talio, as they all took out there phones. All of them tried calling there families but the phone didnt even ring, "the phone aren't working master , wat should we do?" A student asked,

" we just need to wait" replied the master. Then a sound of a speeding car rushed through the road and drove in front of the dojo. The master immediately told the students (only 5 of them) to hide in the utility close, seeing as the dojo had no backdoor. They did as he said , and hid, but it was to small no matter how much they squeezed. Zilon volunteered to hide else where and ran to the masters office/room and hid under his bed which had a over hanging blanket. He suddenly heard footsteps and angry screaming shouting commands to the master, master Talio refused saying

" u can't invade my dojo without me taking atleast one of you down" then he heard a Battle and in under a minute the powerful master was defeated, then the attacker searched the dojo and found the students. As they screamed, Zilon had to hold back from screaming. And after they left he ran out the door and ran but as he reached his house his father , the mayor, and familie's mansion ( his father was a wealthy mayor ) had been invaded and was filled with attackers. So he ran and ran and found
himself wandering down a random road at night

That was chapter one I hope u enjoyed, can u guys review it for me? I kinda just wrote it off the top of my head ( meaning no planning). I will probaly introduce the beyblades in chapter 2

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Lol really good so far I like the plot and how it comes together
Really creative

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Thanks lol I tried to make it kinda original

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Great plot and story theme just need to work on your length and spacing like jacolal story It doesn't look neat if its much together but since its your first story you did well its just beginners mistake.
Any yes I mean make it long

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Ok, while it's ok to use text talk in real life (I still think it's lame), never use it in a story. Also it's kind of hard to follow, and it's all scrunched up. Press enter before a new character speaks, and it'll already be way less cluttered. Just a few tips.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

Thanks lol I thought I was making it to long @ultramarine ok ill try not to do that

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Just listen to What tips ultamarine and I say And You will have an top tier story like ultramarine.

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All this feedback is muchly appreciated and I hope more people read and give feed back, the second chapter will probaly be posted tommorrow if anybody was wondering

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Story seems decent, just fix the grammar, spelling, and organizational problems.

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Ok thanks ill try and fix the organization in the next chapter

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

welll... its okay. There are some grammar parts which can be improved on such as punctuation and capital letters. Furthermore, the chapter seems a tad short, you can try and develop actions or put in more detail in them. work on this, and I'm sure this'll be a good story.


sent from my phone, please excuse any spelling mistakes.

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Natsu smiles at his opponent, ready for combat. His reawakened spirit shines through his body, as he lights his fists. He jumps, as he breathes in the flames of hell itself, his lungs expanding rapidly... His 2 opponents stare in fear of their ferocious enemy and ready themselves...


Members I wish to battle:

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1. Switchblad3r
   
2. XKai_DranzerX
   
3. Bularieleone
   
4. Kyler_the best
   
5. Luck
   
6. Blitz
   
7. Manicben
   
8. Akio314
   
9. Rnold201
   
10. Kai-v
    
11. Shining God MS
    
12. Ryukiba
    
13. Hakumen
    
14. SoulNinja
    
15. AZL
    
16. UltimiteOrion
    
17. Ingulit
    
18. Ga'Hooleone
    

I try and help the WBO, so here's some important threads, and some important posts. I haven't been on for a while, so pm me on updates please!! [spoiler]

1. BEYWIKI
   
2. The beywiki project
   
3. Difference between duo and phantom
   
4. WBO community rules
   
5. Comprtitive MFB discussions
   
6. Build me a combo
   
7. Competitive Heavy Metal System Combos
   
8. Misconception of R vs R2F and possibility of LRF
   
9. Bey Marketplace
   
10. Beginner's guide to custom MFB construction
    
11. A new, Experimental RuleSet?!
    
12. RS vs RDF vs RB vs CS vs RSF
    

Wow DK awesome story, but a few beginners mistakes like, some of the grammar,puncuation and if you can space it out a little that would be good, but apart from that it's really good.

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Thanks guys ill fix try to fix all that in chapter 2

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Chapter 2 guys

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After walking all night , to scared to rest, Zilon found himself at the west edge of the city. Here there were attackers patrolling the border and where a American flag used to hang there was a flag with a Asian dragon coiled around a beyblade Zilon had never seen before. As he squatted behind a parked car, a strong hand covered his mouth and the other hand around his shoulders, then a second teenage boy pulled up his legs and the two lifted and carried him away to abandoned walmart.
"Who are you?" Zilon said in a scared voice.

"What's left of BBA in this city" replied a boy with jet black hair. "Why did bring me here?" Asked Zilon, "Because there was a patrol car coming your way, Me and james are BBA agents, we were looking for a place where there weren't patrollers and we came across you" said the black haired kid said.
How do I know you guys aren't one of them, at that moment Zilon pulled out his bey, blizzard polgorg with a blue 3 segment grip, with a matching string launcher.
"Whoa, chill kid, just put down the bey" said James finally. "No, I don't even know who you are" replied Zilon. The black haired boy then took out his bey and launched in a flash.
"No, not now drake" said James .
Zilon launched in reply to drake launching, "go polgorg" said Zilon . His bey attacked and made contact but but drake's bey didn't even move.
"What happened?" Said Zilon
"My doom mole has a metal free spinning fusion wheel so it takes no damage at all" replied drake, after he said that his bey's fusion wheel stop free spinning and spikes popped out and it attack polgorg and KOed it.
"You could have just asked for our BBA badges" said drake as he showed Zilon his.
"Oh, yeah, how do u plan on getting to safety ?" Said Zilon

how was it? It's kinda short sorry about that



Doom mole:
CW: it has a clear wheel with one side spikes and one side smooth making it very unbalanced
MW: it can go in attack mode which is when the spikes come out and it is not free spinning
Track: wc145 ( wide circle) it has a wide and circular non gimmicked track
Bottom: EB ( eternal ball) it is a free spinning ball
Beast: a mole


Blizzard polgorg:
CW: it has a clear wheel with four ice Phoenix heads coming out each side
MW: I has a wheel with six spikes coming out the sides
Track: it has a b145 track ( blade) that are extremely sharp
Bottom : rxf ( rubber extreme flat) the name says it all
Beast: an ice Phoenix

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

You know you can just put the next chapter in the OP right?

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Chapter 2 guys

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After walking all night , to scared to rest, Zilon found himself at the west edge of the city. Here there were attackers patrolling the border and where a American flag used to hang there was a flag with a Asian dragon coiled around a beyblade Zilon had never seen before. As he squatted behind a parked car, a strong hand covered his mouth and the other hand around his shoulders, then a second teenage boy pulled up his legs and the two lifted and carried him away to abandoned walmart. "Who are you?" Zilon said in a scared voice. "What's left of BBA in this city" replied a boy with jet black hair. "Why did bring me here?" Asked Zilon, "Because there was a patrol car coming your way, Me and james are BBA agents, we were looking for a place where there weren't patrollers and we came across you" said the black haired kid said.
How do I know you guys aren't one of them, at that moment Zilon pulled out his bey, blizzard polgorg with a blue 3 segment grip, with a matching string launcher.
"Whoa, chill kid, just put down the bey" said James finally. "No, I don't even know who you are" replied Zilon. The black haired boy then took out his bey and launched in a flash.
"No, not now drake" said James .
Zilon launched in reply to drake launching, "go polgorg" said Zilon . His bey attacked and made contact but but drake's bey didn't even move.
"What happened?" Said Zilon
"My doom mole has a metal free spinning fusion wheel so it takes no damage at all" replied drake, after he said that his bey's fusion wheel stop free spinning and spikes popped out and it attack polgorg and KOed it.
"You could have just asked for our BBA badges" said drake as he showed Zilon his.
"Oh, yeah, how do u plan on getting to safety ?" Said Zilon

how was it? It's kinda short sorry about that

Yeah... a tad short. As Ultramarine said before, try and leave a gap every time it's a new speaker.

EG:

"Who are you?" Zilon said in a scared voice.

"What's left of BBA in this city" replied a boy with jet black hair.

This'll make it look neater, and lengthen your chapters.

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Natsu smiles at his opponent, ready for combat. His reawakened spirit shines through his body, as he lights his fists. He jumps, as he breathes in the flames of hell itself, his lungs expanding rapidly... His 2 opponents stare in fear of their ferocious enemy and ready themselves...


Members I wish to battle:

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1. Switchblad3r
   
2. XKai_DranzerX
   
3. Bularieleone
   
4. Kyler_the best
   
5. Luck
   
6. Blitz
   
7. Manicben
   
8. Akio314
   
9. Rnold201
   
10. Kai-v
    
11. Shining God MS
    
12. Ryukiba
    
13. Hakumen
    
14. SoulNinja
    
15. AZL
    
16. UltimiteOrion
    
17. Ingulit
    
18. Ga'Hooleone
    

I try and help the WBO, so here's some important threads, and some important posts. I haven't been on for a while, so pm me on updates please!! [spoiler]

1. BEYWIKI
   
2. The beywiki project
   
3. Difference between duo and phantom
   
4. WBO community rules
   
5. Comprtitive MFB discussions
   
6. Build me a combo
   
7. Competitive Heavy Metal System Combos
   
8. Misconception of R vs R2F and possibility of LRF
   
9. Bey Marketplace
   
10. Beginner's guide to custom MFB construction
    
11. A new, Experimental RuleSet?!
    
12. RS vs RDF vs RB vs CS vs RSF
    

Ok I made the changes jacola said

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Good alot better now, I thought the part "abandoned walmart" was really funny lol, but yeah as jacolal daid space it out and make It a tad longer and it'll be great.

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Thanks, lol I thought that would be good cause Walmart has everything u need to survive lol

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Yeah true it is really funny lol.

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I added the beyblade description in my post with chapter 2

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Threads you should read:

Pony King ? God, can't believe I typed this. I have to put my keyboard in the dishwasher now...

dude are you a gangster

LOL did you asked Midnight to take that pic?

When a monochrome picture is posted on WBO, it doesn't mean that it's always from Midnight.

I wouldn't trust someone with that many Cancer faces.

Well damn.

@[The Supreme One] Soul Baez V145AS

There's nothing else really to do or say except wait for the Superbowl, but I'm only here so I don't get fined.



Time. *gets up and leaves*

We won't have tournaments in the winter. Cause we are not one of those Canadian people where they just go outside like nothing happened to their hands.

i like my coffee like i like my men B)



i don't like coffee

I never have.

*Ginga*.. you're drunk bro... go home.. : )

Tbh SGMS & BDMS are kinda worthless.
MSUV is a far better spent investment; DGMF is even better IMO.

Um what? You're just saying that because you're a dragoon fanboy...

Why would I be suspended????

HMS summarised:




Anything not Tornado Type S:  Wolborg will leave you #rekt




Otherwise:  Go crazy with Ultimate Grip Flat 




For something less cookie-cutter:  Jiraiya sure is sexy

Is Wolborg 2 useless for competitive play?

Extremely useless. 
Now, if you come upon one I'll just PM you my address so you can throw it away. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I wasn't looking for Beyblade Underwear, I swear

Hey guys sorry for wait this is chapter 3

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we ready?" Asked Zilon
"Yup, where's James ?" Replied drake
"Using the bathroom for the third time in the last hour" said Zilon thats when James came out of the Walmart bathroom and jogged towards them in the launcher aisle
"Wooh, gotta get that frozen apple pie out" James said as they immediately head toward the exit,
They hesitantly went down the rode toward a rather small red car, drake walked up to it and launched his at the window, shattering it.
"That's vandalism!"said Zilon
Drake looked at him with a "are u kidding me face"
He then unlocked and hot wired it
"Get in"
They all got in and drake drove at Near 70 miles per hour, as Zilon and jame held on to there inside door handles, they reach the eastern edge of the city and came face to face with a attacker patroller in a jeep.
Drake just sped up and slightly turn to the left to try and get past it but they couldn't. The collision's power pushed drake in the steering wheel, knocking him unconscious and his head bleeding, Zilon held drake's head, but he wasn't alive. As Zilon realized it, he told James to go out and make a run for the woods outside the city and that he was going to finish the dragon's once and for all, James did as he said and ran, Zilon walked up to the patrollers as they got out of the car, feeling dizzy. Zilon aimed at them ready to launch, but they aren't going to go down easily, they launched at each other in synergy. The blades clashed, but Zilon won easily and sent then running for reinforcements. Zilon got in the jeep, still on rampage and drove to the dragon's HQ (his fathers mansion) and drove right into the side of the house. After this and the air bags smacking him in the face, he cooled down from the rampage and walked out of the car and stumbled/ran to the woods outside of the city and saw a moving figure in the now night time "James, is that you?" He said in a hurt voice
"Yeah, Zilon" James replied after seeing him and helping him walk to a assortment of tents deeper in the woods.
Here's the rest of the city Zilon, the ones that survived getting out of the city I guess......."
"Is my family ok?" Asked Zilon
"Yeah, the survivors got your family back! Luckily mine are safe too"
The conversation went he was getting his injuries treated outside te tents.
Then his family ran, filled with happiness and hugged him.

Epilogue
the dragons were a terrorist group that had grown large enough to take over a city, in this case, the city of decksville. Within a couple days the military was able to take down the dragons and restore the city, but to this day, decksville citizens are always grateful to the Walmart that helped the three boys survive ( we salute u walmarts).

Edit: would u guys like me to do another?

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