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Chapter 1-
I walked on the dirt road. It lead into the forest. Difficult to decide where it lead to. I had only been in it once with my dad. Then my whole tribe was dead except 5 people- Marci, Jacko, Ansha, Agiudo, and me. It had only happened a week ago. I don't know who it was. There was just a big explosion and everybody dead. It was to powerful to be caused by a human- It was caused by Beyblades. Well, actually there might be people in the forest. But that's not why i'm in the forest. The real reason is that I'm looking for food. We haven't ate this whole week. But we had drank. Anyways, i decided to get some rabbit meat. The only weapon I had was my beyblade, Warrior Aegis MED125RS. I hid behind a tree, took out my green angle compass, string launcher, launcher grip and pointer, and assembled it together. I cranked my beyblade on and measured the angle. I had to hold it perfectly still. Then i heard a group of rabbits. " NOW! GO SHOOT!!!", I yelled. All the rabbits were startled, but it was to late to run. "Raging Stampede!". And they were all dead. It looked sad, but i was thrilled to have so much food. 25 rabbits! The others were thrilled, too. Without even saying thanks, they dug in. I can't blame them though, because they were all starving. I was, too, so I dug in. We each ate a rabbit. Once we were all done, we decided to talk about the explosion. " We all know it was bladers, but which ones?" asked Marci. " Whoever it was we need to pulverize them!", said Jacko, my brother, angrily. I looked around us and saw my dead parents. I burst into tears. (End of chapter) Please make character requests! Thanks!
Nice!

Name: Valni
Bey: Vulcan Eagle200WD
Speacial move: Eagle Diving Drill Peck: Eagle Starts to attack from above using its spin track
Description: Nice, but very strong and athletic. Wears Green shirt and jeans.

By the way, can he be a good guy?
(Feb. 12, 2011  3:26 PM)storm dranzer Wrote: Nice!

Name: Valni
Bey: Vulcan Eagle200WD
Speacial move: Eagle Diving Drill Peck: Eagle Starts to attack from above using its spin track
Description: Nice, but very strong and athletic. Wears Green shirt and jeans.

By the way, can he be a good guy?

Sure he can. He will be one of the people found in the forest!
Definition o' awesome!! character requests:
NameConfusedamuel Husima
Bey:Core Shark F145 CES
Bey Description:Core:Core is like lightning only it has little fangs and a huge fang like metal in a compartment behind on of the blades and instead of the three blades it's a fin kinda.Shark energy ring:it's like libra only with a shark on the top and bottom and an open jaw (like wolf) on the sides.F145:fangs(rubber) stick down on every time the spintrack gets shorter in length.CES:just like CS but it's plastic is eternal sharp.
Age:15
Special Move:Fang Ripper:the extra fang pops out of it's fusion wheel and shark attacks invisibly and then does a move like pegasis starblast attack if it's still spinning.
Personality:confident in battle and always wants to battle,loyal,trustworthy,couragous too.Side:good
he wears, an layered tee (Black and silver) Black jeans and red skateboarding sneakers, and has black spikey hair like sora and is african american
Samuel excepted. i'm working on the next chapter.
Chapter 2-The Hidden
Jacko and Ansha tried to calm me down, but I couldn't. Everything was gone. My best friend Jacob. My parents Anna and Joseph. My pet dog Orion. My house. Everything was gone. All we had left was a few scraps of wood tilted against some trees, and a few rabbits."We'll all do our very best to track them down and the defeat them beyblade style!", said my cousin Aguido. Aguido sister Marci was walking around then signaled us there. There were footprints! It said "Evil Magma inc." on the footprints. It must have been the names of those jerks. So we followed them. Right when we entered the forest, I heard i cry of help. None of us could resist it. So we went to the rescue. I crouched behind a tree and looked around. It was Valni and Samuel! They were members of the village. Matter of fact, Valni was the chief's son. Samuel was his best friend. They both were shocked and relieved to see us. Both of them had malaria and were starving. They both had drunk, though. We brought them back to our camp so they could eat and we would heal them. We spread some rosemary and other spices and leaves on the ground and ripped our blades. After an hour or two, they were healed. Since Valni and Samuel both had beyblades they could come with us. So we started on our journey again. We bought our rabbit meat and a few gourds of water. After a few days we entered a city. From here there were no more footprints. It was going to get a lot harder.
Here they are!

Name: Kaceo (The guy who does the nararation)
Appearence: Lion skin bib with a skirt sort of thing. His beyblade and launcher holder are also made out of lion skin. Green eyes, Dark black hair that is kinda long. His skin is tanish-brown
Personality: Is normally happy and simple, but is depressed and angry during the story. He loves a good adventure and beyblading. His is very kind to his friends, but he is very wild.
Beyblade: Warrior Aegis MED125RS. Aegis wheel has golden helmets all over it. Warrior metal wheel has miniature swords all around it that can pop in and out. MED stands for Metal Eternal Defense. RS is Rubber Sharp. RS has perfect spin and can jump and land with perfect spin.
Special Move(s): Aegis Power Strike- charges at the beyblade glowing with blue energy.
Aegis Raging Stampede- Bounces up and hits beyblade with it's spintrack.

Name: Jacko
Appearence: Same as Kaceo, but has blue eyes and almost bald.
His bib and skirt are made out of hyena skin. So is his bey and launcher holder. Muscular.
Personality: Jumps to conclusions. Has a short temper, but is smart and kind to his friends. Like his brother, he loves adventures. He dreams of traveling around the world. He also beyblades in his free time. He loves beyblading.
Beyblade: Divine Cassio HB230 MB/MWD. Cassio is short for Cassiopeia. The wheel has a bunch of crowns on it and is bright yellow. HB stands for Hidden Bullets. There are tiny cannon spaces on the spin track that send out metal balls. MB/MWD means that it can switch from Metal Ball to Metal Wide Defence.
Special Move(s): Bow Down- It forces the bey to tilt forward and skim against the stadium
Ultimate Control- It forces the bey to start wobble
Note: Jacko's moves can only be used once

Name: Ansha
Appearence: Even though she lives in Africa Ansha is white. She has long brown hair. She wears a cheetah skin dress. Her bey and launcher holder are also made out os cheetah skin. Blue eyes
Personality: Unlike her brothers, Ansha does not like adventure and travel very much. But she does have a heart for beyblading like the rest of the village. Besides beyblading she likes to run and sprint.
Beyblade: Heart Lapin WS350MES. Heart wheel has hearts on the edges. Lapin is French for rabbit so it's wheel has rabbits all over it. WS350- WS stands for water spray. that means it can send out jets of water. 350 is the tallest spintrack ever known. MES is Metal Eternal Sharp.
Special Move(s): Gracious Pounce- Lapin jumps on the beyblade with great force. Water Hyper Jet- Sends out large amounts of water from the spintrack.

I'll get more done later.
name:neverson
beyblade:solar fireblaze
special move:wraging sun(imagine ldrago's dark move, except the oppenents byblade goes straight into the sun
personality:he's a very happy and strong person, likes to surf and loves to battle
style:wears a jacket with flames and has fireblazes signature on the back, black colored jeans
fusion wheel:solar:looks like the storm fusion wheel, but thinner
Age:14
cool chapter!!If you want me to enter another request just tell me!!
(Feb. 12, 2011  7:59 PM)crimsonpegasus Wrote: name:neverson
beyblade:solar fireblaze
special move:wraging sun(imagine ldrago's dark move, except the oppenents byblade goes straight into the sun
personality:he's a very happy and strong person, likes to surf and loves to battle
style:wears a jacket with flames and has fireblazes signature on the back, black colored jeans
fusion wheel:solar:looks like the storm fusion wheel, but thinner
Age:14
If ya don't mind he is gona be apart of Evil Magma inc. But he will be like Yu but older
(Feb. 12, 2011  9:00 PM)C-Dub Wrote: cool chapter!!If you want me to enter another request just tell me!!
Sure. You can make as many as you want!
(Feb. 12, 2011  10:16 PM)ControL_ Wrote: It's "Accepting Characters" not "Excepting Characters".
Does it change the world?
Here is a character!
Name: Kazemaru Katashiko
Beyblade: Killer Beafowl wd145ewd
Description: Kazemaru, (ka zay ma ru) is a good guy. He wears a purple jacket with the beafowl facebolt symbol on it. He is very friendly but can get angry really quickly.despite his happy-go-lucky attitude, he is actually a very skilled blader. He uses a light launcher2 with beypoint card on a three segment launcher grip.
sweet than:
Name:Hakashi Uzimaki
Bey:Thermal Eagle DR145 MHF(DiamondRagged145)(MetalHoleFlat)
Special Move: Aerial Ace:What it does : Eagle attacks head on 10 times and then he jumps up and hits the opponent from above.
Characteristics:Calm,confident,stratigic, he doesn't really talk a lot. always wants to battle:side:Good
Looks Like:He wears clothes like Ginka only in all black colored...exept the headband logo his has Eagles the shoes are violet and black
(Feb. 12, 2011  10:18 PM)masamuneunicorn Wrote:
(Feb. 12, 2011  10:16 PM)ControL_ Wrote: It's "Accepting Characters" not "Excepting Characters".
Does it change the world?

Actually, the misspelling could turn away potential readers. You may want to change it.
Epic story man!Request:
Name:Xad III
BeyConfusedtealth shadow S(plit)80 S(talk)
Dark moveConfusedplice
Shadow slices the opponent's bey in half.
Xad wears black cape and pants, red shirt
Personality:A lot like my name sake, and a loner.
Shadow face:A picture of a menacing shadow with the word "shadow" on the top
Shadow C.W:Think of a black pegasis wheel then make it sharper and more spickey
Stealth:Think mercury + vulcan then color it in black
S80:A normal 80 but it has a metal ring around it
S:Has a computer chip in that stalks the bey.
(Feb. 13, 2011  11:06 AM)Mizuchi Reiji Wrote: Epic story man!Request:
Name:Xad III
BeyConfusedtealth shadow S(plit)80 S(talk)
Dark moveConfusedplice
Shadow slices the opponent's bey in half.
Xad wears black cape and pants, red shirt
Personality:A lot like my name sake, and a loner.
Shadow face:A picture of a menacing shadow with the word "shadow" on the top
Shadow C.W:Think of a black pegasis wheel then make it sharper and more spickey
Stealth:Think mercury + vulcan then color it in black
S80:A normal 80 but it has a metal ring around it
S:Has a computer chip in that stalks the bey.

Ok accepted. He is going to be on Magma inc.
(Feb. 12, 2011  11:34 PM)Kazemaru Wrote: Here is a character!
Name: Kazemaru Katashiko
Beyblade: Killer Beafowl wd145ewd
Description: Kazemaru, (ka zay ma ru) is a good guy. He wears a purple jacket with the beafowl facebolt symbol on it. He is very friendly but can get angry really quickly.despite his happy-go-lucky attitude, he is actually a very skilled blader. He uses a light launcher2 with beypoint card on a three segment launcher grip.
Awesome! He is going to be in the next chapter!
(Feb. 13, 2011  6:03 AM)C-Dub Wrote: sweet than:
Name:Hakashi Uzimaki
Bey:Thermal Eagle DR145 MHF(DiamondRagged145)(MetalHoleFlat)
Special Move: Aerial Ace:What it does : Eagle attacks head on 10 times and then he jumps up and hits the opponent from above.
Characteristics:Calm,confident,stratigic, he doesn't really talk a lot. always wants to battle:side:Good
Looks Like:He wears clothes like Ginka only in all black colored...exept the headband logo his has Eagles the shoes are violet and black

Coolio! Do you mind if he is Kazemaru's brother.
(Feb. 13, 2011  6:16 AM)Megablader9 Wrote:
(Feb. 12, 2011  10:18 PM)masamuneunicorn Wrote:
(Feb. 12, 2011  10:16 PM)ControL_ Wrote: It's "Accepting Characters" not "Excepting Characters".
Does it change the world?

Actually, the misspelling could turn away potential readers. You may want to change it.
I can't change it. If i can then tell me how.
i don't mind if he's that guys brother.tnxWink
Ok. great! i'm working on the next chapter.
new character
name:zuro hazuno
beyblade:dark ninja
facebolt:a ninja star
special move:shadow shuriken(the beyblade disappears,striking the oppenent thousand times)
style:wears a black t-shirt with a shuriken on it,has ripped jeans with a also wears a black and white scarf
personality:very quiet person,when he does talk its either important or just talking to his friends
(Feb. 13, 2011  3:03 PM)crimsonpegasus Wrote: new character
name:zuro hazuno
beyblade:dark ninja
facebolt:a ninja star
special move:shadow shuriken(the beyblade disappears,striking the oppenent thousand times)
style:wears a black t-shirt with a shuriken on it,has ripped jeans with a also wears a black and white scarf
personality:very quiet person,when he does talk its either important or just talking to his friends

Is he good or bad?
Name:Axel
Bey: Velocity Axelblaze F135I
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Bey Description: the Velocity wheel is Grey and is shaped like Fire in the outside and some rays near the middle in the inside. The clear wheel is Black and is a Flame. F135I(Fireblaze 135 ) is a Red 135 with 12 Flames on it . I(Indistructible) is a WHIRLFIRE. The facebolt is red with a Black blaze best and Flames behind. Is a very powerfull bey, and one of the strongest. Is so strong that even Ryuga thinks he may lose and gets worried, the bey has a way to strike fear in opponents and will crush beys.

Special Move: Eruption Fireblaze. Flames appear in the stadium and then Velocity Axelblaze Makes a giant Fireblaze . The blaze in his track get bigger.

Mirrored world:Axelblaze attacks from all directions but the real one is in the air, after all hit the other bey the real bey charges down for a final attack!

He is a good guy!
HOPE THIS HELPS!!!

Name:Zero
Bey: Mercury Phoenix
Look: Black jeans, grey T-shirt, black jacket, black hair(avatar).

Bey Description: the mercury wheel is Grey and is shaped like Fire in the outside and some rays near the middle in the inside. The clear wheel is Black and is a Flame. F135I(Fireblaze 135 ) is a Red 135 with 12 Flames on it . I(Indistructible) is a Phoenix feather. The facebolt is red with a Black Phoenix and Flames behind. Is a very powerfull bey, and one of the strongest. Is so strong that even Ryuga thinks he may lose and gets worried, the bey has a way to strike fear in opponents and will crush beys.

Zero description: He is a 15 year old guy. No one knows nothing about him. Is a very evil guy. Zero is very strong blader and always is blading. He found Mercury Phoenix when he was 6 years old. He was in a volcano and a giant Flame appeared in front. The volcano erupted and his family died but Phoenix saved him. He was the only one who survived. Since then he is all evil.

Special Move: Eruption Fireblaze. Flames appear in the stadium and then Mercury Phoenix Makes a giant Fireblaze . The blaze in his track get bigger.

Mirrored worldTongue_outhoenix attacks from all directions but the real one is in the air, after all hit the other bey the real bey charges down for a final attack!

He is a evil guy.


PLEASE MAKE HIM CRUSH A LOT OF BEYS!!!
Chapter 3- Kazemaru and Hakashi
The city was very big. Skyscrapers as tall as Godzilla. Apartments as big as King-Kong. It was so big! "We are never going to find Evil Magma inc., Kaceo. Maybe we should just give up." said Agiudo. "I don't think you should," said a cheerful voice from behind the the corner. We were all shocked. "You look like you seen a ghost "said another voice. Then both voices walked around the corner.One had a purple jacket and the other wore black and had an headband with an Eagle on it."I'm Kazemaru and that's my brother Hakashi", said the boy with the purple jacket. Kazemaru had the purple jacket and Hakashi had the black clothing. "Hi, I'm Kaceo, over there is Marci and Ansha, and right next to me is Jacko and Agiudo is on the other side and over there is Valni and Samuel ", I said,"We are looking for Evil Magma inc." Now they looked like they had seen a ghost. "You don't want anything to do with Evil Magma!" said Hakashi warningly. "Yes we do. They destroyed our village," replied Jacko. "Well it's going to be hard to get in, because you need 70,000 points",said Kazemaru. "70,000 points!", exclaimed Agiudo. Then we decided to split up and when we all had 70,000 points, we would meet up. Me, Hakashi and Kazemaru already had 30,000 points. the rest had 20,000. So i took the train to Ozama City. It was the start of a new adventure. (end of chapter)
(Feb. 13, 2011  1:46 PM)masamuneunicorn Wrote:
(Feb. 13, 2011  6:16 AM)Megablader9 Wrote:
(Feb. 12, 2011  10:18 PM)masamuneunicorn Wrote:
(Feb. 12, 2011  10:16 PM)ControL_ Wrote: It's "Accepting Characters" not "Excepting Characters".
Does it change the world?

Actually, the misspelling could turn away potential readers. You may want to change it.
I can't change it. If i can then tell me how.
Go to "Full Edit" and change the title of the thread.
good
Working on next chapter. Beyblade action coming.