(Story)When time stops (Taking charecter requests)

I'm going to continue this hopefully. (Fidio = Vi-di-o)

Comic and cover.
Chapter one
Chapter Two
This is wayyyyy too short to be a chapter. You should make chapters longer.
Chapter one is complete!
I've drawn and editid a cover and a little comic * , can you tell me what you think of them please?

*Not exact same story
Hm... This is very interesting! I'm excited to read what happens next, but you should try to make the chapters a bit longer! I love your drawings!
Well i like the story, but im upset that it goes into the big plot changes so quick. Take things slow.