(Story)When time stops (Taking charecter requests) - Katniss - Jul. 07, 2012
I'm going to continue this hopefully. (Fidio = Vi-di-o)
Comic and cover.
Chapter one
I'm walking through town when my phone rings. It’s Hougen. Gosh, I'm not in the mood to talk but its Hougen. Hougen has nice, short, blond, hair, eyes the colour of the ocean on a nice day and a great smile. I say “Hougen, Its Showtime!â€
That’s our little catchphrase. We made it up when we were in 1st class and he was too scared to go onto the stage. I told him “It’s ok to be scared, the only thing that matters now is that it’s SHOWTIME!†But that was ages ago.
“Hallllo Fidio! Guess what,†He says. “What?†“, The tournament’s today!†“WHAT?!â€I shout into the phone. “Geez! Do you have your motorbike?†“HAH! Do I have my motorbike? OF COURSE!†He shouts. “Ca-“ “Sure! Bye!â€
But then I turn around. I didn’t notice that time had stopped.
“What the heck happened?†I say to nothingness
I look to the big screen but it looks like its paused or something. I am so confused!
“WROOOOM!†YES! Its Hougen! Geez, how glad I am to see him.
“Am I going crazy or has time stopped?â€He asks me.
“Time has s-stopped†I tell him.
“Nooooo, R-r-really?!â€
"Yes you idiot!"I say as I flick him on the head
Meanwhile.......
"Now my workers!"Dr.N Sakuto says to his 'Workers' "I am hear to tell you ,HAH HAH, that we have stopped time!" Dr. Sakuto is a bit mad. He has black hair and dark ,twisted ,black ,eyes.
"Ahhhhhhhhhhhh....Ohhhhhhhh"The 'workers' say
"Oi!You two!"He says as he points to two 'workers'
"Why are you not staring at me! Workers check thier pockets!"
"Nothing sir....thier phones.....are..gone.."The 'workers' say.
"Ohhhh noo...........I must have shipped those phones to those people who....." He has all these 'workers' repairing phones.
"Sir! We shall track them down and destroy them!
Back to Fidio
"Well, I 'appose we go searching for more peo-" Hougen suggests
"BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!"
"Hougen Richinomo and Fidio Vaculo, you must give us your phones or Die"
"Were in for a battle Fidio!"
“3!†The people say.
“2! Were In this together!†Hougen says confidently.
“1! Yep!†I say back.
“LET IT RRRRRRRRRRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIPPPPPPPPPPPPPP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!†We all shout.
“BBBBBBBBBBBOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMM!!!!â€
They all crash together. There were about 50 people now there are 20. Hougen is good, but I’m better. My bey is Thermal Lynx 145WD, his is Rock Sagitario T125 SWD .
“Hougen, how about that joint move we practised?†I say to him. “Not right now, after I do mine.â€He tells me back. “Ok!â€
“Go now Sagitario! Rock arrow!â€He shouts as Sagitario speeds through many of their beys.
“Heh, that’s a good move but not as good as mine! Go now, Wolf! Mega bite!†He says as his wolf smashes into Sagitario.
“No! Sagi- oowww!†His Sagitario flies strait into his stomach and he collapses.
“Hougen!â€I say as I rush to him.
“I'm alright....J-j-just win f-f-f-f-f-for m–m-meâ€
“I gonna crush you!!!! GO NOW LYNX! SPECIAL MOVE, IN FOR THE KILL!â€I say in anger as Lynx soars into the sky and comes down doing circles at amazing speed.
“BOOOMâ€
“Commander he beat us were coming back!â€Wolfs owner says.
“No! Stay th-“But before he could finish his sentence they were gone.
“Heh you won!†Says Hougen as he stands up and brush dirt of shirt.
“Yep, but you did help.â€I say
“Yeh, I suppose we go look for more people now?â€
Chapter Two
RE: (Story)When time stops (Taking charecter requests) - Fantomu - Jul. 07, 2012
This is wayyyyy too short to be a chapter. You should make chapters longer.
RE: (Story)When time stops (Taking charecter requests) - Katniss - Jul. 13, 2012
Chapter one is complete!
RE: (Story)When time stops (Taking charecter requests) - Katniss - Jul. 16, 2012
I've drawn and editid a cover and a little comic * , can you tell me what you think of them please?
*Not exact same story
RE: (Story)When time stops (Taking charecter requests) - Duck - Jul. 17, 2012
Hm... This is very interesting! I'm excited to read what happens next, but you should try to make the chapters a bit longer! I love your drawings!
RE: (Story)When time stops (Taking charecter requests) - Nitrohammer - Jul. 17, 2012
Well i like the story, but im upset that it goes into the big plot changes so quick. Take things slow.
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