Im still reading if that counts for anything. Awesome chapter!
(Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Final Ch Up!)
Poll: How Was My Story?
Amazing! I love it, as always! Keep it up! |
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16 |
It's pretty good. I like it. Keep it up! |
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3 |
It's okay. I don't like it very much, but keep it up! |
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3 |
It's bad, I don't like it at all, but keep trying! |
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3 |
Total: | 100% | 25 vote(s) |
I want to say Merry Christmas Eve!
Oh, and Merry Christmas! (Probably won't be on that much tomorrow.)
Here's my gift to you guys!
Chapter 20 is up~!
Chapter 20:
Oh, and Merry Christmas! (Probably won't be on that much tomorrow.)
Here's my gift to you guys!
Chapter 20 is up~!
Chapter 20:
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...woah...intense. That was an amazing chapter! But Raivis...well, keep up the good work!
I..I...I don't know how to respond to that..
Very nice! There's just one thing that's been bothering me a bit: The dialogue.
The...
"Hey." Sam greets.
"What's up?" Eric replies.
is something I don't see. Try starting a new paragraph every time you're going to put in dialogue. Other than that, it's a very great story overall!
The...
"Hey." Sam greets.
"What's up?" Eric replies.
is something I don't see. Try starting a new paragraph every time you're going to put in dialogue. Other than that, it's a very great story overall!
(Dec. 26, 2012 6:28 PM)Septentrione Wrote: Very nice! There's just one thing that's been bothering me a bit: The dialogue.
The...
"Hey." Sam greets.
"What's up?" Eric replies.
is something I don't see. Try starting a new paragraph every time you're going to put in dialogue. Other than that, it's a very great story overall!
Thanks! It honestly means a lot coming from you. (I've seen your story, and it's awesome!)
Honestly, the only reason I do it like that is because one time I did the dialogue like that in a story for school and my mom said it was wrong. So, haha, yeah. I'll try it like that. Anyways, thanks again!
Here's Chapter 21!
Chapter 21:
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Yeah! There! I can see it a lot better now. Keep it up.
Alright, So I guess I'll be typing it like that now.
Here's Chapter 22!
Chapter 22:
Here's Chapter 22!
Chapter 22:
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No! Not Kyle! Well, those were still awesome chapters!
Nooooo! Kyle! But amazing chapter! And two chapters in one day is great! Keep it up!
Wow! Everyone's coming back! Great chapter, but there was a big hunk of it bolded.
Sorry for double post! Here's the exciting next chapter!
Oh, and as you can guess, this story is almost over. There's only gonna be four or five more chapters after this. :\ But! My next story will be very exciting and even better! So look out for it!
Chapter 25:
Oh, and as you can guess, this story is almost over. There's only gonna be four or five more chapters after this. :\ But! My next story will be very exciting and even better! So look out for it!
Chapter 25:
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Sorry for triple posting...
It would help is you guys posted more. :\
Anyways, here's the next chapter!
Chapter 26:
It would help is you guys posted more. :\
Anyways, here's the next chapter!
Chapter 26:
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Everybody's dying! Great chapter though, how many are left?
Edit: Maybe they'll all come back to life somehow?
Edit: Maybe they'll all come back to life somehow?
love the 24 chapter but since when was poison an element?
Just to let you know Chinablade, in the vote I put the "its bad" one, but I was just seeing how many people actually put that. In all honesty I haven't read it yet but right after I post this reply I'll start reading it.
Why the heck did you vote without reading the story?
Edit: Oh, it was an accident.
Edit: Oh, it was an accident.
(Jan. 04, 2013 12:35 AM)Balanceblader96 Wrote: Just to let you know Chinablade, in the vote I put the "its bad" one, but I was just seeing how many people actually put that. In all honesty I haven't read it yet but right after I post this reply I'll start reading it.
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What?
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That's a new one.
Uh, okay?
(Jan. 04, 2013 12:55 AM)CrimsonWolf4D Wrote: What bey does Okami use e.e... If it's not a werewolf then i am now your mortal enemy!
If you had actually read the story, you'd know her bey is Chaos Dianna. Dianna is the English translation for Artemis, the Greek God of Nature. The reason her name is Okami is necause Okami is Japanese for Wolf. The wolf is one of Artemis' "chosen animals". That is why her name is Okami. Not every wolf-like-named blader needs a werewolf bey. Same with Stratus. His bey is Apollo, which is the God of the sun. I just figured the short version of Stratosphere sounded cool, so I just used Stratus. The sun and stratosphere are in the sky... So there.
Told.
Here's the next chapter!
Chapter 27:
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Woah cool! The final battle is coming up soon...Im so excited! Great chapter, as usual!
Great chapter! I sense a finale! Can't wait for 29!