Story BEYBLADE BOUND BY BLOOD

Poll: how is my story

Its great cant wait for the next chapter
48.89%
22
Its good i think you should continue
20.00%
9
Its ok but you need improvement
15.56%
7
you have talent but this isn't going anywhere
2.22%
1
you suck
13.33%
6
Total: 100% 45 vote(s)
Yes so I decided to make musica a blader I thought it would be cool I hope the ravemaster friends appreciate it
heh, its ok, i dont mind that you dont use Izuma or the others, still its a AWESOMESAUCE Story, so dont stop writing
so my theory was right nico is alive
but i wonder where he is
An interesting question to which the answer is.....its a secret
That would be weird I'm not trying to take to much from rave master
Chapter 19
(Hotaru)
"Hotaru slow down!" said Musica pulling his sleeve from my grip. "I want to help you but you have to slow down first if you don't stop and think you'll never find Nico." he said with a serious look on his face. "OK" I said forcing myself to calm down. "Now where did you last see him?" asked Musica. "He was falling along with the debris from the Eifle tower, but we never saw him hit the ground the metal blocked our view." I finished my sentence while visualizing the scene. "Hotaru there's no way anybody human could possibly survive that." said Musica, he looked at me as if I was crazy. "The police reports said there were no signs of a body so there's no way he's dead" I said looking at him with full belief that Nico was alive. We walked over to the sight of Nico's "death" and stood there for a moment. I then noticed a small black piece of cloth hung on a broken twisted metal bar. I walked over to it and picked it up.

I noticed that it was a piece of Nico's jacket. (Yes!) I thought to myself because now
I knew that I would find him. (Remember how each spirit blader has a special power? well you're about to see Hotaru's) I held the cloth and concentrated "What are you doing?" said Musica. "As long as I have this piece of clothing I can track down Nico and I'll be able to tell weather or not he's dead." I replied. "Yeah sure......, well if you can "track" Nico with his cloth's then why didn't you do that back at the hotel I'm sure he has clothing there" said Musica. "He has to have worn it recently as in at most a 24 hours ago." I replied. I began to concentrate again and soon I saw something. "Yes!" I exclaimed and I grabbed Musica's sleeve and ran back to the hotel.

"I know where Nico is!" I exclaimed bursting into the hotel room. Everyone looked up. "Where is he! lets go get him!" exclaimed Christian. "Well its not that simple.." I said. "Why not?" asked Kotori. "Because Nico is in the U.S"...
end of chapter 19
Sorry there isn't to many battles right now there will be alot more but as of right now you'll just have to wait trust me it gets really exciting next chapter
yes he'll also be featured in chapter 22 if the story goes according to plan sometimes I tend to add ideas
same with me hey does min have a legendary bey or the 1 i said
i am also wondering if my carter will make it you can change his normal wardrobe if you want
jack the character is cool and all but i need ORIGINAL as in unused or new characters anyone who posts a character that is in another story or is posted on multiple stories then I will not use him
Oh and please read my new story because once this story ends that story will live on
(May. 05, 2011  12:41 AM)Musica Wrote: jack the character is cool and all but i need ORIGINAL as in unused or new characters anyone who posts a character that is in another story or is posted on multiple stories then I will not use him
Oh and please read my new story because once this story ends that story will live on

well technically since i never announced it was a full story and having tired of people like Dude saying this
"Here's a feedback:

The story sucks.

It's not the worst I've read, meaning there's still hope, but it really needs work.

Also, you don't need requests for the Beyblades. Just think of some yourself."
you get tired of hearing comments about my story like this only politely but this is just plain rude and i was going to make it a full story intended of a short-story that gave me a little joy for me it ruined it plus i was trying to get others to be involved in my story Dude that's why i bring it up Musica im just mad still and it's not jack its Jaks OK sorry if this comes across as rude but this is what i think and im still mad at Dude just wondering but do you think i should report him what do you think
hotaru's power is cool
I think that u have to take it JAKS when you write some people will want to criticize you. But u can't let that get to you just keep writing and take advice from those who want to help
(May. 07, 2011  6:04 PM)Musica Wrote: I think that u have to take it JAKS when you write some people will want to criticize you. But u can't let that get to you just keep writing and take advice from those who want to help

well im done anyways i got seven really bad reviews so that story is dead and if you got something like that i bet it would make you upset but should i report him that's the q
Well all I can say is try again sometimes stories dontvwork out but you can't give up I had a few unsuccessful stories befor this one
ok once i figure it out WAIT i got an idea see guys l8r tks for da pep talk
awesome story a perfect one which i have ever readed
musica you havnt been posting storys may you please stop with the other stroy your doing because this is my favourite yet
Im sorrry Ive been really busy at home and with school and stuff preparing for my finals Ill be sure to post as soon as possible
when are you going to start the story again
(May. 30, 2011  9:53 AM)storm pegusas5 Wrote: when are you going to start the story again

after final exams and school is over