Heres my awsome "off-topic story"

first the characters!!!
Since its romance it must be boy and girl!

Raito Shishiya

Age:16

One of Fukami no Tokyo University's most charming boys, sometimes calls Emily at 5:30 pm, cool university huh.

Emily Oikawa

Age:16

Tomboy that believes that she would never be inlove boys, until he saw Raito at recess. Emily did anything she could to get Raito's heart.

Jason Kurokaze

Age:16

Emily's nephew, also classmate, he did his job as Emily's nephew.

Sakura Kinoshiya

Age: 16

Emily's bestfriend and Jason's boyfriend, did the same to protect Emily, because she is like a sister to her.

CHAPTER 1 : Changes

*Recess....*

Sakura:Are you sure your never inlove?
Jason: Yeah, Emily, are you sure you single FOREVER!!!!
Emily:Yep, not every single day!
*Raito faces at Emily then Emily's heartbeat is going fast*
Jason: Emily, are you alright?
Emily:I think I need curry for lunch *acts weird*
Sakura:Whats with her?
Jason:dunno?
*Recess ends...*
Teacher: Class, please turn to page 95.
Emily: huhhhhh,*keeps drawing anime pictures of Raito*
Jasonsst, Sakura, shes acting weird like strange!
Sakura: Dont bother her!

*After School....*

Raito: Hey Emy, want a ride?
Emily:He knows my name! *quietly*
Emily:ok!!
Raitok!
Jason:I though we have to go to the meeting at 7:00
pm!*Harsh*
Sakura:but good shes inlove!

Thats all of Chapter 1!
Sorry if its romance, im in a hurry
DONT COMPLAIN!!!!:3

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I got something to protect.....too...

Its alright... Maybe try writing it in a different format, with less direct speech. But the storyline itself is pretty good.

Today is exams

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I got something to protect.....too...

Use spoiler. And list which is male in female in the character list.

I'm confused in whose talking to who. And also inlove is in love.

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Haha mind the username "Nausea"
it's my username for an Elsword Forum, don't really
know how to change usernames now

imma little confused so, Raito Shishiya had noting to do with Emily Oikawa before recess, not friends or anything? then how come she only realizes she's in love now, is Raito a transfer student ? And is is a little weird how a random guy comes up to you and asks: "Want a ride?"
i not complaining as such just wanting to help.

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Much of this is culturally incorrect, anyway. For one, rarely do high schools in japan get recess. Maybe gym, and maybe they go outside to eat for a lunch break, but recess is scarce. Second: rarely will a group of 16 year-olds be in university. Third: Jason and Emily are in no way Eastern names. Four: I don't think people become obsessed with others at first sight normally. Not to the point of constantly drawing them when they should be paying attention in class... Five: Erm... Exactly where is this "tomboy" side of Emily, anyway?

I'm not necessarily complaining, but this could use some work. It's moving much too fast. Slow things down and describe what's going on.