[Fan Fiction] bruhblade Burst Not even trying to write well [Requests: closed]

GreenK9148 · Oct. 13, 2020 10:32 PM

(Oct. 13, 2020 10:29 PM)Master_chanter0 Wrote:
(Oct. 13, 2020 10:03 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: No I'm confused. I was being stoopid and joking around about how you review wasn't bad enough.

Well then we are both confused, whatever.

oops, typo, no was supposed to be now. my bad.

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Master_chanter0 · Oct. 13, 2020 10:34 PM

(Oct. 13, 2020 10:32 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 13, 2020 10:29 PM)Master_chanter0 Wrote: Well then we are both confused, whatever.

oops, typo, no was supposed to be now. my bad.

Eh, both make sense, but I WAS PROMISED CALL OF THE BEYBLADE CHAPTER. Apologies for all caps, you left me on a cliffhanger.

Sup Turtle
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GreenK9148 · Oct. 13, 2020 10:35 PM

(Oct. 13, 2020 10:34 PM)Master_chanter0 Wrote:
(Oct. 13, 2020 10:32 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: oops, typo, no was supposed to be now. my bad.

Eh, both make sense, but I WAS PROMISED CALL OF THE BEYBLADE CHAPTER. Apologies for all caps, you left me on a cliffhanger.

Yea ik, I was out yesterday and came home very late. I wrote it on a different device, so I'll post it later today.

My Beyblade YT Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC19Djxy...AjB2dVmtmw

My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

Master_chanter0 · Oct. 13, 2020 10:37 PM

(Oct. 13, 2020 10:35 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 13, 2020 10:34 PM)Master_chanter0 Wrote: Eh, both make sense, but I WAS PROMISED CALL OF THE BEYBLADE CHAPTER. Apologies for all caps, you left me on a cliffhanger.

Yea ik, I was out yesterday and came home very late. I wrote it on a different device, so I'll post it later today.

Ok, I have stuff in 23 minutes so....

Sup Turtle
Leader of the Spryzenlightnings
I make beyblade recolors! Check out my thread if you want one (or a few) done!
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GreenK9148 · Oct. 13, 2020 10:38 PM

(Oct. 13, 2020 10:37 PM)Master_chanter0 Wrote:
(Oct. 13, 2020 10:35 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: Yea ik, I was out yesterday and came home very late. I wrote it on a different device, so I'll post it later today.

Ok, I have stuff in 23 minutes so....

Oof, I'll @ you, if you don't mind.

My Beyblade YT Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC19Djxy...AjB2dVmtmw

My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

Master_chanter0 · Oct. 13, 2020 11:57 PM

(Oct. 13, 2020 10:38 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 13, 2020 10:37 PM)Master_chanter0 Wrote: Ok, I have stuff in 23 minutes so....

Oof, I'll @ you, if you don't mind.

I'm available now you can @ me whenever, just so you know.

Sup Turtle
Leader of the Spryzenlightnings
I make beyblade recolors! Check out my thread if you want one (or a few) done!
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GreenK9148 · Oct. 14, 2020 6:21 PM

Random thing #16 Ryotaaaaaaaaaaaaa saga #3 CheetoBlader

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My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

6Jupiter5 · Oct. 14, 2020 6:26 PM

(Oct. 14, 2020 6:21 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: Random thing #16 Ryotaaaaaaaaaaaaa saga #3 CheetoBlader

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"Yoooooooooooo. Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa. eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo. It's kermit the frog here," Kensuke's puppet said. Kermit was drinking some MTN DEW. (yOU tHoUghT I was gonna say CHOCO MILK) jk he was drinking CHOCO MILK WITH DA GANG.
"My bruh is going to face someone today!" Ryota said.
"WE BETTER GEt SOME CHOCO MILK," Poncho said. "I need it to get better at blading."
"Ah, nothing is getting wet in the the the the the teh rain. But I have da best Poncho ,"
Then Ryota proceeded to pick up Rantaro and use him as an umbrella.
"Hey, we can use this device to watch the live matches!"
*No wifi and cheap data plan*
"ARGHHHHHHHHH!"
Ryota threw the device at the wall.

Sadly, we will remember that device with no wifi and a cheap data plan to this date. Can we please have a moment of silence...

jk, We need some CHOCO MIlK.

"I wonder who's going to win," Ryota asked. A random person without any sort of connection to their bey and has no life because his soul simply is not good enough for his bey and he can't beat a snail in a race. What a loser. Against one of the best bladers in this era, Daigo!
Daigo loses lmao.
"Uh you want some choco milk?" Poncho asked.
"I'lL SHOW U SOME CHOCO MILK BISHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH."
*end of Rantaro's career.* [url=Random thing #16 Ryotaaaaaaaaaaaaa saga #3 CheetoBlader [spoiler] ]cue lion king meme musi[/url]c.

This sounds like a newborn child trying to say random words (okay maybe a 3 year old). 0/25. Garbage, horrible, the worst thing next to fake beys. Heck even a fake S2 is better than this because at least it can win

GreenK9148 · Oct. 14, 2020 6:27 PM

(Oct. 14, 2020 6:26 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020 6:21 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: Random thing #16 Ryotaaaaaaaaaaaaa saga #3 CheetoBlader

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"Yoooooooooooo. Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa. eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo. It's kermit the frog here," Kensuke's puppet said. Kermit was drinking some MTN DEW. (yOU tHoUghT I was gonna say CHOCO MILK) jk he was drinking CHOCO MILK WITH DA GANG.
"My bruh is going to face someone today!" Ryota said.
"WE BETTER GEt SOME CHOCO MILK," Poncho said. "I need it to get better at blading."
"Ah, nothing is getting wet in the the the the the teh rain. But I have da best Poncho ,"
Then Ryota proceeded to pick up Rantaro and use him as an umbrella.
"Hey, we can use this device to watch the live matches!"
*No wifi and cheap data plan*
"ARGHHHHHHHHH!"
Ryota threw the device at the wall.

Sadly, we will remember that device with no wifi and a cheap data plan to this date. Can we please have a moment of silence...

jk, We need some CHOCO MIlK.

"I wonder who's going to win," Ryota asked. A random person without any sort of connection to their bey and has no life because his soul simply is not good enough for his bey and he can't beat a snail in a race. What a loser. Against one of the best bladers in this era, Daigo!
Daigo loses lmao.
"Uh you want some choco milk?" Poncho asked.
"I'lL SHOW U SOME CHOCO MILK BISHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH."
*end of Rantaro's career.* [url=Random thing #16 Ryotaaaaaaaaaaaaa saga #3 CheetoBlader [spoiler] ]cue lion king meme musi[/url]c.

This sounds like a newborn child trying to say random words (okay maybe a 3 year old). 0/25. Garbage, horrible, the worst thing next to fake beys. Heck even a fake S2 is better than this because at least it can win

tHANK you

My Beyblade YT Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC19Djxy...AjB2dVmtmw

My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

6Jupiter5 · Oct. 14, 2020 6:43 PM

Request by GreenK. This story has no great plot points and if the characters were to be made out of something it would be made out of dodo water. Even Blast Zone Kid is less cringier then this and he tries to be cringe. If I had to buy this you would end up paying me.

The Blacknight · Oct. 14, 2020 7:10 PM

let me try roasting this. with a rap.

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Rating: negative one trillion billion million quadrillon thousand out of twenty-five. this disgusting garbage is the definition of failure.

emotional DaMAgE

GreenK9148 · Oct. 14, 2020 7:12 PM

(Oct. 14, 2020 7:10 PM)The Blacknight Wrote: let me try roasting this. with a rap.

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lol u thought. this trash aint even worth a rap. I could honestly say a line of this and kill someone, he/she would die from the stupidity. this carp makes Fortnite look like god-tier 1000000% insanely good video game. why am I wasting my time rating this stupid jumble of letters, doing smth UNproductive would better than trying to try to understnd whatever this carppy pile of filth is.
Rating: negative one trillion billion million quadrillon thousand out of twenty-five. this disgusting garbage is the definition of failure.

True

My Beyblade YT Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC19Djxy...AjB2dVmtmw

My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

The Blacknight · Oct. 14, 2020 7:14 PM

(Oct. 14, 2020 7:12 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020 7:10 PM)The Blacknight Wrote: let me try roasting this. with a rap.

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lol u thought. this trash aint even worth a rap. I could honestly say a line of this and kill someone, he/she would die from the stupidity. this carp makes Fortnite look like god-tier 1000000% insanely good video game. why am I wasting my time rating this stupid jumble of letters, doing smth UNproductive would better than trying to try to understnd whatever this carppy pile of filth is.
Rating: negative one trillion billion million quadrillon thousand out of twenty-five. this disgusting garbage is the definition of failure.

True

there was an insane burn here but didnt wanna get rudness so imagine being very very ridiculed rn

emotional DaMAgE

BuilderROB · Oct. 14, 2020 7:15 PM

GreenK9148 would you like me to review your fan fic with my real rating system? (Warning: It will be a serious and honest review despite this being intentionally bad).

Hey there! My name is BuilderROB and I am an organizer who hosts tournaments in North Carolina.

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GreenK9148 · Oct. 14, 2020 7:16 PM

(Oct. 14, 2020 7:15 PM)BuilderROB Wrote: GreenK9148 would you like me to review your fan fic with my real rating system? (Warning: It will be a serious and honest review despite this being intentionally bad).

Sure. Also, can you review my other serious fanfic?

My Beyblade YT Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC19Djxy...AjB2dVmtmw

My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

BuilderROB · Oct. 14, 2020 7:18 PM

(Oct. 14, 2020 7:16 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020 7:15 PM)BuilderROB Wrote: GreenK9148 would you like me to review your fan fic with my real rating system? (Warning: It will be a serious and honest review despite this being intentionally bad).

Sure. Also, can you review my other serious fanfic?

Sure, I will do that soon.

Hey there! My name is BuilderROB and I am an organizer who hosts tournaments in North Carolina.

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TakaraTheLord · Oct. 15, 2020 2:44 PM

This is something funny to make you laugh
Hikar Asahi : Helios !!! use Gravity Strike !!
Hyuga Asahi : Hyperion !!! use Crown Strike !!
Aiden Umuzaki : Ares !!! use Rain Slasher !!
There is a pig explosion oh no a pig explosion
All three : AHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A pig explosion run!!!!!!!

Manager of the Spryzen Lightnings.Go Helios Valcano!!!!!!!!!!! Go World Sprigan !!!!!

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The Blacknight · Oct. 15, 2020 2:48 PM

(Oct. 15, 2020 2:44 PM)TakaraTheLord Wrote: This is something funny to make you laugh
Hikar Asahi : Helios !!! use Gravity Strike !!
Hyuga Asahi : Hyperion !!! use Crown Strike !!
Aiden Umuzaki : Ares !!! use Rain Slasher !!
There is a pig explosion oh no a pig explosion
All three : AHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A pig explosion run!!!!!!!

Next eps: The Naruto rip-off returns! Will Ekusas Iobome appear?(for those who dont know, ekusas iobome backwrds is emo boi sasuke)

emotional DaMAgE

GreenK9148 · Oct. 15, 2020 10:22 PM

Alright, I almost let my roof break today, and I'm not in the mood for fake bad comments. So, back to Normal.

free and norman having an argument over who's more depressed: Reques by The Blacknight

Random thing #17

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My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

SunBlader98 · Oct. 15, 2020 10:25 PM

(Oct. 15, 2020 10:22 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: Alright, I almost let my roof break today, and I'm not in the mood for fake bad comments. So, back to Normal.

free and norman having an argument over who's more depressed: Reques by The Blacknight

Random thing #17

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"Hey dude," Free said in a really sad voice.
"I'm depressed," Norman responded... in a really sad voice.
"what happened?" Free asked, in a really sad voice.
"I spilled my CHOCO MILK BOIS," Norman said in an energetic really sad voice.
"Hey, I know what will help you," Free said, in a really sad voice .
"Really?" Norman said, in a really sad voice.
"I made you some-," Before Free could finish his phrase in a really sad voice, he slipped and spilled his spaghetti."
"Are you ok?" Norman asked in a really sad voice.
"Sometimes, they ask you how you are. And you just have to say that you're fine, when you're not really fine (in a really sad voice), you can't just get into it, because they will never understand." Free complained, in a really sad voice.
"DO YOU EVER FEEL, LIKE A PLASTIC BAG?" Norman shouted.
"Wat,"
"BLOWING THROUGH THE WIND!" Norman shouted.
"Wat"
"CAUSE BABY IMMA FIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIRRE WORK,"
Suddenly, Norman shot up and hit the roof.
"aRE yOu OKaY?" Free asked, in a really sad voice.
"Stop it get some help," Norman said, in a really sad voice.
"IMMA BOUT TO DUNK ON DIS MAN!" Free said, in a really sad voice.
But, as he landed, one of his legs was a complete 180 degrees in the other direction.

*rip (literally) Free*

You have Killed SunBlader98 through Laughter!

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GreenK9148 · Oct. 15, 2020 10:27 PM

(Oct. 15, 2020 10:25 PM)SunBlader98 Wrote:
(Oct. 15, 2020 10:22 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: Alright, I almost let my roof break today, and I'm not in the mood for fake bad comments. So, back to Normal.

free and norman having an argument over who's more depressed: Reques by The Blacknight

Random thing #17

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"Hey dude," Free said in a really sad voice.
"I'm depressed," Norman responded... in a really sad voice.
"what happened?" Free asked, in a really sad voice.
"I spilled my CHOCO MILK BOIS," Norman said in an energetic really sad voice.
"Hey, I know what will help you," Free said, in a really sad voice .
"Really?" Norman said, in a really sad voice.
"I made you some-," Before Free could finish his phrase in a really sad voice, he slipped and spilled his spaghetti."
"Are you ok?" Norman asked in a really sad voice.
"Sometimes, they ask you how you are. And you just have to say that you're fine, when you're not really fine (in a really sad voice), you can't just get into it, because they will never understand." Free complained, in a really sad voice.
"DO YOU EVER FEEL, LIKE A PLASTIC BAG?" Norman shouted.
"Wat,"
"BLOWING THROUGH THE WIND!" Norman shouted.
"Wat"
"CAUSE BABY IMMA FIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIRRE WORK,"
Suddenly, Norman shot up and hit the roof.
"aRE yOu OKaY?" Free asked, in a really sad voice.
"Stop it get some help," Norman said, in a really sad voice.
"IMMA BOUT TO DUNK ON DIS MAN!" Free said, in a really sad voice.
But, as he landed, one of his legs was a complete 180 degrees in the other direction.

*rip (literally) Free*

You have Killed SunBlader98 through Laughter!

You have showered GreenK9148 with complements. Hold up, I need to get a towel now.

My Beyblade YT Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC19Djxy...AjB2dVmtmw

My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

SunBlader98 · Oct. 15, 2020 10:28 PM

(Oct. 15, 2020 10:27 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 15, 2020 10:25 PM)SunBlader98 Wrote: You have Killed SunBlader98 through Laughter!
You have showered GreenK9148 with complements. Hold up, I need to get a towel now.

I have lost a rap battle to GreenK9148

Join My Team Galaxy Hamsters

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GreenK9148 · Oct. 15, 2020 10:29 PM

(Oct. 15, 2020 10:28 PM)SunBlader98 Wrote:
(Oct. 15, 2020 10:27 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: You have showered GreenK9148 with complements. Hold up, I need to get a towel now.
I have lost a rap battle to GreenK9148

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My Beyblade YT Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC19Djxy...AjB2dVmtmw

My Gaming YT channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UChykjpD...NbEdH5zJAA

AlexTheBlader · Oct. 15, 2020 10:31 PM

0/10101010101010101010 a french fry can make a better fan fic

Golden Freddy · Oct. 15, 2020 10:32 PM

Lane but with shu’s hair. The bey will be za worldo Lucifer, 2d (with no barrier), and guard

“He sees you”