This is a fanfic not some place to start a war!
[Fan Fiction] Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (BBB OC Story) (Completed Until Further Notice)
I am just gonna delete the login info on my phone then
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watch him say don't quote me even tho he asked a question T_T
nvm then also it's not our fault you keep posting and we quote maybe there should be a setting to turn off quote and a certain posts so it wont be annoying
nvm then also it's not our fault you keep posting and we quote maybe there should be a setting to turn off quote and a certain posts so it wont be annoying
Ok guys really stop. This has gotten too out of hand.
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Basically Us when we keep quoting kai https://youtu.be/RkDomazuMlI if you listen closly to one part of the song it makes sense
DeltaZakuro Also i think ur cool delta, i said that was a joke u don't have to paste it ill just leave it here
DeltaZakuro Also i think ur cool delta, i said that was a joke u don't have to paste it ill just leave it here
Might as well do it... Heres Chapter 7 (warning: Some slight language)
Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!
Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!
Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...
*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!
Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!
Athena: Lets do this already!
Lane: Yeah.
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*
Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!
*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*
Lane: Oh....
*the barrier was slowly going down*
Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?
Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!
*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*
Lane: W-what...?
*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*
Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!
*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*
Athena: Lane....
*the two get in their launch positions*
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*
Lane: Bring It!
Athena: GO!!!!
*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*
*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*
Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!
*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*
Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!
~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~
Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!
Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!
*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*
*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*
Athena: No... It can't be...
Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!
*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*
Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!
*Lane leaves the factory*
Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!
Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?
Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.
Hikaru: Are you sure?
Rantaro: Yeah.
*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*
Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....
*Rantaro sighs and walks away*
~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~
Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?
~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~
Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!
Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!
Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!
Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...
*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!
Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!
Athena: Lets do this already!
Lane: Yeah.
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*
Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!
*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*
Lane: Oh....
*the barrier was slowly going down*
Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?
Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!
*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*
Lane: W-what...?
*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*
Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!
*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*
Athena: Lane....
*the two get in their launch positions*
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*
Lane: Bring It!
Athena: GO!!!!
*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*
*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*
Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!
*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*
Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!
~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~
Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!
Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!
*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*
*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*
Athena: No... It can't be...
Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!
*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*
Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!
*Lane leaves the factory*
Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!
Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?
Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.
Hikaru: Are you sure?
Rantaro: Yeah.
*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*
Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....
*Rantaro sighs and walks away*
~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~
Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?
~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~
Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!
(Nov. 21, 2020 11:07 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Might as well do it... Heres Chapter 7 (warning: Some slight language)
Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!
Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!
Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...
*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!
Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!
Athena: Lets do this already!
Lane: Yeah.
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*
Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!
*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*
Lane: Oh....
*the barrier was slowly going down*
Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?
Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!
*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*
Lane: W-what...?
*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*
Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!
*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*
Athena: Lane....
*the two get in their launch positions*
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*
Lane: Bring It!
Athena: GO!!!!
*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*
*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*
Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!
*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*
Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!
~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~
Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!
Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!
*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*
*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*
Athena: No... It can't be...
Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!
*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*
Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!
*Lane leaves the factory*
Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!
Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?
Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.
Hikaru: Are you sure?
Rantaro: Yeah.
*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*
Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....
*Rantaro sighs and walks away*
~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~
Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?
~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~
Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!
Ranjiro: Lemme swear so people finnaly think im cool
I feel sad for Athena Lain bad brother This story has so much emotion im crying bc lain bad brother and i want her to save lain
(Nov. 21, 2020 11:12 PM)beykid44 Wrote:That was Ranjiro. Not Rantaro.(Nov. 21, 2020 11:07 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Might as well do it... Heres Chapter 7 (warning: Some slight language)
Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!
Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!
Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...
*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!
Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!
Athena: Lets do this already!
Lane: Yeah.
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*
Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!
*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*
Lane: Oh....
*the barrier was slowly going down*
Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?
Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!
*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*
Lane: W-what...?
*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*
Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!
*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*
Athena: Lane....
*the two get in their launch positions*
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*
Lane: Bring It!
Athena: GO!!!!
*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*
*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*
Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!
*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*
Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!
~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~
Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!
Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!
*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*
*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*
Athena: No... It can't be...
Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!
*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*
Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!
*Lane leaves the factory*
Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!
Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?
Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.
Hikaru: Are you sure?
Rantaro: Yeah.
*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*
Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....
*Rantaro sighs and walks away*
~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~
Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?
~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~
Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!
Rantaro: Lemme swear so people finnaly think im cool
I feel sad for Athena Lain bad brother This story has so much emotion im crying bc lain bad brother and i want her to save lain
(Nov. 21, 2020 11:07 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Might as well do it... Heres Chapter 7 (warning: Some slight language)
Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!
Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!
Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...
*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!
Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!
Athena: Lets do this already!
Lane: Yeah.
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*
Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!
*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*
Lane: Oh....
*the barrier was slowly going down*
Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?
Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!
*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*
Lane: W-what...?
*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*
Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!
*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*
Athena: Lane....
*the two get in their launch positions*
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*
Lane: Bring It!
Athena: GO!!!!
*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*
*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*
Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!
*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*
Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!
~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~
Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!
Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!
*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*
*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*
Athena: No... It can't be...
Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!
*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*
Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!
*Lane leaves the factory*
Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!
Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?
Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.
Hikaru: Are you sure?
Rantaro: Yeah.
*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*
Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....
*Rantaro sighs and walks away*
~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~
Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?
~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~
Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!
This is a sad moment for Athena.
Even tho Im a big Lane fanboy (lol) this guys flare just keeps on going.
Hes just a big jerk
(Nov. 21, 2020 11:14 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:(Nov. 21, 2020 11:12 PM)beykid44 Wrote: Rantaro: Lemme swear so people finnaly think im coolThat was Ranjiro. Not Rantaro.
I feel sad for Athena Lain bad brother This story has so much emotion im crying bc lain bad brother and i want her to save lain
rip i cant read
sorry :C ill will leave now
(final post until I eventually come back)
Chapter 8: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie! Summary
Valt and Athenas paths cross once again, Valt realizes something was up with Athena and tries to help the discouraged girl. Meanwhile Shu Kurenai hears about the showdown between Athena and Lane and heads his way to Japan!!
Chapter 8: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie! Summary
Valt and Athenas paths cross once again, Valt realizes something was up with Athena and tries to help the discouraged girl. Meanwhile Shu Kurenai hears about the showdown between Athena and Lane and heads his way to Japan!!
Chapter 37-43
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(Nov. 23, 2020 2:44 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 37-43
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noice
Also I see you you got Lucifer on your pfp
(Nov. 23, 2020 2:46 AM)EarthHelios Wrote:Yep. Definitely gonna be picking it up when it releases.(Nov. 23, 2020 2:44 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 37-43
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noice
Also I see you you got Lucifer on your pfp
(Nov. 04, 2020 3:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Lucifer Armageddon Wh² Mb' Description
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(Nov. 23, 2020 6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:(Nov. 04, 2020 3:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Lucifer Armageddon Wh² Dt' Description
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nice
(Nov. 23, 2020 6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:(Nov. 04, 2020 3:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Lucifer Armageddon Wh² Dt' Description
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can i add a poll to one of my existing threads? idk how
Good job on the length, I would recommend trying to reduce the cringe in dialogue as Lane sounds like a defiant baby.
(Nov. 23, 2020 7:44 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: Good job on the length, I would recommend trying to reduce the cringe in dialogue as Lane sounds like a defiant baby.
cringe ≠ Adding emotion
it appears i must explain. i had to explain this on wattpad in PM.
Lane hates his sister, wanting her out of his sight forever in fear if she doesnt, her Flare will be stronger than his, which atm is kinda apparent since Athena in the recent chapter did decently better against Lane. (considering this is a Sparking AU, Lane's goal is practically the same). dont forget Athena wants her brother back no matter the cost and Lane doesnt even want her to exist so of course there will be some very deep emotional dialogue between the two, would not go that far to say its cringe.
again our opinions are different so..... *shrug*
