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[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade burst apocalypse(15+) (part 7 ongoing)

Dec. 04, 2020  11:07 PM
 
Part 4 chapter 4 Eda vs Sara part 2
Eda breaths heavily.
Eda:your a worthy opponent.
Sara:maiden finish her off!
Hiatus hits maiden into the air.
Eda:guess you did not heard my warning.
Hiatus glows black.
In shun's mind.
Sara:damn it I can't regenerate in time. I need to unfuse.
In the real world.
Sara unfuses.
Shun:go maiden!
Maiden hits hiatus but gets knocked back. Shun is sent flying into a glass window.
Shun:damn it. I can't regenerate these wounds in time.
In shun's mind.
Kisara: Shun .... Shun!
Shun:huh.
Kisara:you are just gonna sit there and let yourself die and let lane and free down?
Shun(white haired):come on you need me. Come on come on!
Shun:I need you. Hmm what's your name?
Haise:my name is haise.
Back in the real world.
Akira and Alice:shun you ok? Let us help you.
Haise:stand down. Let me handle this.
Haise stretchs.
Haise:nice to face you Eda San.
Eda:yes it is.
Haise smiles.
Alyssa:what's going on with shun?
Alice:another personality was born haise or Sadako is what we called this one.
Alyssa:shun.
Haise:goodbye Eda.
Maiden hits hiatus into the air.
Eda:hiatus no!
Haise:maidens recollection!
Hiatus is hit with a huge explosion.
Eda:no way.
Eda is sent flying into a wall of broken glass then Eda dies from blood loss.
Haise:I did it.
Later.
Shun:yua?
Yua:yes mom?
Shun:I would like you to meet our new family member mana kurenai.
Yua:mana looks just like you mom.
Shun smiles.
Lane:look who is home.
Lane walks towards shun.
Shun:welcome home.
Harry comes out of Lanes scarf and crawls into shun's hair.
Lane:Harry likes you shun.
Shun:I know.
Shun laughs.
Chapter end.
Easter egg.
???:I am not dead yet me and hiatus will grow more stronger.
Gwynn:luckily you have me on your side.
Bruce:we will destroy maiden!
Part end.
Dec. 05, 2020  9:03 PM
 
Shun's personalities that have a huge role.
Kisara
Sara
Sarah
Lana
Kai
Haise
Haise is shun's true self before her personality split.
Haise is often called the one eye demon due to her eye glows red.
Haise's bio
Age:29
Gender female
Sexuality bisexual
Wife/husband:free
Siblings:same as shun's.
Back story:after nearly being tortured to death. haise(shun before the personality split) began to feed on other bladers beys light and started to destroy people who get in her way.
Dec. 06, 2020  9:58 PM
 
Puzzle 1 haise words.
R.e.m.e.m.b.e.r me?
The one that stalks you at night. The voice in your head. The one that made you? I am the one who will be in control for now on. Goodbye shun.
Part 5 chapter 1 haise returns!
In shun's mind.
Shun:who are you?
Haise:I am you.
Shun:it can't be I am not like you.
In the real world.
Shun wakes up in the hospital.
Shun:where am i?
Alice and akira:your in the hospital.
Shun:thank you.
Shun trys to get out of bed.
???:umm shun senpai?
Shun:yes?
???:if you don't remember we faced off in the world championships. I am Alex.
Later.
Shu:what's going on with shun?
Alex:I don't know. She is cute no?
Shu:yeah she is.
Shu smiles.
Alex:mine if I ask her out?
Shu:sure I see why not.
Shun:oi shu I found something.
Shu:what is it.
Shun points at ground.
Shun:that temple is not supposed to be here.
Shu:let's go inside of it.
Haise:shun.
Shun turns around but there is nothing their.
Later inside the temple.
Valt:yo shun! Me and valkyrie have been waiting here.
Shun:ok let's battle.
3 2 1 go shoot.
Valt:go! Rush shoot!
Shun:maidens barrier!
Haise:shun your pathetic just like Dimitri. Let me fight this battle come on come on you need me don't you,you want to win right?
Valkyrie knocks maiden into the air.
Haise cracks her knuckles like kaneki from Tokyo ghoul.
Haise:die!
Maiden hits valkyrie.
Valt:nani.
Valt is sent flying across the room.
Haise:I won't forgive you for what you did burn in hell! Maidens release recollection!
A huge explosion hits valkyrie and both beys burst midair.
Haise:luckily I have this! Maidens rewind!
Time goes back to when maiden hit valkyrie.
Valt:valkyrie hang on.
Haise laughs.
Valt:what's so funny?
Valkyrie cuts valt's face near his eye.
Haise:never think I am weak.
Valt:damn it.
Round 2
3 2 1 go shoot.
Maiden and valkyrie clash head on.
Haise:tch bow down to me mortal!
Valt:never!
A huge burst of air hits both haise and valt.
Chapter end
Dec. 07, 2020  10:01 PM
 
Part 5 chapter 2 valt vs haise/shun memory?
Valt:damn it! Valkyrie!
Valkyrie pushs maiden towards the edge.
Haise:not bad. But!
Maiden sends valkyrie flying.
Valt:what the hell is this power?
Haise laughs.
Haise:you think I am shun and I am gonna go easy on because your my friend? Such nonsense. Shun is dead!
Valt:nani!
Later on at Alice's house.
Alice:hey Delta look at this.
Delta:what is it babe.
Delta looks at Alice's phone.
Alice:is that shun?
Delta:looks like it's time I have to take Diabolos out of retirement.
Alice:I will go to!
???:yare yare do you have to talk so loud.
Delta:Rio you coming too?
Rio:tch fine maybe to see aunt shun.
Later at the Temple.
Valt is sent flying.
Valt: is that all you got?
Haise:if I kill you now their gonna stop me.
Valt:who?
Alice:shun are you ok?
Haise:Valt let's finish this.
Valt:right!
Maiden hits valkyrie head on but suddenly a bey cancel valts attack and sends valkyrie flying.
Alex:shun senpai?
???:tch valt your so weak!
Valt:who are you?
Rio:I am Rio zakruo!
Dimitri:shun I am gonna kill you!
Haise:get out of my way. Maiden!
Maiden hits valkyrie 100 times.
Haise:break!
A huge explosion of wind hits valt then valkyrie breaks in half and cuts valt on his arm.
In shun's mind.
Shun:I thought you were gonna help me.
Haise:I did I beat valt and saved you from danger. Now let me control my body.
Shun:never! You nearly killed everyone in the room.
Shun grabs haise by the throat.
Shun:die already!
Haise:it's pointless if you kill me you won't have your memories.
Chapter end
Dec. 07, 2020  11:59 PM
 
(Dec. 04, 2020  1:42 AM)kai edits Wrote: Well part 4 is the final part. And chapter 4 is the ending of beyblade burst apocalypse.

…mind explaining why there’s a part 5 then?
Dec. 08, 2020  12:14 AM
 
(Dec. 07, 2020  11:59 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote:
(Dec. 04, 2020  1:42 AM)kai edits Wrote: Well part 4 is the final part. And chapter 4 is the ending of beyblade burst apocalypse.

…mind explaining why there’s a part 5 then?

maybe its an epilogue? actually its too long to be an epilogue.
(Dec. 04, 2020  1:42 AM)kai edits Wrote: Well part 4 is the final part. And chapter 4 is the ending of beyblade burst apocalypse.


explain yourself.
Dec. 08, 2020  12:17 AM
 
That was then i was depressed. Give this girl/guy a break
Dec. 09, 2020  7:32 PM
 
Part 5 chapter 3 Awaken from your dark sleep! Maidens true form!
In shun's mind.
Haise: Shun ... Shun! Are you gonna let your family die? Come on come on you need me. Without me you can't save your family.Make your choice.
Shun:I... I.... Fine take your stupid body.
In the real world.
???:shun kurenai battle me!
Haise:sure.
3 2 1 go shoot.
Eda:go Hiatus.
Maiden hits hiatus and sends Eda flying into a glass window.
Haise:had enough Eda San?
Eda coughs up blood.
Eda:hiatus go!
Haise:maidens time!
*time stops*
Haise:pathetic!
Maiden repeatedly hits hiatus.
Haise:roar maiden!
Maiden roars.
Haise:at this rate I might actually do it!
Maiden glows black.
Haise:At last!
Collision Maiden transforms into Hades maiden.
Akira:haise!
Haise:what do you want?
Akira:homecoming 1 abyss,deaths code,final release collection.
Haise:you wouldn't dare!
Akira:blood of sun,death last hope,death has come.
Haise collapses in the ground.
Alice:what did you do?
Akira:spoke words from this.
It was Shun's journal.
Haise:you can't seal me away! I am all that's left of your dear sister.
Later at shun's house.
Delta:where is my phone?
Someone rings the doorbell.
Delta:who can that be?
It was free.
Free:where is shun.
Later at the Temple.
Shun:what did I miss?
Shun:haise help me please!
Haise takes over shun's body.
Eda:go Hiatus!
Haise:die!
Hiatus slams against maiden then the room filled with dust.
Haise:goodbye!
A huge explosion hits Eda and hiatus
Chapter end
Part 5 chapter 3 Awaken from your dark sleep! Maidens true form! Part 2
Haise smiles.
Haise:we did it sis!
Haise winks at akira and Alice.
Eda:damn brat.
Haise:yare yare can I take a break my boyfriend is waiting for me.
Eda:see him in hell!
Hiatus hits maiden into the air.
Haise sighs.
Haise:your boring me!
Maiden hits hiatus back.
Eda:nani!
Haise:I am done with you. Goodbye!
Haise walks away.
Eda:you think I lost?
Haise laughs.
Haise:your forgetting something?
Hiatus is on the floor bursted.
Eda:what!
Haise:come on Alice,akira let's go home.
Akira:Haise?
Haise:yes?
Akira:are you shun's real personality?
Haise:yes and no it's basically a long story but to make it short shun is a personality and I am really her real self.
Alice:Haise are you currently dating someone?
Haise:no not ever since I was nearly tortured to death. I did like this girl named Alyssa and I liked you Alice.
Alice:but we are siblings.
Haise:I don't care about that. Even if you are my sister I will still like to date you.
Akira:Alice is married to Delta-kun tho.
Haise:huh your married how long was I trapped.
Akira:8-9 years don't worry haise I am single.
Haise:how's big brother doing?
Shu:why don't you ask me now.
Haise:big brother! It's been so long.
Shu:Alice what's going on.
Later after Alice and shu talked about Haise.
Shu:shun- I mean Haise can we battle.
Haise:later big brother.
Haise kisses akira on the lips.
Akira:what's going on?
Akira blushes.
Haise:your single right?
Alice:so shun is personality?
Shu:I believe so.
Haise:shu can I ask you something?
Shu:what is it.
Haise:is mom and dad still alive?
Later.
Maiden:Haise!
Haise:why did i come back.
Maiden:shun died and since your the real owner of maiden so the mark lives within you now.
Haise:do I still have my memories and shun's?
Maiden:yes but it gonna take a few days to return to you.
Haise:very well then!
Later at shun's house.
Lane:shun your home.
Haise:hello what's your name?
Lane:I sense your still shun but your aura is different. Haise! Is that you?
Haise:yes it is.
Lane smiles.
Lane:glad your back buddy.
Chapter end
Dec. 09, 2020  10:16 PM
 
Beyblade Burst Apocalypse.

Grammar: 2/5: Has gotten a lot better but there are still mistakes like there's no capitalization and some words are spelled wrong
Plot: 5/5: Great plot
Characters: 1/5 Most of them are just toooooooooooo op. i mean shun's character has changed a little bit.
Dialogue: 3/5 it sounds natural yet monotone
Length: 4/5 good length but it could be longer.

Total: 15/25

kai edits
Dec. 09, 2020  10:19 PM
 
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:16 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote: Beyblade Burst Apocalypse.

Grammar: 2.5/5: Has gotten a lot better but there are still mistakes like there's no capitalization and some words are spelled wrong
Plot: 5/5: Great plot
Characters: 1.5/5 Most of them are just toooooooooooo op. i mean shun's character has changed a little bit.
Dialogue: 5/5 it sounds natural.
Length: 4/5 good length but it could be longer.

Total: 18/25

kai edits
I want Haise to play a bigger role so shun had to be op so Haise can be in control. Eda is shun's rival and I might change my writing mid arc so I can introduce a new character.
Dec. 09, 2020  10:23 PM
 
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:19 PM)kai edits Wrote:
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:16 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote: Beyblade Burst Apocalypse.

Grammar: 2.5/5: Has gotten a lot better but there are still mistakes like there's no capitalization and some words are spelled wrong
Plot: 5/5: Great plot
Characters: 1.5/5 Most of them are just toooooooooooo op. i mean shun's character has changed a little bit.
Dialogue: 5/5 it sounds natural.
Length: 4/5 good length but it could be longer.

Total: 18/25

kai edits
I want Haise to play a bigger role so shun had to be op so Haise can be in control. Eda is shun's rival and I might change my writing mid arc so I can introduce a new character.
I'll rate it again when you finish the fanfic. Keep in mind this was a rating of the fanfic counting every chapter.
Dec. 09, 2020  10:25 PM
 
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:23 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote:
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:19 PM)kai edits Wrote: I want Haise to play a bigger role so shun had to be op so Haise can be in control. Eda is shun's rival and I might change my writing mid arc so I can introduce a new character.
I'll rate it again when you finish the fanfic. Keep in mind this was a rating of the fanfic counting every chapter.
Ok thanks.
Btw Haise is shun. 
I might kill off valt and introduce new characters maybe one of yours if I am allowed too do so
Dec. 09, 2020  10:26 PM
 
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:25 PM)kai edits Wrote:
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:23 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote: I'll rate it again when you finish the fanfic. Keep in mind this was a rating of the fanfic counting every chapter.
Ok thanks.
Btw Haise is shun. 
I might kill off valt and introduce new characters maybe one of yours if I am allowed too do so

wait none of my characters are in the fanfic. Also can you rate my fanfic?
Dec. 09, 2020  10:30 PM
 
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:26 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote:
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:25 PM)kai edits Wrote: Ok thanks.
Btw Haise is shun. 
I might kill off valt and introduce new characters maybe one of yours if I am allowed too do so

wait none of my characters are in the fanfic. Also can you rate my fanfic?
I could but I am busy with school and music production
Dec. 09, 2020  10:32 PM
 
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:30 PM)kai edits Wrote:
(Dec. 09, 2020  10:26 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote: wait none of my characters are in the fanfic. Also can you rate my fanfic?
I could but I am busy with school and music production
ok but how are ya gonna kill off one of my characters if none of them are in your fanfic. oh nvm you were saying the you were gonna add one of my characters in the fanfic if you had permission.
Dec. 10, 2020  2:14 PM
 
Shun's journal entry 1
Remember me? The one that was dying? The one that was cover in blood? The one that that tried saving you? I am was the one that was locked in that damn suit rotting away all those years in internal hell. Coughing and coughing till I can't feel my lungs. Death was among me till Haise saved me. I lucked out on this one. Don't remember me as shun lisa kurenai, remember me as Haise kurenai!
Part 5 Chapter 4 Haise new life!
Free breaths heavily as blood was dropping on the floor.
Free: Shun!
Haise:hmm?
Free:shun you don't know who I am?
Haise:um who are?
Free slaps Haise.
Free:you don't remember me?
Haise:i-.
Akira:free this is Haise. She is different from shun basically. Haise is staying here for awhile due to shun's battle with Eda.
Haise:nice to meet you free!
Haise puts her hand out for a handshake.
Free:Haise!
Haise:yes.
Free punches Haise in the face.
Free:give me shun right now or I will destroy you.
Akira:stop hurting her she did nothing wrong so stop! Are you alright Haise-kun?
Haise:yeah I am thank you so much.
Alice:wow she is so formal.
Akira:Haise?
Haise:yes.
Akira:can you stay for a little more?
Haise:I can try.
Aiga walks into the room.
Aiga:uhhhhh what the hell is going on?
Haise:hello thank you for coming aiga-sensei.
Aiga:wow what happened to shun? She is completely different.
Alice:it's a long story.
Haise:aiga-sensei I need ask you something.
Aiga:what is it?
Haise:will you marry me?
Later.
???:pathetic go longunis!
Longunis hits quetzalcoatl into a stadium wall.
Alyssa:damn it!
Lui:guess who finally lost!
Alyssa:quetzalcoatl will beat you!
quetzalcoatl attacks longunis fiercely.
Lui:pathetic!
quetzalcoatl is sent flying outside the room.
Alyssa:no quetzalcoatl wait up!
Haise walks into the room.
Lui:look who shows up for a rematch.
Haise:me? I came here because I was actually was gonna enter the world championships.
Lui:battle with me!
Haise:sure.
3 2 1 go shoot!
Lui:go demon longunis metal dragon upper!
Haise:Maiden!
Haise's earrings glow blue.
Haise:nani!
A bright light comes from Haise.
Kaiser:I am back!
Lui:oh fusion huh.
Kaiser:it's not over!
Two copys of Kaiser appears and both of them unfused.
Shun:long time no see Haise.
Haise:same with you shun.
Lui:nani! What with this power!
Chapter end!
Dec. 11, 2020  8:18 PM
 
Part 5 chapter 5 shun and haise vs Lui!
Shun:Haise let's do this!
Haise:right!
Maiden splits into two beys.
Lui:pathetic go longunis!
Shun:maidens barrier!
Haise:I will cover you shun! Maidens time!
Longunis breaks through maidens barrier.
Shun:nani!
Lui:I watched your matches closely and found a weakness to maiden.
Haise:shun!
Shun is sent flying into a glass window.
Shun:damn it! Haise win this!
Shun and the copy of maiden disappeared.
Haise:shun.
Longunis hits maiden repeatedly.
Haise:shun.
Akira:Haise!
Aiga:Haise!
Haise:shun.
Maiden began to hit longunis back.
Lui:nani what's this!
Haise:thank you everyone! Maidens recollection!
A huge explosion hits longunis and Haise was knocked back.
Lui:longunis!
Maiden bursts.
Akira:Haise are you ok?
Aiga:Haise you ok?
Lui:damn brat!
Longunis was cracked.
Lane:Haise!
Haise was knocked out.
In shun's dream.
Later at the hospital.
Alice:dang it!
Delta:calm down Haise is fine.
In shun's mind.
Shun:Haise?
Haise:yes?
Shun:thank you for fighting for us, all of us!
Haise:no problem.
In the real world.
Shun:ugh where am i?
Aiga:Haise your awake.
Shun:Haise?
Aiga:oh so your not Haise.
Aiga leaves the room.
Shun:aiga do you me to get Haise?
Aiga:yeah sure.
Haise:yes?
Aiga:Haise I accept your marriage.
Shun walks into the room.
Shun:surprise aiga.
Aiga:their two of you?
Shun:yeah for now tho but um me and lane got divorced.
Haise:shun.
Haise kisses shun on the lips.
Shun:huh!
Aiga blushes.
Akira:shun,Haise what's going on?
Haise:here's a surprise me and shun don't share bodies anymore.
Akira:how?
Shun:Alice helped us.
Haise:shun back to what we were doing.
Shun:no Haise you know I am not in the mood.
Haise kisses shun on the lips.
Delta:what the hell is going on?
Haise:damn it were busted!
Delta:yes you are! What did we talked about you two kissing in public?
Shun:people won't know we are the same person.
Delta:how?
Haise walks back into the room.
Haise:I dyed my hair white.
Shun:since my hair is black people will never know.
Delta:why were you guys kissing?
Aiga:me and haise are getting married.
Haise:sorry but. Um shun will you marry me?
Shun:yes I will.
Haise wakes up.
Haise:what a weird dream.
Chapter end!
Dec. 12, 2020  5:16 AM
 
(Dec. 11, 2020  8:18 PM)kai edits Wrote: Part 5 chapter 5 shun and haise vs Lui!
Shun:Haise let's do this!
Haise:right!
Maiden splits into two beys.
Lui:pathetic go longunis!
Shun:maidens barrier!
Haise:I will cover you shun! Maidens time!
Longunis breaks through maidens barrier.
Shun:nani!
Lui:I watched your matches closely and found a weakness to maiden.
Haise:shun!
Shun is sent flying into a glass window.
Shun:damn it! Haise win this!
Shun and the copy of maiden disappeared.
Haise:shun.
Longunis hits maiden repeatedly.
Haise:shun.
Akira:Haise!
Aiga:Haise!
Haise:shun.
Maiden began to hit longunis back.
Lui:nani what's this!
Haise:thank you everyone! Maidens recollection!
A huge explosion hits longunis and Haise was knocked back.
Lui:longunis!
Maiden bursts.
Akira:Haise are you ok?
Aiga:Haise you ok?
Lui:damn brat!
Longunis was cracked.
Lane:Haise!
Haise was knocked out.
In shun's dream.
Later at the hospital.
Alice:dang it!
Delta:calm down Haise is fine.
In shun's mind.
Shun:Haise?
Haise:yes?
Shun:thank you for fighting for us, all of us!
Haise:no problem.
In the real world.
Shun:ugh where am i?
Aiga:Haise your awake.
Shun:Haise?
Aiga:oh so your not Haise.
Aiga leaves the room.
Shun:aiga do you me to get Haise?
Aiga:yeah sure.
Haise:yes?
Aiga:Haise I accept your marriage.
Shun walks into the room.
Shun:surprise aiga.
Aiga:their two of you?
Shun:yeah for now tho but um me and lane for divorced.
Haise:shun.
Haise kisses shun on the lips.
Shun:huh!
Aiga blushes.
Akira:shun,Haise what's going on?
Haise:here's a surprise me and shun don't share bodies anymore.
Akira:how?
Shun:Alice helped us.
Haise:shun back to what we were doing.
Shun:no Haise you know I am not in the mood.
Haise kisses shun on the lips.
Delta:what the hell is going on?
Haise:damn it were busted!
Delta:yes you are! What did we talked about you two kissing in public?
Shun:people won't know we are the same person.
Delta:how?
Haise walks back into the room.
Haise:I dyed my hair white.
Shun:since my hair is black people will never know.
Delta:why were you guys kissing?
Aiga:me and haise are getting married.
Haise:sorry but. Um shun will you marry me?
Shun:yes I will.
Haise wakes up.
Haise:what a weird dream.
Chapter end!

Now i feel like that's gonna happen in the real world with Haise and Shun XD
Dec. 12, 2020  5:30 AM
 
(Dec. 12, 2020  5:16 AM)PeppzieCola Wrote:
(Dec. 11, 2020  8:18 PM)kai edits Wrote: Part 5 chapter 5 shun and haise vs Lui!
Shun:Haise let's do this!
Haise:right!
Maiden splits into two beys.
Lui:pathetic go longunis!
Shun:maidens barrier!
Haise:I will cover you shun! Maidens time!
Longunis breaks through maidens barrier.
Shun:nani!
Lui:I watched your matches closely and found a weakness to maiden.
Haise:shun!
Shun is sent flying into a glass window.
Shun:damn it! Haise win this!
Shun and the copy of maiden disappeared.
Haise:shun.
Longunis hits maiden repeatedly.
Haise:shun.
Akira:Haise!
Aiga:Haise!
Haise:shun.
Maiden began to hit longunis back.
Lui:nani what's this!
Haise:thank you everyone! Maidens recollection!
A huge explosion hits longunis and Haise was knocked back.
Lui:longunis!
Maiden bursts.
Akira:Haise are you ok?
Aiga:Haise you ok?
Lui:damn brat!
Longunis was cracked.
Lane:Haise!
Haise was knocked out.
In shun's dream.
Later at the hospital.
Alice:dang it!
Delta:calm down Haise is fine.
In shun's mind.
Shun:Haise?
Haise:yes?
Shun:thank you for fighting for us, all of us!
Haise:no problem.
In the real world.
Shun:ugh where am i?
Aiga:Haise your awake.
Shun:Haise?
Aiga:oh so your not Haise.
Aiga leaves the room.
Shun:aiga do you me to get Haise?
Aiga:yeah sure.
Haise:yes?
Aiga:Haise I accept your marriage.
Shun walks into the room.
Shun:surprise aiga.
Aiga:their two of you?
Shun:yeah for now tho but um me and lane for divorced.
Haise:shun.
Haise kisses shun on the lips.
Shun:huh!
Aiga blushes.
Akira:shun,Haise what's going on?
Haise:here's a surprise me and shun don't share bodies anymore.
Akira:how?
Shun:Alice helped us.
Haise:shun back to what we were doing.
Shun:no Haise you know I am not in the mood.
Haise kisses shun on the lips.
Delta:what the hell is going on?
Haise:damn it were busted!
Delta:yes you are! What did we talked about you two kissing in public?
Shun:people won't know we are the same person.
Delta:how?
Haise walks back into the room.
Haise:I dyed my hair white.
Shun:since my hair is black people will never know.
Delta:why were you guys kissing?
Aiga:me and haise are getting married.
Haise:sorry but. Um shun will you marry me?
Shun:yes I will.
Haise wakes up.
Haise:what a weird dream.
Chapter end!

Now i feel like that's gonna happen in the real world with Haise and Shun XD
It might lol.
Dec. 13, 2020  6:35 AM
 
Part 5 chapter 6 Gwynn comes by!
Akira:you ok Haise-kun?
Haise:yes I am.
Gwynn walks into the room.
Gwynn:Haise!
Haise:yes?
Gwynn:battle me!
Haise:I can't.
Haise shows gwynn her broken arm.
Later.
Alex:shu?
Shu:yes?
Alex:what happened to shun?
Shu:we don't know.
Later at a local tournament.
???:burn in hell!
A huge explosion comes from the stadium.
Alyssa:nani? What going on?
???:your next Alyssa!
Later at haise's hospital room.
Alyssa rushes into the room.
Alyssa:shun someone is after me!
Haise:Alyssa?
Haise grabs her head with her left hand.
Alyssa:shun- I mean Haise can you help me.
Haise stays quiet.
Alyssa:Haise are you there?
In Haise's mind.
Haise:shun what do I do?
Shun:I don't know.
Kisara:maybe try helping her.
Back in the real world.
Haise:I will help you.
Later at a beyblade tournament.
Aiga:yo Haise!
Haise:huh?
Aiga:glad to see you here.
Haise:yeah.
Haise grabs her right shoulder.
Aiga:you ok?
Haise:yes I am.
Later.
Aiga:go Achilles!
Achilles wins with a burst finish.
Aiga:alright see you in the finals Haise!
Haise:yeah!
Later at the finals!
Aiga:go Achilles!
Haise:go maiden!
Maiden gets knocked back.
Aiga:not bad Haise.
Haise smiles.
Haise:maiden!
Maiden attacks Achilles repeatedly.
Aiga:huh!
A bloody aura forms around Haise.
Haise:die Achilles!
Aiga:go Achilles! Infinity Breaker!
Haise:Go maiden! Maidens recollection!
Aiga:arghhhhhhhhhhhhhh! Achilles!
Achilles glows gold.
Haise:vengeful turbo!
Maiden glows white.
A random bey interferes the attack.
???:regalia big bang!
A huge explosion comes from the stadium.
Haise:what!
Maiden was knocked out and Achilles was still spinning.
Gwynn:shun! Your mine!
Gwynn grabs Haise by her injured arm/shoulder.
Haise:what are you doing?
Chapter end.
Part 5 chapter 7 Haise meets shun's past!
Haise:where am I?
Gwynn:it's time I free you from Haise shun.
Later after gwynn tortured Haise nearly to death.
Dimitri:so well this work gwynn?
Gwynn:let's find out.
Gwynn pulls out a centipede .
Haise:no!
Later at Alice's house.
Alice:I have no seen Haise in a few days.
A alarm comes from Alice's phone.
Alice: Delta come quick Haise is in danger.
Later.
Haise screams in pain.
Gwynn:damn brat!
Gwynn slaps Haise.
Dimitri:it's crazy Haise is still alive.
Gwynn:Haise is shun I did the math.
Gwynn's door gets broken down.
Alice:free Haise now!
Gwynn:what are you gonna do about it?
Eda walks into the room.
Eda:free my girlfriend at once!
Later after Eda battles gwynn and Dimitri.
Eda:Alice let's get out of here.
Eda carrys Haise body in her arms.
Later in the hospital.
Haise wakes up.
Alice:Haise you ok?
Haise:yeah i am.
Eda:Haise I am glad your ok.
Eda smiles.
Haise: Eda I thought you hated me and wanted to kill me.
Eda:before I did but now I love you Haise.
Haise blushes.
In Haise's daydream.
Shu:Haise is fine but what happened to shun?
Shun walks into the room.
Shun:yo long time no see!
Haise snaps out of the day dream.
Shu:so Haise are you ok?
Haise:yes I am.
Haise pulls out the centipede from her ear.
Haise:what's this?
Eda:it's a centipede.
A few years later.
Haise:akira wait up!
Akira:sorry Haise-kun. I am just happy to see you battle.
Haise:me too!
Alice runs passed akira and Haise.
Alice:I am gonna be first.
Haise runs ahead of Alice.
Eda:I am already ahead.
Eda is waiting in front of the arena door.
Later.
3 2 1 go shoot!
Haise:Go Maiden!
Eda:Go hiatus!
Alice:Go Pegasus!
Delta:Go Diabolos!
A huge explosion comes from the stadium.
Haise,Eda,Alice,Delta laughed.
Chapter end!
In the memory of shun kurenai
Part 1-5
Maybe you rest in peace.
Dec. 13, 2020  7:19 PM
 
Goodbye Shun Lisa Kurenai!
Dec. 14, 2020  2:13 PM
 
Part 5 chapter 8 and 9 old threat returns!

Haise:jeez you guys are strong I can't wait for the legends festival.
Eda:me too!
Akira:Haise-kun are you ok?
Haise:yes I am.
???:Haise.... Haise!
Haise:huh who is there?
In Haise mind.
???:Haise are you gonna let shun die or you are gonna save her?
Haise:who are you and what do you want with shun?
???:why would I need her? I am her!
Shun(black hair):give me my body back!
Haise:your just a personality I am the real shun!
Shun(black hair):don't blame me for the deaths that's among you.
In the real world.
Akira:Haise? Haise!
Haise gasps.
Haise:yes akira?
Akira:are you ok?
Haise:I don't know but shun wants my body.
Akira:shun? I thought she died?
Haise:yeah she did but I don't know her motives are.
Haise thinks to herself
Haise:exactly as planned.
Akira:so your gonna stay Haise-kun?
Haise:yes I will.
Future actions that shun(black hair) shows Haise.
Lane:who is there?
Haise:it's just me.
Free:Haise what do you want?
Haise:a battle will be nice.
Later .
Free slams into the wall.
Free:Haise!
Haise:I can't let you know my true motive so I must kill anyone that finds out.
Free: Damn..... You!
Free dies from blood lost.
Haise:1 down 11 to go!
Maiden glows red.
Maiden:I need more power!
Haise:yeah!
Later.
Valt:hey Haise what brings you here?
Haise:I wanted to battle you.
Later.
Valt is sent flying into a glass window.
Valt:damn it!
Valt falls to his death.
Later.
Shu:hey Haise want to battle me?
Haise:sure.
Later.
Shu is sent flying .
Shu:why you!
Shu almost dies from blood loss.
Haise: Damn brat!
Haise punchs shu repeatedly till he fell to his death.
Haise: 3 down 8 to go!
Shun(black hair):see what I mean?
Haise:fine why don't we fuse and just become one?
Shun(black hair):that might work.
Haise:before we do this will maiden evolve when we fuse?
Shun(black hair):it happened before so yeah I guess.
Haise wakes up in her bed.
Haise: Did it work?
Shun:yes it did.
Haise falls out of bed in shock.
Haise:how did you do that.
Shun:I can talk to you in your head so let's say i am your demon.
Haise:fine.
Akira:your up Haise who were you talking to?
Haise:I was talking to shun.
Akira looks around the room.
Akira:shun's not here.
Haise sighs.
Shun:akira.
Akira:huh?
Shun:good to you.
Later.
Free:where is Haise?
Haise walks by free.
Free:hey Haise!
Haise ignores free.
Free:what's wrong with you?
Free runs up to Haise
Haise: Damn traitor!
Haise pushs free out of the way.
Later.
3 2 1 go shoot!
Haise grins.
Random kid:go!
Valkyrie wing accel hits maiden.
Haise: Damn brat!
Maiden hits valkyrie against the wall of the stadium.
Random kid:no!
Maiden glows red then Haise's eyes glows red.
Haise: Die!
A huge explosion hits valkyrie then valkyrie breaks in half and the kid is sent flying.
Free:Nani!
Lane smiles.
Lane:your flare is growing Haise! I am proud!
Later after Haise beats another 69 kids beys.
Haise grabs the broken layer of the kids bey off the floor.
Haise:damn .... Garbage!
Haise slams the layer on the floor.
Later.
Haise:was I going over board?
Shun:you did but you got the job done.
???:hey you little cutie want to hang out later?
Haise:no thanks.
the person grabs her by the arm.
???:let's go!
Haise:maidens time!
*time stops*
Lane:Nani?
Lane rushs towards Haise.
Lane:Haise are you ok you hurt?
Haise:I am fine!
Haise breaks free and knock the guy in toward of a moving car.
*time resumes*
???:what the?
The car hits the guy killing him.
Lane:Haise you... Killed someone.
Haise:the police can't find out I was wearing gloves.
Lane:nani!
Shun:nice job block head now he is gonna follow you around for proof.
Haise: shut up Shun!
Lane: Shun?
Haise:damn it!
Later.
3 2 1 go shoot.
Joshua:Go genius!
Haise:Get a life!
Genius hits maiden but bursts.
Haise:first to 10 points wins!
Chapter end!
Dec. 15, 2020  2:08 PM
 
I combined chapters 8 and 9.
Will Haise start a killing spree? Is she involved with the murder of someone? Can she escape the truth?
Dec. 16, 2020  2:12 PM
 
Part 5 chapter 10 flashback of Haise's past! Preview.
Haise;Damn it! I can't regenerate my wounds in time damn it!
Luna;Damn brat die already!
Haise coughs up blood.
Haise:I promise shun with all heart I will still fight for her.
Luna:nonsense!
Luna crushs Haise's arm.
Haise:if I can't beat you now I can always try again.
Luna laughs.
Luna:try all you want your still gonna die to me!
Haise:never!
Later.
3 2 1 go shoot!
Luna:phantom nightmare!
Haise:Lets go Shun!
Shun:right!
Haise and shun:Guardian fusion!
Preview end!
Part 5 chapter 10 flashback of Haise's past!
A huge explosion knocks Haise into the air.
Haise;Damn it! I can't regenerate my wounds in time damn it!
Luna;Damn brat die already!
Haise coughs up blood.
Haise:I promise shun with all heart I will still fight for her.
Luna:nonsense!
Luna crushs Haise's arm.
Haise:if I can't beat you now I can always try again.
Luna laughs.
Luna:try all you want your still gonna die to me!
Haise:never!
Luna:phantom nightmare!
Haise:Lets go Shun!
Shun:right!
Haise and shun:Guardian fusion!
Luna:died!
Phantom nightmare attacks maiden.
Kaiser:Nice Nice! Luna-san!
Maiden jumps into the air.
Luna:What are you planning?
Kaiser smiles.
Kaiser:Arrivederci!
A huge explosion knocks Kaiser and Luna back.
Luna:nani?
Kaiser was no where to be found.
Later.
Haise;Damn it!
Alice:Haise you ok?
Alice grabs him by his arm.
Haise:sis are you?
Alice leans in to kiss Haise on the lips.
Delta:ALICE ARE YOU CHEATING ON ME!
Alice: Delta are home early.
Delta: drum told me everything about you Haise kurenai or should I call you by your real name Shu-.
Delta collapses on the floor.
Haise:my my how the tables have turned.
Alice:so this whole thing was a plan?
Haise laughs.
Haise:clever one you are my little flower.
Eda grabs Haise by the neck.
Eda:release Haise right now shun.
Shun:never! I was doing all the work.
Haise:get out of my head.
Shun appears next to Haise.
Shun: Damn ******* !
Haise:it's all your fault for what happened to Logan!
Haise grab shun.
Shun:Maidens time!
Haise:Maidens time!
Haise punchs shun.
Shun:damn you!
Chapter end
Dec. 18, 2020  5:42 PM
 
Part 5 chapter 11 shun vs Haise!
Haise:you are nothing like me!
Shun:I am you!
Akira:Haise-kun!
Later.
3 2 1 go shoot!
Shun:Go vengeful nemesis!
Haise:Go Maiden!
Nemesis knocks maiden into the air.
Haise:is that all you got little-.
Haise coughs up blood.
Shun:I told you multiple times if we had work together this would not had happened.
Haise:I wanted .... To save you!
Shun grins.
Shun: Save who?
Haise: Shun!
Nemesis hits maiden repeatedly.
Haise: Damn it!
Haise coughs up more blood.
Shun:Goodbye old friend!
A tear drops from shun's cheek as nemesis knocks maiden into the air.
Eda:Haise!
Delta launches Diabolos.
Delta: Diabolos!
Shun laughs.
Shun:more people the merrier!
Nemesis knocks Diabolos into the stadium wall.
Delta:your stronger then Haise. Damn it!
Haise is sent flying into next to Eda.
Eda:Haise are you ok?
Haise: Eda-san take maiden and beat shun.
Haise dies in Eda's arm's.
Eda:Haiseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
Eda crys.
Delta:Go Diabolos! Death upper!
Nemesis is knocked into the air.
Shun:not bad. But!
Alice rushs over to haise's body.
Alice:Haise! Haise!
Alice checks haise's pulse.
Alice:their is no pulse.
Eda grabs maiden.
Eda:Haise I will avenge you!
Hiatus glows red and maiden glows black.
Eda:What's this!
Maiden and hiatus fuse.
Eda:Haise.
Maiden hits nemesis back.
Shun:what?
Eda:your gonna die! Go Angel Maiden!
Shun:You dare challenge a god? Go nemesis!
A huge explosion happens when both beys strike each other.
Eda:This is our power! Haise please lend me your power! Angel's time!
*time stops*
Chapter end!
Next time on beyblade burst apocalypse!
Eda: Die shun!
Alice:Haise please wake up!
Delta:Haise come back to us!
A shadow of Haise's teacher appears.
Awaken Haise the final battle is yours!
3 2 1 go shoot!
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