[Fan Fiction] Beyblade Burst: VS
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(Jul. 31, 2021 8:31 AM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Reign Achilles
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You drawed it?!?
(Jul. 31, 2021 12:30 PM)Demon Belial Wrote:(Jul. 31, 2021 8:31 AM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Reign Achilles
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You drawed it?!?
Nope
Beyblade Burst: VS Opening "The Asterisk War"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pc_0jNuLhEw
I've updated my first post(First page of this thread), you can check it out.
(Jul. 31, 2021 12:53 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote:Then where did you found it??(Jul. 31, 2021 12:30 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: You drawed it?!?
Nope
Beyblade Burst: VS Opening "The Asterisk War"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pc_0jNuLhEw
I've updated my first post(First page of this thread), you can check it out.
(Jul. 31, 2021 2:47 PM)Demon Belial Wrote:(Jul. 31, 2021 12:53 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: NopeThen where did you found it??
Beyblade Burst: VS Opening "The Asterisk War"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pc_0jNuLhEw
I've updated my first post(First page of this thread), you can check it out.
It’s a concept art for Union Achilles.
Nice! Also cool opening!
I’ll definitely release Chapter 13 tomorrow (Today was a busy day)
Nice, I'll defentily read it!
Chapter 13 is here (The Best Chapter Yet)
If you guys are free, then feel free to rate it.
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(Aug. 01, 2021 2:50 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Chapter 13 is here (The Best Chapter Yet)
If you guys are free, then feel free to rate it.Spoiler (Click to View)
Grammar: 4.9/5 - I spotted the most slight errors, but other than that, its fine!
Dialogue: 5/5 - Lol you make the dialogue very good and it looks like they are spreading their emotions very professional!
Writing: 5/5 - The writing was great and it really looked like you was happy to have done this, nicely done!
Characters: 5/5 - It seems the characters have emotion! Great job!
Story: 5/5 - I like how this episode is the result of all of the other episodes, it really shows how far Drake has come!
All 'n All (Total): 24.9/25 - Please, don't stop doing what you're doing! Amazing episode!!
this has to be my favorite chapter from you
(Aug. 01, 2021 3:15 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:(Aug. 01, 2021 2:50 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Chapter 13 is here (The Best Chapter Yet)
If you guys are free, then feel free to rate it.Spoiler (Click to View)
Grammar: 4.9/5 - I spotted the most slight errors, but other than that, its fine!
Dialogue: 5/5 - Lol you make the dialogue very good and it looks like they are spreading their emotions very professional!
Writing: 5/5 - The writing was great and it really looked like you was happy to have done this, nicely done!
Characters: 5/5 - It seems the characters have emotion! Great job!
Story: 5/5 - I like how this episode is the result of all of the other episodes, it really shows how far Drake has come!
All 'n All (Total): 24.9/25 - Please, don't stop doing what you're doing! Amazing episode!!
this has to be my favorite chapter from you
I'm glad you liked it. What was your fav part?
(Aug. 01, 2021 3:34 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote:definitely had to be when dragoon countered baldur's dread vertical type move!(Aug. 01, 2021 3:15 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Grammar: 4.9/5 - I spotted the most slight errors, but other than that, its fine!
Dialogue: 5/5 - Lol you make the dialogue very good and it looks like they are spreading their emotions very professional!
Writing: 5/5 - The writing was great and it really looked like you was happy to have done this, nicely done!
Characters: 5/5 - It seems the characters have emotion! Great job!
Story: 5/5 - I like how this episode is the result of all of the other episodes, it really shows how far Drake has come!
All 'n All (Total): 24.9/25 - Please, don't stop doing what you're doing! Amazing episode!!
this has to be my favorite chapter from you
I'm glad you liked it. What was your fav part?
It was great! But I had to use my pc to read it. Cuz the fonts were not visible on my phone.
And Im bad at rating sorry.
And Im bad at rating sorry.
I could not see the character some square was voted blocking it I'm gonna need to read it in computer
Chapter 14 will mainly focus Valt and Free.
(Aug. 02, 2021 11:04 AM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: The Turbo Festival Competitors
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I like the name aqen
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(Aug. 02, 2021 12:28 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: This is how Seraph Valtryek looks
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The bey looks purple... But Valkyrie always is blue.
(Aug. 02, 2021 7:04 PM)Demon Belial Wrote:(Aug. 02, 2021 12:28 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: This is how Seraph Valtryek looks
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The bey looks purple... But Valkyrie always is blue.
I guess I made a mistake lol.
Red Eye's face reveal
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(Jul. 26, 2021 10:36 AM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Redux Phoenix .Diminute Variance(Driver + Disc) -Secure
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Plus that's this is the new Red Eye. (It took me 2 hours to edit it)
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I never noticed it
Sheesh new red eye is sick!!!
(Aug. 03, 2021 12:15 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Upcoming Chapters (I did some changes)Lightning Jupiter... There's a constant storm on Jupiter BUT also Jupiter is the roman version of Zeus, the greek god of lightning.
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I see what you did there, nice.