[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade Burst: Matrix!

Episode 5!

hope you guys enjoy! :D

Episode 6 Preview!

Uriel: Wow! Aria's got a new upgrade to her bey! I'm first in line!

Uriel: Wait, Bax has a strategy to defeat her? This'll be wicked epic!

Uriel: WOW! Time for Ulysses to get an upgrade as well!

Next Episode on Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Fierce Showdown! Aurora Vs. Basilisk!

also update on news valt will have a MUCH bigger role in later chapters
(Jun. 28, 2021  5:39 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 5!

hope you guys enjoy! Grin

Episode 6 Preview!

Uriel: Wow! Aria's got a new upgrade to her bey! I'm first in line!

Uriel: Wait, Bax has a strategy to defeat her? This'll be wicked epic!

Uriel: WOW! Time for Ulysses to get an upgrade as well!

Next Episode on Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Shining Fierce! Aurora's Upgrade!

also update on news valt will have a MUCH bigger role in later chapters
They're friends now. Anyways nice job overall
(Jun. 28, 2021  10:23 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:
(Jun. 28, 2021  5:39 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 5!

hope you guys enjoy! Grin

Episode 6 Preview!

Uriel: Wow! Aria's got a new upgrade to her bey! I'm first in line!

Uriel: Wait, Bax has a strategy to defeat her? This'll be wicked epic!

Uriel: WOW! Time for Ulysses to get an upgrade as well!

Next Episode on Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Shining Fierce! Aurora's Upgrade!

also update on news valt will have a MUCH bigger role in later chapters
They're friends now. Anyways nice job overall

alright thanks

since im so bored i might post another chapter today lol
(Jun. 28, 2021  10:48 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jun. 28, 2021  10:23 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: They're friends now. Anyways nice job overall

alright thanks

since im so bored i might post another chapter today lol

Lol I have done it before
Episode 6!
You know, aside from the little nitpick I always leave on inserting more detail into your story's universe, you're doing pretty good so far. Nice.
(Jun. 29, 2021  12:05 AM)PinkRose Wrote: You know, aside from the little nitpick I always leave on inserting more detail into your story's universe, you're doing pretty good so far. Nice.

wow thanks i try my best

Episode 7 Preview!

Uriel: Wait, a person to try it out on? This'll be wicked!

Uriel: Aw man! He's gonna battle Bax first...

Uriel: Wait, his beyblade's name is Salamander?!

Uriel: No matter! Me and Ulysses will go super Matrix!

Next Episode of Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Abysmal Roar! Royal Salamander!

(Jun. 29, 2021  12:23 AM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jun. 29, 2021  12:05 AM)PinkRose Wrote: You know, aside from the little nitpick I always leave on inserting more detail into your story's universe, you're doing pretty good so far. Nice.

wow thanks i try my best

Episode 7 Preview!

Uriel: Wait, a person to try it out on? This'll be wicked!

Uriel: Aw man! He's gonna battle Bax first...

Uriel: Wait, his beyblade's name is Salamander?!

Uriel: No matter! Me and Ulysses will go super Matrix!

Next Episode of Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Abysmal Roar! Royal Salamander!

and Guess who's oc's beyblade is debuting!
Episode 7!

Episode 8 Preview!

Uriel: Yeah, we're gonna do some training before the tournament! Sweet!

Uriel: I wonder what's the surprise gonna be...

Uriel: Awesome! We're gonna meet a legend!

Uriel: FREE DE LA HOYA!?

Next Episode Of Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Ghostly Dragon! Spectre Fafnir!

3,
2,
1!

Let it... RIP!!

also this will be the last episode of the 1st arc
(Jun. 29, 2021  5:14 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 7!

Episode 8 Preview!

Uriel: Yeah, we're gonna do some training before the tournament! Sweet!

Uriel: I wonder what's the surprise gonna be...

Uriel: Awesome! We're gonna meet a legend!

Uriel: FREE DE LA HOYA!?

Next Episode Of Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Ghostly Dragon! Spectre Fafnir!

3,
2,
1!

Let it... RIP!!

also this will be the last episode of the 1st arc

Grammar: 4/5. I only noticed one mistake and that was you didn't capitalize one of the character's names's can't remember which one tho.
Story: 4/5. It was really good it felt like an advertisement for Salamander but you pulled it off really well tho I wish you described the bey more.
Characters: 5/5. The Characters had a lot of life and I loved it hanging out and you nailed Valt's personality tho him coming out of who knows where was kinda odd but I'll let it slide
Dialogue: 4/5. It was really good you showed the characters' emotions really well and I loved that though you could've shown a bit more.
Length: 5/5. Nice and long doesn't feel rushed at all I loved that you did a great job with length and I can see the work you put in.

Total: 22/25 Really good you just need to do the things I suggested then your golden (Also could you rate my recent chapter on Beyjitzu please)
(Jun. 29, 2021  6:06 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jun. 29, 2021  5:14 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 7!

Episode 8 Preview!

Uriel: Yeah, we're gonna do some training before the tournament! Sweet!

Uriel: I wonder what's the surprise gonna be...

Uriel: Awesome! We're gonna meet a legend!

Uriel: FREE DE LA HOYA!?

Next Episode Of Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Ghostly Dragon! Spectre Fafnir!

3,
2,
1!

Let it... RIP!!

also this will be the last episode of the 1st arc

Grammar: 4/5. I only noticed one mistake and that was you didn't capitalize one of the character's names's can't remember which one tho.
Story: 4/5. It was really good it felt like an advertisement for Salamander but you pulled it off really well tho I wish you described the bey more.
Characters: 5/5. The Characters had a lot of life and I loved it hanging out and you nailed Valt's personality tho him coming out of who knows where was kinda odd but I'll let it slide
Dialogue: 4/5. It was really good you showed the characters' emotions really well and I loved that though you could've shown a bit more.
Length: 5/5. Nice and long doesn't feel rushed at all I loved that you did a great job with length and I can see the work you put in.

Total: 22/25 Really good you just need to do the things I suggested then your golden (Also could you rate my recent chapter on Beyjitzu please)

alright thanks and sure

Blader: Bax Noiji

Gender: Male

Age: 12

Birthday: September 15

Status: Tritagonist

Characteristics: Bax is a medium height boy with dark skin, green eyes and red hair. He has a purple vest with red fur around it and a red snake on the right and a giant snake at the back of the vest, on top of a dark green camouflage shirt (with the sleeves being ripped out of them). He has green ripped jeans with full black shoes, and has a snake going across his left eye.

Personality: Bax is very aggressive towards people, shown how he called Uriel a Punk in episode 1. He can also act selfish, shown in episode 6 when he completely disregarded the fact that Aria and Uriel were battling and interrupted anyway. However, he has a soft side, shown how when he befriended and joined Uriel's journey during episode 5. Sometimes, he can act a bit selfless, like Aria.

Beyblade: Dominate Basilisk Down Under Protect+Shielding

Type: Defense

Parts:

Matrix Chip: Basilisk - Basilisk is a chip with a red serpentine-like dragon head that is looking downward along with a green overall motif with purple details.

Matrix Ring: Dominate - Dominate is a red ring with purple on the outside, it has a whopping 14 blades spaced out, making its defense and stamina higher.

Forge Disc: Down - Down is a disc with 7 *shields* that increases the beyblade's burst resistance and defense.

Performance Tip: Under - Down is a black, metal ball tip that can be pushed in to become a very aggressive tip. It increases the tips defense and weight, but has its stamina lowered.

Layer Plating: Protect - Protect is a green plating that has 8 protrusions. It gives the beyblade more weight, and defense.

Matrix Excess: Shielding - Shielding is an excess that goes onto the Dominate ring. It is metal, green, and gives the beyblade more weight and defense, yet makes it quite unstable.

Special Shoots:

Quantum Shoot: When a blader achieves the Quantum Shoot, their beyblade gains IMMENSE attack, defense, or stamina (depending on the typing). The blader is also able to pull off a Quantum Special Move.

Special Moves:

Under Counter: When Basilisk gets sent up the stadium by an attack, it uses it's weight and the Under Performance Tip to ride down to the opponent, resulting in a massive attack.

Dominate Shield: When Basilisk gets to the center, it uses it's Dominate ring in its Shield mode, and its Matrix Excess, Shielding, to deflect the opponents attacks.

Dominate Crush: While Basilisk is in it's Crush Mode, it spirals around the stadium, and then charges at the opposing bey, dealing massive damage.



Launching Style: 3: He clicks his beyblade in his launcher.
2: He thrusts his launcher forward with his left hand.
1: He bends down and brings the launcher down to his knees.
Lesson to learn from this entry: Always pick the OC with the least number of previous entries so you don't spend two hours picking unused part names (and end up using three existing parts regardless).

YES THIS IS WHAT I WAS LOOKING FOR

alright ur character is in!

she'll probably debut during the Matrix Bladers Cup arc

OK guys, im gonna change the name of the Matrix Bladers Cup

ehhh im not
(Jun. 30, 2021  1:46 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: YES THIS IS WHAT I WAS LOOKING FOR

alright ur character is in!

she'll probably debut during the Matrix Bladers Cup arc

OK guys, im gonna change the name of the Matrix Bladers Cup

ehhh im not

lol okay
Episode 8!

Episode 9 Preview!

Uriel: This is awesome! We're gonna win this thing!

Uriel: A new blader?! Yeah! This is gonna be so fun!

Uriel: We're going all out and making it to the semi-finals!

Next Episode Of Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Intermission! The Quantum Cup!

since we are already kinda in the 2nd arc i'll be revealing the legends that will be debuting:

Valt Aoi (Present) Beyblade: Paladin Valkyrie Shank Blade Ahead+Pierce
Shu Kurenai (Not Present)
Free De La Hoya (Present) Spectre Fafnir Withdraw Seize Void+Cushion
Lui Shirosagi (Not Present)
Big lol at the Joe throwback with Juudai's little scene in the end, that was a nice one.
(Jun. 30, 2021  10:22 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Big  lol at the Joe throwback with Juudai's little scene in the end, that was a nice one.

lol thanks, joe was one of my favorite characters in rise

yes i finally made my profile image
Episode 9!

Episode 10 Preview!

Uriel: I gotta get to training if I wanna win the tournament!

Uriel: YEAH! Valt's gonna be in town, he can help me with training!

Uriel: Quantum Flare? Quantum Special Moves? What's that?

Next Episode On Beyblade Burst Matrix!

Divine Sword! Paladin Valkyrie!
Episode 10!
(Jul. 02, 2021  3:41 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 10!

Wait Santino has a mansion?
(Jul. 02, 2021  3:41 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 10!
Nice
(Jul. 02, 2021  10:34 PM)Lucha Burst Wrote:
(Jul. 02, 2021  3:41 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 10!

Wait Santino has a mansion?

uh i just added that in there i thought it would be cool because for some reason santino gives me bell vibes when i write him in this fanfic
Come on Juudai I believe in you my girl.
(Jul. 02, 2021  11:48 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Come on Juudai I believe in you my girl.

Oof, losing the first on-screen match is not a very good start there...R.I.P
Valt's beyblade burst matrix character profile!

(Jul. 03, 2021  12:08 AM)PinkRose Wrote: Oof, losing the first on-screen match is not a very good start there...R.I.P

maybe she'll win, maybe she'll lose. 50/50. i dont realy wanna spoil episode 11 tho lol