(May. 12, 2021 11:33 AM)MasterofDerp Wrote: Episode 5 is up! I think this is the best one yet. It is definitely the longest tho. Also, I wanna hear as many Lukas Grant hate stuff as possible. He’s meant to be a character you love to hate!
https://www.wattpad.com/1068795237-beybl...une/page/9
Ya know, if I had a dime for every time the words Lukas and malicious came in the same sentence, I'd be able to get myself a Bey or two by the end of the chapter.
Plot: 5/5. Once again, steady advancement with a new character making his debut.
Dialogue: 5/5. Top notch as always. I still have a problem keeping myself from laughing when someone presses on a particular syllable of a word *coughTAKEONMYFLAREEEEEEEcough*, like, I'm not supposed to laugh at a serious flashback, but it's all good, that's on me.
Characterization: 5/5 (FOCC YOU LUKAS!!!). Let me tell you something: it takes a lot to actually make me hate a character. Most bad characters I'm usually neutral on, but this guy? Already disliking him (not too much hate, but again, that's on me. Plus, I'm pretty sure he'll get worse next chapter). Also loving how Rin can't seem to keep up the touh guy act that much in front of Batal and co, this dude's probably my favorite of the new characters.
Grammar: 3.5/5. Okaaay, that one fell short a bit this chapter. I noticed several instances of repeating sentences (or two sentences with the same meaning right after each other), there's that same small bit of capitalization issues, but unless I missed anything else, that would be all.
Battles: 5/5. Rin gets rekt for the third time in a row (come on kid, I know you got this!), Batal gets rekt too (but he still has a chance and I believe in our MC boi), and the action is very well-done and entertaining as always.
Final Rating: 23.5/25. Pretty great chapter, sets up a lot of hype, looking forward to see Lukas being put in his place next time.
(P.S: There's something I wanna tell you, mind if I send it through PM?)
I'll definitely put something here soon.
Probably.
Maybe?
Naaaaah.