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Prologue

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Every hundred years a portal is re-opened. On the other end of the portal are rogue bladers attempting to stop any force that comes through....

Chapter 1

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"The year was 2099 and i could tell i wasn't yet ready to be a blader. I could barely move as i lied there right beside my bey that was lodged into the ground. I could hear everyone yelling telling me to get up but i had no more strength left with me."

"Get off the ground you weakling , I'm not finished with you just yet." One of the shadow fighters said as he began to walk towards me. ''I SAID GET UP!!" . The shadow blader said as he lifted me off the ground with one hand. ''You thought this would be easy did you?''

''W-Well sort of. They didn't tell me that battling you was apart of the job. I guess i'm fired then huh.'' I said with my last breath

''Well i guess you'll be filing for unemployment because now is the end for you.'' The shadow blader said as his bey began to charge.

''KAI! , GET UP KAI YOU CAN TAKE HIM." Haley yelled as tears fell down her face. ''You have to win Kai and you will. All you have to do is believe....I know you can." Haley said as she fell to her knees. ''I-It can't end like this , It won't end like this.'' Haley said whipping the tears from her face.

''You know paralax? If i don't stop you then the dimension lords will." I said as i began to cough in pain.

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Ok, first, the chapters waaaay to short. Try to make it longer by doing these:
Describe the scene. They could be in a Veggie Tales movie for all we know.
Describe the characters.
Describe the situation. How did the protagonist get into this?

Also, grammar needs a bit of work. Seems interesting though.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

I was making like one those stories that start from the end then the beginning. Like the movie mega mind

Never saw the movie, so I'm not really sure what you're saying. Just try to build the environment more.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)