World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc.

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Prologue

Chapter 1
Ok, first, the chapters waaaay to short. Try to make it longer by doing these:
Describe the scene. They could be in a Veggie Tales movie for all we know.
Describe the characters.
Describe the situation. How did the protagonist get into this?

Also, grammar needs a bit of work. Seems interesting though.
I was making like one those stories that start from the end then the beginning. Like the movie mega mind
Never saw the movie, so I'm not really sure what you're saying. Just try to build the environment more.