the beyblade super story

i will be taking character requests and pm me if u see any errors also tell me if i did good or not i can take critisim im only 12
Good,good,there are a couple places needing capitilization.
Hmmm......Much improvement needed
right... super... needs a lot of work but otherwise.. pretty average Mary Sue!
(Aug. 16, 2011  7:26 AM)Bunnii2165 Wrote: right... super... needs a lot of work but otherwise.. pretty average Mary Sue!
This.