So... Many... Errors...
You really need to put effort into this. I'm not trying to be rude, but, you need to fix those mistakes. Put the story through whatever little-story-writer-thing (Ex: Windows 95) you have on your computer and fox the errors. It's really jumbled up. And if someone gives you advice, don't be rude.
Rudeness
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Beyblade mau5 Wrote:Ok fine whatever Ill change it k
Sorry if you weren't trying to be rude. it just seemed rude to me.
They're just trying to be friendly and help. DefStamina88 is an AMAZING writer. And you can be, too, if you put the effort in. Take this from a writer with expereance. I've been writing for a long time. Just read my story or PM me if you want help.
~China
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