I LOVE THIS STORY!!! IT'S AWESOME!

Thanks. I actually decided to take xxaron's advice

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I LOVE THIS STORY!!! IT'S AWESOME!

Thanks. I actually decided to take xxaron's advice

Your welcome! I really mean it! Yes, I know that sometimes it's VERY hard to take XXaron's advice. Just reading it is a feat in itself!

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Hahaha, thanks guys.
It's always good seeing people take advice.
And you really have improved in your writing...
Keep it up, and maybe lengthen the chapters (Simply so more stuff can be in one chapter and you won't have to split it up) if possible.
Make sure you keep writing, you do have plenty of potential!

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Want a ok story that's readable? With actual grammar? Check out Everything Spins Into Chaos: A beyblade story
I use Hasbro beys. Because I have no acsess to TT or Sonokong beys. Hopefully that'll change soon.
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Thanks to you too.

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I am doing a story of my own and I have this problem. I think you are going a bit to fast. Take time to describe the scenery, and explain more in depth what is happening. But otherwise, great story! I am writing one currently and will begin a new one soon. Check them out if you want.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

Nice story. I write a little myself, but, nothing like this ^__^
*Chuckling*
Keep writing!!!

Nice story. I write a little myself, but, nothing like this ^__^
*Chuckling*
Keep writing!!!

Thanks man, very appreciated.

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I am doing a story of my own and I have this problem. I think you are going a bit to fast. Take time to describe the scenery, and explain more in depth what is happening. But otherwise, great story! I am writing one currently and will begin a new one soon. Check them out if you want.

Yeah, there is quite the reason for this, a lot of the story never saw the day of light, like the Ten no Shita (under the heavens) tournament which happens before the battle tower, Jigoku o Kaishite Bāsuto (burst through hell) tournament after the first tournament, Tenshi no Ribōn (angel reborns) fight which happens after Ten no Shita, Thunderbringers, and a lot more stuff.
Detail was cut out because it just didn't feel correct.

Also after chapter 5 I had to start rushing since the story was going to take to long for my plans.

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1/4 of a new chapter in OP

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