beyblades aren't just spinning tops! - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 08, 2012
Hey guise I got bored today sooo lets start this story,
chapter 1: being bullied
"Aries! burning horn attack!!" I said as I reach my hand put as if I this stupid spinning top actually would do this. Hey, I forgot the introduction, my name is Sai Katawari I actually believe this toy "beyblade" will actually do what I say. The reason I'm doing this is because the JBBO (Japanese beyblade battle organization) is holding a tourney at the local JBBO building. I always get bullied because I believe in this beyblade burn ariesBD145CS can actually do special attacks. Back to the story. -Sigh- "It doesn't work like it does on those tournaments on TV!" I yell kicking the stadium.
-sigh- I gotta go get to school. I pack my bag with my 3 segment grip with a white revup HK exclusive, black launcher rubber, white grip rubber, and the usual black beypointer. As I run to school my best friend Tsukune Ashita, runs over me with his bike. "oops! Sai! I didn't mean to do that!" he said. "Jesus man-"I say when I get cut off "I gotta go see you later" -sigh- "Hey what are you sighing for?" I hear. Is your aries talking back to you?" I also hear. I hear a mixture of two people laughing. "Wait it can't" "hahahaha!" I turn around and punch the bullies in the never mind and ran away.
After running from the bullies i've decided to not come to school. I decided to goto the JBBO building for a practice battle. When I got there a mysterious guy gave me a piece of paper saying this
beyblade tournament today!! come join us in 165
Akashita Dr.
"Go there, your aries might do something" he says. " Wait what?!" I yell in embarrassment, "Do you stalk me or something?" He disappeared. "I guess I should go" I mummer, "Its not like I'm going to school or anything." So as I got there I notice a tent with cheaply written sharpie saying "berubade tirny "berubade? tirny?" I though I should go because I was still thinking about that stalker. I signed up. "Round 1 Sai Katawari versus! Koro Kirishino" I stepped up to the dish. Now thats scary stuff man. Some little school kid against some guy in a trench coat. Took out that grip and bey. "THREE" I yell. "two" Koro says casually like he doesn't care "ONE" I and the crowd yell. " GO SHOOT!" We both yell. I did five revs and pressed the button. "Pegasis meteor smash!!!" Koro yells. His bey poison pegasis 85XF flew into the air. I thought I should get into this action. " Aries dodge!" Aries then started to go attack mode with the cs. When his pegasis landed I yelled "Aries burning horn attack!" Aries set on fire and smashed his bey into the wall of the dish. When he pulled his bey out The bey turned into charcoal. "Winner Sai Katawari!!" "Next round Tyrannis Mokataro versus Llevar Kevano" I stepped down the dish and Tyrannis bumped my shoulder "Hey little girl, you got lucky" I swallowed hard. I looked at Aries and thought. What just happened?
3 seconds after that the next battle started Tyrannis used basalt bull bd145mf and LLevar used a really bad stamina custom. "GO SHOOT!" They yell. LLevar yells "Capricorn horn dance!" "make sure you hit the track!" This guy sucks. The boost disk deflects the attack and sends his "Super capricorn" as he claims out of the stadium. "Nice, nice" LLevar says, " Capricorn Horn Charge!!" Now the Heaviness of Basalt bull just pushed Capricorn away. "Learn your place!" Tyrannis yells " Bull stampede" Basalt then charged and crushed Capricorn. "Winner Tyrannis" "Next battle Kirino Kouysuki versus Tsubasa Kotoro" Tyrannis stepped off the dish like nothing happend. Back to the story, Kirino used galaxy aquario145JB. Tsubasa used hell Libra 125ES. "Three!" They both yell "Two!" "One" "GO SHOOT!" Insert the song underdog here. The beys hit each other in the air causing huge recoil. "Aquario Galaxy waterfall!" Kirino yells. Water starts pouring out of no where. "Aquario! Galaxy whirlpool!" Kirino says with confidence. "Libra! Underworld Fang!" Libra went under the stadium and came back up pushing Aquario into the air. "Libra! Burning Fang!" Tsubasa yells. "Fool, Aquario! water pouring smash!" Kirino yells. Aquario came down with a water sheild and smashed Liba into the water. "Libra! no!" Tsubasa yells in sadness. "You'll pay! You'll PAY!" "LIBRA! FINISHING CROSS FANG!!" Tsubasa yells in anger. Libra rose out of the water forming a X in the air. It happend so fast. In the
end Aquario was in four pieces. "Winner Tsubasa."
I was too puzzled by that battle I couldn't analyze the pieces of both beys in time before they launched. Who where these guys? The round ended so quickly. "Winner Ren." The other person ended up in the ER. "WHAT!?" I scream puzzled "He ended up in the ER?" Tyrannis says, "Yeah, it happens alot." "Good luck kid" Tyrannis adds. I look at the board. Tyrannis vs Tsubasa and Carp, Sai vs Gen. This has got to be a mistake. Let me battle Tsubasa or somthing. "Next semi Finals, Sai Katawari versus Gen Hiroshani" Tyrannis touches my shoulder, "Good luck, I hope we meet in the finals." I stepped up to the dish. Gen was using a normal LL2. I yell "THREE!" Gen yells, "TWO!" "ONE!" "GO SHOOT!!" I reved 5 times and pressed the button. "Finish this over confident little girl." He says. Random shadows wrapped around my arms and legs and continued to consume my body. I noticed the same on my bey. "Sai! use your special in 3 Mississippis!" Tyrannis yells. "One Mississippi" "Two Mississippi" The shadows wrapped around every part of my body except for my head. "Three Mississippi!" "Aries! Burning Horn Attack! Aries ignited a flame and the shadows started to decay away. Those same shadows decayed off of my body too. Aries set on fire and hit his bey. His bey flew into the air. "ORION!" "Finishing move! Shadow Smash!" His bey flew down and smashed my bey losing alot of stamina. "Aries!" "Don't fail me!" "Aries! Burning Barrage!" My bey turned into a mountain goat. and started to attack his "Orion". His bey was about to stop spinning. And it did. "Winner! Sai Katawari!"
"Tyrannis versus Tsubasa" I really don't want to go over the count down again. "Libra! Underworld fang!" Tsubasa yells. Libra did hit Basalt, but did nothing. "Hey Tsubasa, why are you trying so hard?" Tyrannis says, "You know you can't win." "Besides, I'll tell you one thing." Tyrannis says, "LEARN YOUR PLACE! After a huge flash Tsubasa was laying down injured. His bey was non existent. I started to get scared of Tyrannis again. I also noticed tyrannis' eyes turned red. "Finals Sai versus Tyrannis" I stepped up to the dish. "Three!" I yell. "Two!" Tyrannis shoots back. "One" everyone exclaims. "GO SHOOT!" we both yell. Both Beys hit each other in the air causing a explosion. They both hit each other fiercely and every time they hit an explosion happens. "Aries! Burning Horn Attack!" I exclaim. "Bull stampede!!!" Tyrannis yells. When both beys hit there was an explosion that flew Tyrannis and I backwards. Tyrannis got back on top of the dish first. I just lay there. I eventually got back up. Half of the dish exploded off. Tyrannis was bleeding. He fainted. I also noticed MY arm was bleeding. I then fainted. I hear somthing. What is it? Its calling my name. Is this a dream? It's saying I won something, somewhere. I woke up in the ER. Everybody congratulated me. "Why?" I ask. You won the tourney. I look over to the left. It's Tyrannis.
I am still sitting in the hospital, Doctors coming in changing the bandage hourly.
"Yo!" A teenage voice yells.
It's Hikari Yuni a classmate of mine. "I have bad news and good news," He says, "Bad news is that people are stealing kids beys." "And They are called the Bey Raiders" He says, " Good news is I upgraded your bey." "Take the blueprints" I read it. "Flash AriesBD145CS?" I ask. "Yeah here take it!"He says excitedly. He hands me this beautiful shiny bey. "Also I upgraded your grip set up. " white string launcher" he says, "Black grip." "white grip rubber" he adds "Black laucher rubber." "Oh and a white beypointer." He says.
"Ight" i say as I take the grip and bey, "I'll sign out of the hospital." I do so. After signing I say bye to Tyrannis. I walk out of the hospital and on to the park.
"Hey! Give me back my bey!" A little kid yells.
"Sorry kid, You lost." A rough scraggy voice says.
I come up and challenge this newbie in a battle. "I'm Moriko Morikatski" That Bey Raider says, "I never knew a girl could actually win a tournament, against Tyrannis too." "Well I still want to battle you." I say, "You know I'll take the beys you personally stole." Language warning for the rest of this chapter.
"Oh? You think your all hot carp huh?" He says, "You only won 1 tourney." "Bring it then," I shoot back. We ready our beys.
"Three!" I exclaimed.
"Two!" He yells with pride.
"One!" I yell.
"GOOO SHOOOT!!" I yell.
He yelled let it rip. "What was that?" I ask throwing my hand out like it was unusual, It's Go shoot." He's confused.....Idiot.
Both beys were spinning fine. I thought I minus well Finish this quickly. "Aries! Flash Horn Smash!!" I yell. The metal wheel of my bey shined brightly and fiercely. The bey Zoomed into the others eating His beys stamina. "carp!" He yells. He called back his bey and ran away. He dropped a paper.
Chapter 7: Invitation
I picked up the paper reading it.
Quote:BeyTower
Your invited to the BeyTower
Reply back at BeyTower@JBBO.org
Remember to leave your address so we can pick you up.
That's funny, A BeyTower. What The hell could this be? Whats the prize?
Quote: Prize is a spot for you and your friend to enter The Stargazers tournament
I'm thinking if I win I should Bring Tyrannis and have Hikari as our Bey-Mechanic. I have a chance to be champion again. (Will be explained in a prequel later.) I'm going.
Next day
The bus came to pick me up. I came in through the back. Everybody turned and gave me a disgusting look. I look around for a place to sit.
"Your not sitting here" A guy said.
"Nope not here" A strange girl mummers.
I understood now. They are all bey raiders. I guess they have an anti-Katawari thing. Thats a shame. All because I used to be a champion stormgazer? I sat in the back with no one. Then a soft hand came to give me help.
"I'll sit with you" A soft girl voice says.
"I'm Mui Koyuki" She says, "Who are you?" Great, How would I explain. "Umm, I'm Sai Katawari a champion stormgazer." I say nervously. "Thats new I've never met a stormgazer," Mui explains, "Not after they split up." I was shocked. "They split up because... of unknown causes," She says, "It's all about those Firegazers."
Gazers no monogatari wa, watashi mo anata ni sore o oshiete agemashou.
" Meiyo wa dÄzu no tame ni hitsuyÅdesu!" Hanran gurÅ«pu no rÄ«dÄ o sakenda.
" Wareware wa, imaimashÄ«, sorera no shinryaku o toru hitsuyÅ ga arimasu! " Mudokonsento Korishima dai 一直之ä¼èª¬.
" Sore wa dare mo shiyou to sa rete imasen zan'nendesu." Miyu dai 二直之凡例 O sakenda. "
Dono yÅ ni sono chanpion wa dÅdesu ka? " Yuirno dai san Naoyuki densetsu o motometa.
" Wareware wa chanpion o hitsuyÅ to shinai!" RÄ«dÄ o sakenda.
" DÅshite?" MiyÅ« ni tazuneta. " Anata MO watashitachi nai hanran gurÅ«pu nashi raidÄ NI narubekide WA arimasen! Hatsugen, watashitachi WA anata yori mo Naho Takai rankudesu, " dai 4-kai to saigo no Naoyuki densetsu, Jakku wa sakenda. " Watashi wa fuyu no toki, kimi wa ano otoko ga dai go Naoyuki no hanrei o kangae shitte iru, " fuyu wa itta. " Wareware WA stormgazer GA hitsuyÅdesu!" Jakku sakenda. " Iru o sutete suru Sonogo satesate, SAI Katawari WA imaya densetsu stormgazerdesuga, kanojo WA, kanrinin ga nashi· de· hidari jingorÅ, gyakutai O uke shutoku, kanojo nashi kakÅ nai KÅno hanasu niataisuru, !" Korishima o sakenda. ByÅ« no sai Katawari no jiten de. " Nase anata WA stormgazer yÅyÅ NI watashi NI itte Imasu KA? Watashi GA Nase hitsuyÅna nodeshou KA? IntÅ WA hajianata no watashi ni koishi ko no nai koto O tsutaerudaga, dareka no O mukae NI IKU!" Sai wa itta
" Ohitsujiza! NenshÅ hÅn no kÅgeki!" Watashi wa watashi ga kono orokana koma wa, jissai ni kore o okonau ka no yÅ ni te o oku tassuru to nobeta. NÄ“, watashi wa shÅkai o wasurete shimatta, watashinonamaeha watashi ga jissai ni kono omocha" beiburÄ“do" wa, jissai ni watashi ga iu nani o subeki ka to kangaete iru sai Katawaridesu. JBBO (Nihon beiburÄ“dobatoru soshiki) wa, rÅkaru JBBO biru de tÅnamento o hoji shite irunode, watashi wa kore o yatte iru riyÅ« ga arimasu. Watashi wa kono beiburÄ“dobÄn ariesBD 145 CS jissai ni tokushu kÅgeki o okonau koto ga dekimasu shinjite iru watashi wa itsumo ijime rarete shimau. Monogatari ni modoru. - Tameiki - " sore wa nai yÅdaga, terebi de, korera no tÅnamentode wa dÅsa shimasen!" Watashi wa sutajiamu o kette sakebu. - Tameiki - watashi wa gakkÅ e iku ikanakya. Watashi wa haita-tekina, kuro ranchÄgomu, shiro gurippugomu, itsumo no kuro beypointer HK shiro revup to watashi no 3 segumento no gurippu de watashi no baggu o tsumeru. Watashi wa watashi no shin'yÅ« tsukune ashita gakkÅ ni jikkÅ suru yÅ ni, kare no jitensha ni notte watashi no ue de jikkÅ sa remasu. " O tto! Sai! Watashi wa sore o okonau tsumori wa arimasendeshita!" To kare wa itta. " Iesu wa ningen ga" watashi wa watashi ga katto-sa iu toki - tameiki - " watashi ga eta nochi anata o mi ni iku" " oi nani o anata ga tameiki o tsuite iru no?" Watashi wa kiite imasu. Anata no ohitsujiza wa anata ni modotte hanashi o sa rete imasu ka? " Watashi mo kiite imasu. Watashi wa futari wa warai no kongÅmono o kiita." Soreha"" hahahaha! " Watashi ga furimuku to, kesshite kokoro ni ijime to nige o akeru koto ga dekinai no o machimasu.
Watashi wa gakkÅ ni konai koto ni kimemashita ijime kara jikkÅ shita nochi. Watashi wa renshÅ« no tatakai no tame ni GotÅ JBBO biru ni kimemashita. Watashi ga tsuita toki ni shinpi-tekina otoko ga watashi ni ko no koto o i~tsu te ichi-mai no kami o ataeta BeiburÄ“do taikai kyÅ wa! 165 Ni sanka shite mite kuru Akashita hakase " Soko ni iku ni wa, ARIES wa nanika o suru kamo shirenai" to kare wa iu. " Nani o matte! " Watashi wa hazukashi-sa de sakebu, " anata wa watashi o kuki ka nanika ka?" Kare wa sugata o keshita. Watashi no mummer wa, " watashi wa ikubekida to omou" " sono, watashi wa gakkÅ ka nanika ni ikimasen yÅ ni. " Watashi wa soko ni tsuita yÅ ni watashi wa" berubade tirny" berubade o i~tsu te yasuku kaka reta shÄpÄ« de tento o kidzuku? Tirny? " Watashi demo watashi wa mada sono sutÅkÄ o kangaete itanode, watashi wa iku hitsuyÅ ga arimasu. Watashi ga shomei shita" raundo 1 sai Katawari tai! Koro Kirishino" watashi wa sara ni suteppu appu wa, ima kowaimono no otoko no thats. TorenchikÅto no ichibu no hito ni taishite ikutsu ka no chÄ«sana gakkÅ no kodomo wa. Sono gurippu to bei o toridashita. " SurÄ«" watashi wa sakebu. " Two" no koro wa, sarigenaku kare wa doesntai to iu ' T kea" wan" watashi wa, gunshÅ« no sakebigoe. " SHOOT GO! " Wareware wa ryÅhÅ no Ä“ru. Watashi wa 5 kaiten o okonattashi, botan o oshita. " Pegashisu ryÅ«sei sumasshu!" Koro wa sakenda. Kare bei doku pegashisu 85 XF, kÅ«ki-chÅ« ni tonda . Watashi wa kono kÅdÅ ni utsusubekida to omotta. " Ohitsujiza gomakashi wa!" Ohitsujiza wa, sonogo, CS de kÅgeki mÅdo ni iku yÅ ni narimashita. Kare pegashisu ga jÅriku shita toki, watashi wa" ohitsujiza wa, hÅn no kÅgeki o moyasu!" Ohitsujiza wa hi ni settei shi, kabe ni kare no bei o kowashi sakebi Sara no kare wa beiauto kare bei o hippatta tokiniha, mokutan ni kawatta. " JushÅ sai Katawari o!" "-Ji no raundo o Tyrannis Mokataro tai Llevar Kevano" watashi wa sara o jinin shi, Tyrannis ga watashi no kata o butsukete" chotto chÄ«sana on'nanoko ga, anata wa kÅun " Watashi wa hÄdo nomikonda watashi wa ohitsujiza o mite, kangaemashita. ChÅdo nani ga okotta no ka?
3-ByÅ,-ji no tatakai wa Tyrannis shiyÅ hindo no genbugan ushi bd 145 mf o kaishi shi, LLevar wa hontÅni warui sutamina no kasutamu o shiyÅ shita nochi. " ShÅ«to GO!" Karera wa sakebu. LLevar wa" Yagiza hÅn no dansu o!" Sakebu " Anata wa torakku o hitto kakuninshitekudasai!" Kono otoko wa suu. BÅ«suto· disuku wa, kÅgeki o sorashi, kare ga sutajiamu no soto ni shuchÅ shi, kare no" sÅ«pÄ Yagiza" o sÅshin shimasu. " NÄ«su" LLevar wa iu, " Yagiza hÅnchÄji!" Ima genbugan ushi no omo-sa dake de yamahitsujiza o oshinoke. " Anata no basho o manabou! " Tyrannis wa" reddoburu· sutanpÄ«do" ga tsugini jÅ«den to Yagiza o hasai genbugan sakebu. Tsubasa Kotoro tai" jushÅ Tyrannis" "-ji no tatakai Kirino Kouysuki wa" Tyrannis wa nani ga okotta yÅna ryÅri o orita. BakkusutÅrÄ« ni, Kirino wa ginga aquario 145 JB o shiyÅ shite imashita. Tsubasa wa jigoku tenbin-za 125 ES o shiyÅ shite imashita. " SurÄ«!" Karera wa ryÅhÅ no Ä“ru" Two o!" " One" wa, " shÅ«to GO!" Koko de kyoku no jakusha o sÅnyÅ« shimasu. Beys wa kyodaina handÅ o hikiokoshite kÅ«ki-chÅ« de otagai o oshite kudasai. " Aquario ginga no taki!" Kirino wa sakebu. Mizu wa doko kara de sosoide kaishi shimasu. " Aquario! GyarakushÄ«wÄrupÅ«ru!" Kirino wa, jishin o mo~tsu te nobete imasu. " Tenbin-za! AndÄfangu!" Tenbin-za wa, sutajiamu no shita ni itte, kÅ«ki-chÅ« ni Aquario o oshite bakkuappu shimashita. " Tenbin-za! Kiba bÄningu!" Tsubasa wa sakebu. " Aquario fÅ«ru! Mizu sosoide sumasshu!" Kirino wa sakebu. Aquario wa sheild mizu de orite kite mizu ni LIBA o kowashimashita. " Tenbin-za! NO!" Tsubasa wa, kanashimi ni sakebu. " Anata wa harau yo! Anata ga shiharau yo!" " Ribura! Kurosu FANG no shiage!" Tsubasa wa ikari de sakenda. Tenbin-za wa, kÅ«ki-chÅ« no X o keisei shite mizu kara agatta. Sore wa totemo hayaku nani ga okotta. De Saigo Aquario wa 4-kodeatta. " ShÅsha tsubasa. "
"What?" I yell," They were split up?"
"Yeah... I think the raiders are part of those fakers," She says
I started to get enraged. But suddenly the bus stops. We all get down as usual. And the director is there too greet us.
"Hello," The director says, "I'm gonna go over the rules so you know."
" starting with consequences" He starts, "Alright 1. If you lose, you die."
"2. If you resist you will get tortured," He says, "Also The same rules apply if you lie."
"Wait what the hell?!?" I yell, "I'm not following!"
After that and a lot of more boring dialogue we start the Starter Rounds.
"The Starter Rounds will be about eliminating the useless bladers!" said the director, "round 1 Sai vs mui!!"
This wasn't supposed to happen. I should try to lose. I walk up to the dish scared as carp. I pull out my grip and inserted my beylauncher, grip rubber, launcher rubber, beypointer, and angle compass in a scared manner. Mui used a LL1 with a beypointer attached and a long dragon ripcord.
"Three!" I shout.
"Two!" Mui shoots back.
"One!" I yelled sadly.
"GO SHOOT!" We both scream.
I pulled the string with too much power causing my launcher rubber to rip.
I watch as my bey starts attacking feircely taking away a lot of stamina from Her Hell Hades230WD.
"I'm letting you win," Mui says," You need to know what happened."
"I'm not gonna try winning!" I scream, "I don't need to live!"
I command my bey to stop attacking so I could lose stamina.
" No don't! The council... They won't allow it!" Mui shouts.
" You need to try and live your life!" I yell, "I've already done so!"
"Alright then," She mummers, "Hades Command Soul!"
My bey had dark aura surrounding it. My bey started to spin faster. Then I realized it. She was forcing my bey to win.
"Good bye, Sai!" Those were her last words.
My bey came around and smashed her bey out of the stadium. I saw as the bey flew right across her face. I saw it. Her short brown hair gone by fire. I can't mention the rest because of the rest was disturbing. I could't bare it any more. I ran called back my bey and risked it all racing for her bey too.
I was too depressed to even watch the next rounds. Luckily they announced the winners, me, and two other dumb carps.
"The battle tower has 3 paths!" Yelled the director.
He picked my name out of the hat. I walk up to a random podium and pick from three paths: Naoyuki Legends, Burn remarks, and Storm bringer.
"I choose the Naoyuki Legends path!" I yell with pride.
I needed to avenge everyone's death. I must win. When I said Naoyuki everybody gasped. Why? I ran for the Doorway to the 1st battle. In there I saw a Woman in a traditional Japanese kimono. She apparently for some odd reason has blue hair.
She opened her eyes, looked up and put her hands by her sides.
"Hey, You have lots of Nyoshi energy," She says, "It's conentrated well."
"My name is Fuyu Miomi I'm considered the Lady of Ice," Fuyu says casually, "Your energy it's dark and light at the same time."
"What do you me-" Thats all I could get out before she interupts.
"That's pretty average for the great Stormgazer," She interupts," to bad I have to kill you now."
I stepped up to the dish and prepared my beyblade and grip. She made a grip and blade out of ice.
"Three!" I yell.
"Two" She says.
"One!" I shout.
"Go Shoot!!" We scream.
"Good luck beating my Kreis horogium MF : D (Meta final drive)" Fuyu says.
Her bey is made out of ice right? That means I can use my Flash Horn Smash and win. But her bey is eating way too much stamina than I can handle. No wait, She is a Naoyuki Legend, Fuyu-san has something up her sleeve.
"Horogium Ice clock!" She yells.
My perfect chance.
"Aries! Flash Horn Smash!!" I scream back.
Aries froze and then set The metal wheel got really bright much like the sun. Aries looped around the dish and smashed Horogium. Sadly I just broke my boost disk instead.
"You really thought I'd lose that easily?" Fuyu says,"I'm not that easy!
"Horogium! Metal Drive Smash!" She yells
Her bey turned completely metal except for the ruber on the final drive. The metal tip went inside the track and tip. It came around and tried to smash my bey.
"Aries! Flame wall!" I yell.
A pillar of fire surrounded my bey. Fuyu looked astonished.
Her bey started melting until a quarter of it was gone.
"Now our beys are balanced," I say while smirking, "1 more smash and our beys exit the dish, first one out looses."
"Good job, student," Fuyu mummers, "You might become the stargazer yourself."
Our beys touched for the last time. They both launched out. Luckily our beys were on her side so here bey was gone first. I picked up my bey and walked over to Fuyu and asked
"Will we meet again?"
"Yes, I'll gladly take you as a student again, and your allowed to enter the council," She says.
I left that room.
After the battle with my past teacher I enter the next room and fix my Boost Disk. In this room is the Naoyuki legend Yurino.
"Why are you here?" Yurino asks in confusion, "You know I would've thought a more dumbass challenger would choose this path."
"Hah, even if some overconfident challenger came here they would have been destroyed by Fuyu," Yurino adds.
"Uh, shouldn't we start the battle?" I asked.
"Wait you want to battle?" He replies.
"Yeah," I say.
"oh," He mummers, "Alright then."
I readied my launcher and bey.
"Three!" I yell.
"Yeah yeah two" He says without concentrating.
"One!" I scream.
"Go Shoot!" We both yell.
I pull the string, but Yurino, He threw his bey causing it to spin to the left.
I analyzed his bey. He has Big bang leone D:D.
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Duck - Apr. 08, 2012
This IS a pretty cool story! Do you really believe that your Aries can use special attacks and talk to you? If you do, that's awesome!
Please read my story: Bound by the Bey: Sekenorou's Reign (a Beyblade story)
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 08, 2012
(Apr. 08, 2012 2:06 AM)Fakirs Duck Wrote: This IS a pretty cool story! Do you really believe that your Aries can use special attacks and talk to you? If you do, that's awesome!
Please read my story: Chapter 1 Forever Rivals (a beyblade story)
Thanks  I never actually thought that someone would like a thread.
yo yo chapter 2 bruh
Chapter 2 the first tourney part 1
After running from the bullies i've decided to not come to school. I decided to goto the JBBO building for a practice battle. When I got there a mysterious guy gave me a piece of paper saying this Quote:beyblade tournament today!! come join us in 165
Akashita Dr.
"Yeah, What am I supposed to do with this?" I say. "Go there, your aries might do something" he says. " Wait what?!" I yell in embarrassment, "Do you stalk me or something?" He disappeared. "I guess I should go" I mummer, "Its not like I'm going to school or anything." So as I got there I notice a tent with cheaply written sharpie saying "berubade tirny "berubade? tirny?" I though I should go because I was still thinking about that stalker. I signed up. "Round 1 Sai Katawari versus! Koro Kirishino" I stepped up to the dish. Now thats scary stuff man. Some little school kid against some guy in a trench coat. Took out that grip and bey. "THREE" I yell. "two" Koro says casually like he doesn't care "ONE" I and the crowd yell. " GO SHOOT!" We both yell. I did five revs and pressed the button. "Pegasis meteor smash!!!" Koro yells. His bey poison pegasis 85XF flew into the air. I thought I should get into this action. " Aries dodge!" Aries then started to go attack mode with the cs. When his pegasis landed I yelled "Aries burning horn attack!" Aries set on fire and smashed his bey into the wall of the dish. When he pulled his bey out The bey turned into charcoal. "Winner Sai Katawari!!" "Next round Tyrannis Mokataro versus Llevar Kevano" I stepped down the dish and Tyrannis bumped my shoulder "Hey little girl, you got lucky" I swallowed hard. I looked at Aries and thought. What just happened .
Thats it for now guys.
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Duck - Apr. 08, 2012
You just gotta have confidince in yourself! The idea of a real - life person being able to control their bey through speech is awesome! Just work on your grammar and you'll be perfect!
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Tobiko - Apr. 08, 2012
Nice story (Y)
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Dragoon. - Apr. 08, 2012
*thumbs up* nice story keep it up!
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 08, 2012
I guess I should keep going. I never actually knew this story would get this far.
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - XXaron - Apr. 08, 2012
Uh...
Do you use MS-Word for your story?
Because I see so many spelling mistakes, and you seriously need to make your chapters longer.
You also need to write dialouge like so:
"Hey Jo!" Bob said.
"Hey Bob!" Jo said.
Whenever someone new talks, you make a new line. Also, don't forget to add plenty of details (I like plently of details, but don't go overboard like I did on my story...)!
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 08, 2012
(Apr. 08, 2012 5:45 PM)XXaron Wrote: Uh...
Do you use MS-Word for your story?
Because I see so many spelling mistakes, and you seriously need to make your chapters longer.
You also need to write dialouge like so:
"Hey Jo!" Bob said.
"Hey Bob!" Jo said.
Whenever someone new talks, you make a new line. Also, don't forget to add plenty of details (I like plently of details, but don't go overboard like I did on my story...)!
Thanks for the info. XD give me a break I'm new to this carp
Also don't expect a twelve year old to be a spelling god
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Clefairy - Apr. 08, 2012
Stop making excuses. I am 10 years old and can spell better than you. I made an excuse about my age and it didn't go well. "Also don't expect a twelve year old to be a spelling god"... hmm you don't have to be a god at spelling. You can miss some words but it wouldn't really matter. If you are missing a lot of spelling words then yes you better improve.
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Duck - Apr. 08, 2012
(Apr. 08, 2012 7:37 PM)Black Hole Wrote: Stop making excuses. I am 10 years old and can spell better than you. I made an excuse about my age and it didn't go well. "Also don't expect a twelve year old to be a spelling god"... hmm you don't have to be a god at spelling. You can miss some words but it wouldn't really matter. If you are missing a lot of spelling words then yes you better improve.
You don't have to be so mean! She's trying, and doing a REALLY good job! When I was nine I wrote like carp! Now I'm eleven, and you can read Bound by the Bey: Sekenorou's Reign to see what you think of me now! Keep going!
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 08, 2012
(Apr. 08, 2012 9:15 PM)Fakirs Duck Wrote: (Apr. 08, 2012 7:37 PM)Black Hole Wrote: Stop making excuses. I am 10 years old and can spell better than you. I made an excuse about my age and it didn't go well. "Also don't expect a twelve year old to be a spelling god"... hmm you don't have to be a god at spelling. You can miss some words but it wouldn't really matter. If you are missing a lot of spelling words then yes you better improve.
You don't have to be so mean! She's trying, and doing a REALLY good job! When I was nine I wrote like carp! Now I'm eleven, and you can read Bound by the Bey: Sekenorou's Reign to see what you think of me now! Keep going!
I'm a guy :p
(Apr. 08, 2012 7:37 PM)Black Hole Wrote: Stop making excuses. I am 10 years old and can spell better than you. I made an excuse about my age and it didn't go well. "Also don't expect a twelve year old to be a spelling god"... hmm you don't have to be a god at spelling. You can miss some words but it wouldn't really matter. If you are missing a lot of spelling words then yes you better improve.
Hey bruh, I have a challenge for you write a story with 5 chapters on an ipod without spelling mistakes in 45 minutes. Then come back here. Anyways why am I complaining? Haters make me famous.
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Duck - Apr. 09, 2012
(Apr. 08, 2012 10:42 PM)Shirayuki Wrote: (Apr. 08, 2012 9:15 PM)Fakirs Duck Wrote: [quote='Black Hole' pid='935037' dateline='1333910272']
Stop making excuses. I am 10 years old and can spell better than you. I made an excuse about my age and it didn't go well. "Also don't expect a twelve year old to be a spelling god"... hmm you don't have to be a god at spelling. You can miss some words but it wouldn't really matter. If you are missing a lot of spelling words then yes you better improve.
You don't have to be so mean! She's trying, and doing a REALLY good job! When I was nine I wrote like carp! Now I'm eleven, and you can read Bound by the Bey: Sekenorou's Reign to see what you think of me now! Keep going!
I'm a guy :p
Oops, my mistake! I'm sorry, how embarrassing that must have been! But, doesn't your signature “mess†and your avatar have a pic of a guy?
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 09, 2012
no, that's how Life works when you get to upper grades I guess.
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - XXaron - Apr. 09, 2012
Writing a story in 45 minutes is NOT a good idea.
I can do that, but that's mainly because I type fast and come up with ideas on the fly, and of course MS-Word helps keep spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes to a minimum.
So, at least type it somewhere you can save it, take your time (Do not try and write it in 45 minutes unless you can do what I do, which is write a 700+ word chapter in 45 minutes with next-to-no spelling/grammar mistakes... and you can't) and if needed plan out your story.
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - turtwig - Apr. 10, 2012
what a long story 
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Duck - Apr. 11, 2012
I can type a chapter in under 30 min. with hardly any spelling/grammar mistakes. After the chapter is completely typed I proofread it to correct those small errors, and then I congratulate myself with a piece of dark chocolate!
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Dragoon. - Apr. 11, 2012
Sai katawari....looks like u got that name from Kai Hiwatari
RE: beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 16, 2012
(Apr. 11, 2012 10:22 AM)THE DRAGOON Wrote: Sai katawari....looks like u got that name from Kai Hiwatari
I just noticed that! XD
RE: (Updated!) beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 16, 2012
Bump QQ sorry for double post
RE: (Updated!) beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - XXaron - Apr. 16, 2012
...
Don't bump.
and I noticed you had improper grammar in the title.
It should be:
Beyblade isn't just spinning tops!
or
Beyblades arn't just spinning tops!
Second one sounds better.
RE: (Updated!) beyblade aren't just spinning tops! (a beyblade story) - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 16, 2012
(Apr. 16, 2012 9:39 PM)XXaron Wrote: ...
Don't bump.
and I noticed you had improper grammar in the title.
It should be:
Beyblade isn't just spinning tops!
or
Beyblades arn't just spinning tops!
Second one sounds better.
Notice that right now too. QQ
RE: (Now with my original Japanese story!) beyblades aren't just spinning tops! - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 17, 2012
new chapter QQ
RE: (Now with my original Japanese story!) beyblades aren't just spinning tops! - Cookie Bouquets - Apr. 18, 2012
Sorry for double post but another chapter in op
RE: (Now with my original Japanese story!) beyblades aren't just spinning tops! - Duck - Apr. 18, 2012
I LOVE THIS STORY!!! IT'S AWESOME!
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