Be nice, guys. You wouldn't like if someone spoke to you like that. He might be a little kid for all we know.

If you don't like what he is doing, ignore it. Don't write meaningless rude posts. It is nice that you're trying to help him and all, but if he wont take it, don't worry about it.

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im not a kid i just write on my phone and i try to take their advice but its like im still doing stuff wrong

A PM he sent me. Do whatever you want guys, looks like he just doesn't care.

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Bump King. For my birthday. I think I've said enough.

OK,so the HMS(did I get it right?) is with beys like Earth Virgo GB145BS and Thermal Pisces T125ES,right?

We are not hackers, so we cannot see pictures inside your computer. You must upload it to an image-hosting website like ImageShack.us

anyone come on an battle me if u dare. COME ON! i will show u my true bladder power!

You posted an awful combo, did not get "yelled at" by anyone, and then decided to argue, insult people, and call me a "petofile".

What is the "sharpest" beyblade in Plastics? Any that could cut your finger if touched? No, this is not for emo purposes, just need to pull off a good pun.

Are you high?

R u dumb?

A tunnel have two hole. One At the start and One at the end.

You think that is a weird fact nobody knows ?

An excellent Balance type bey customization would be Flame Capricorn 145WD. This customization has the maximum amount of Balance power that is possible in a Bey. It also has a high amount of Stamina and Defense power. It has very low attack power. It's a great winning combo! Use it as you please!

But how do we even know if it has Samurai yet?

That is the difference between you and me : I find concrete and confirmed information, and you do not question me.

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Just write about what you want me to do.Like what to put when the characters are talking.What to put when the characters are doing something.What other grammar problems are in the story because im not understanding.

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its ok to say something good about my stories to.Just saying

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thanks guys im trying my best

this stories about to get better *suspicous laugh*

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this stories about to get better *suspicous laugh*

or worse *cherry bomb* *suspicious laugh*

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story+story= better story

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chapter 8

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Kevin:''GO ROCK LIBRA''!!

Blaze:''Dark pegasus special move dark destruction''.Pegasus used a dark aura sending shadows to libra.

Kevin:''No way im losing,Libra special move sonic blast''!!.Libra threw pegasus in the air sending multiple blast which hit pegasus spin track causing it to lose stamina.

Blaze:''HAHA your only giving me a boost in the air so i could use my special move''.''gasus special move wing gust attack''.Pegasus came straight for libra facebolt.

Kevin:''huh no way how do i defend against a attack like that''.

Blaze:''You dont''.Pegasus used its metal to hit libra facebolt making libra lose stamina and become unblanced.

Kevin:''NO!! I lost''.

Blaze:''Better luck next time kid''.

''Up next Stacey VS Jazz''

Jazz:''Lets get this over with''.

Stacey:''You got that right pal''

''3..2..1..LET IT RIP''

Jazz:Lets go spiral lacerta''.

Stacey:''Special move whirlpool".Aquario created a whrilppol causing jazz to lose the match.''Well that was easy''.

Austin:''Stacey i think that guy lost on purpose''.

Stacey:"Are you jealous because i beat him without breaking a sweat".

Austin:''No you dont get it that guy could of dodged that attack but he didnt".

Stacey:"Austin your freaking me out''

Austin:"Nevermind"

"Up next Austin VS Jason''

Austin:"thats my brother''

Stacey:''you cant focus on that right now austin''

Austin:"your right i guess i have to defeat him here and now"

Stacey:"thats the spirit now get out there and win"

Script format? Interesting. Geting better but in the third line i believe, there were exclamation points after the quotations. Also, spend more time on the battles. The battles are very important in a beyblade story so focus on them a lot.

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having trouble putting all the stories on one page

if you read my story it will reveal something about this story *hint hint jason is in my story*
hey leone its ok you dont have to put it on on post

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i dont wanna continue on this because to many negative comments

i dont wanna continue on this because to many negative comments

Well that's no reason to stop.They're trying to give you advice on how to be a better writer

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then ill continue it on my thread

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people arent even reading this.when they do its negative

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just take there advice the negative comments are the ones that teach you stuff most the time

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i fixed all gramar problems.if you see any more gramar problems juss quote it and point it out please

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Well to start out it should be like this
I fixed all the grammar problems. If you see any more grammar problems just quote it and point it out please.

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I think it has a chance. My first story was bad and then I fixed it.

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Ok did you not read this thread? I already said that and try to give constructive critisism.

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its getting better?

Yes. Keep it up and alwill be well

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im re-doing all the chapters

Ok but what oh i know why

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wow this a hot thread to buy i want to close this resume it on my new thread [beyblade story]