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Feb. 05, 2011  2:27 AM
 
Hi everyone, this is Super Peacock here saying that I shall be writing a new story called The Great Beyblade Story. I will be writing the first chapter soon though I would like some character request before I start writing. If you are interested in being in this story, pleasepost on the thread wall about the character you would like to see in this story. When you describe your character, you must have a full desription like the one below.


Character:Jake Mikaru
BeyBlade: Blazing Peafowl TF145 BD

Peafowl face: peacock
Peafowl: Has the shape of a peacock with its tail feathers up
Blazing: Is a heavier and thicker version of burn.
TF145 (Tail feathers 145): Has Colorful metal weights on the outside of the track.
BD (Bearing defence): Free spinning Defence Tip with two bearings. (like Burning ceberus double bearing core)

Special move: Peafowl Rainbow Dance: A peacock throws up its tail feathers releasing colorful rays that damage the beyblade and confuse and distort the beyblader.

Multi-colored hair and eyes. wears blue jeans and a pink shirt.
Good.
Takes pleasure in confusing opponents. Likes to help friends.
Male.
Age: 12

There will be a new chapter every Sunday, Alberta time.

Any incomplete character requests will not be accepted, so please think your character though before you post. Any requests that are put on the thread will not be accepted. I have no room for character requests. If you have any question about Character request or the story, please post it on the thread wall. I do not have room for any character requests. I should have the first chapter up in a week. The main is the one I describe above. Thank you for your time.

P.S. If you made a beyblade out of real parts, you do not have to write a description about your beyblade.

P.S.S.
Any character with a dark move will immediately become evil.
Feb. 06, 2011  5:28 PM
 
For some reason i cannot pm you.Maybe that is why you have not got any?
I want to write a req, but i cant cos you know, pm thing.
Feb. 06, 2011  7:18 PM
 
Jakes prologue


It was a beautiful summer day. "Jake, Jake. Time to get up." Jake's mom was calling him. "Coming Mother!" Jake replied. He was getting ready to go to the zoo to celabrate his big brother Jack's victory at one of the challenge matches in the city. Jake was happy to go too the zoo today. Little did he know that his life as a blader would be changed forever after this day.

Chapter 1: Trouble at the Zoo

"Mom, why did you think I would want to go to the zoo? I don't even like the zoo." Jack asked. "Well," Mom said "We were not taking to the zoo but to an airsoft war zone so that you can play against other people!". "Awesome thank you mom!" Jack exclaimed.
"We'll be back in five hours. Until then have fun!" Mom replied. "So were are we going to?" Jake inquired.
We know you like exsotic animals Jake, so we're taking you to the Wild bird Zoo!" Mom said.

"Hey, Mom. Can we go check out the Peacock exhibit?" Jake asked. "Sure why not." Mom said. As Jake and his Mom were nearing the peacock exhibit, a woman called out "Terrorist attack!" and that is when all chaos broke loose. Suddenly, men in black suits came out of nowhere and pulled out assault gun. But instead of shooting bullets, the guns that the terrorists used shot beyblades instead. One of the terrorists seemed to notice Jake was staring at them. Jake knew that this guy was going to shoot him, so thinking swiftly, he dived into the peacock exhibit. He scrambled into one of the caves. It was a warm cave, filled with crystals of every sort. It seem to Jake that there was something odd about this cave. Suddenly, peacock melted out of the wall and guided Jake to a crystal podeuim. Lying on top of the podeuim was a beyblade incased in diamond. Jake piked up the diamond and the beyblade inside as just beautiful, wonderful. No words could describe it. Then it shattered. The diamond shattered. But the beyblade was fine. Jake piked up the beyblade and said "You are my new beyblade, and I shall call you Blazing Peafowl!".
I Figured out I do not have pm ,so you now can just post it on the wall. I change the rules now. By the way, the first Chapter is up .
Feb. 06, 2011  7:36 PM
 
here:

Name: (No one know his name so they just call him Whirpool)
Bey: Whirpool Poseidon T120 RB
Look: Blue jeans, white T-shirt, blue jacket, blue hair.

Bey description: The metal wheel whirpool is blue and is shaped like whirpool waves in the outside and some pop up waves near the middle in the inside. The clear wheel is blue and is a whirpool. T120 (trident 120) is a blue 120 with four small gold tridents. RB (rubber ball) is a rubber ball. The facebolt is blue with a gold trident and two waves behind. Is a very powerfull bey.

Whirpool description: He is a 15 year old mysterious guy. No one knows nothing about him. Is a very good guy but no one talks with him. Whirpool is very strong blader and always is blading. He found Whirpool Poseidon when he was 8 yaers old. He was in a ship and a giant whirpool appear in front. The ship sunk and all his family died. He was the only one who survived. Under the sea he found his bey. Since then he is all mysterious.

Special Move: Giant Golden Whirpool. Appears water in the stadium and then Whirpool Poseidon Makes a giant whirpool . The tridents in his track get bigger.

He is a good guy.

Name: Briel
Beblade: Green Libra 100 WB ( Green Is like rock but bigger and green ) The bey is all green.
Special Move: Green Tornado. Libra makes a green tornado turning all things green and blowing the opponent bey away.
Look: He is obssesed with green. Green hair (hair is like ginka's), Green T shirt, Green jeans, Green shoes, Green skin.
He is a very strong blader and wants to get even stronger. He play all the time but when is time to get serius he get serius. And he is very very smart. He is good

Briel is 13 year old. From little he is beyblading. His bey was flame libra. When he was 6 there was a big explotion in his town and his fathers die. Since then he have been around the world beyblading and getting strong. In a town Green Libra felt from the sky hit him in the head. Flame libra disapered. When trainign with the very powerfull Green Libra 100WB the bey caused an explotion that turn him green.
Since then he uses his clothes all green.

They are best friends friends. They are friends since the fathers of Briel die.

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Feb. 06, 2011  7:58 PM
 
Name:Xad Leurc III
BeyConfusedtealth shadow S80 S
Shadow Face:A menicing shadow with the word "shadow" on top
Shadow wheel:Think of a black pegasus wheel, then make it more spickey
Stealth wheel:Think vulcan + mercury, then color it in jet black
S(plit)80:An 80 with a thin titaniam disc around it.
S(talk):Has a computer chip in it that homes in on the nerest bey to mimic it's movement.

Dark moveConfusedplice
Shadow uses S80 to slice the other bey in half

Xad wears a black cape, black pants and dark red shirt.Short black hair.Red eyes.Likes to transform his opponents from happy bladers to miserable shells of people.
Age:16
Feb. 06, 2011  8:12 PM
 
Jakes Prologue

Chapter 2: The Wolf's Fangs

Jake rushed out of the cave and saw beys flying everywhere. "Okay Peafowl, time to show me your power! Let It Rip!" Jake yelled. Peafowl was amazing, sending beys flying everywhere. "Hey, you there. You seem to have a talent for beyblading. Maybe you would like to show me and wolf your power.". A mysterous voice called from somewhere.
"Show yourself." Jake yelled. "If you wish.". A man in a black robes lept down from one of the zoo building and said "I am Lupus. the leader of the Black Wolfs. If you wish to have your mom back and save all these people, you will have to beat me. Let it rip!". "Let it Rip!" Yelled Jake. "Go, Midnight Wolf!" Ordered Lupus. "Strike back, Peafowl!" Jake Ordered back. The two hit each other head on. Wolf was pushing forward, but Peafowl was not losing and stamina. "So it a stamina type, eh. Well I've got a way to solve that. Special move! Driving Fang Upper!" Lupus yelled! Suddenly, Wolf launch itself into the air, carrying peafowl with it. Peafowl headed back down to earth, while Wolf landed safely. It seemed like all hope was lost but Jake and Peafowl Haven't given up just yet. "I must say, you are a very strong blader, though it won't be enough to beat me! Special Move! Peafowl Rainbow Dance!" Jake yelled. Peafowl stared spinning faster and faster, until suddenly, a peacock sprouted from Jake's beyblade and let out a beautiful screech and threw up all of its tail feathers, releasing rays of light. It was magnifacint, the most elegant thing ever seen! More importanly, it was winning the battle! Lupus became confused, and Wolf was sent flying out of the staduim. The battle was over. Jake had won.
(Feb. 06, 2011  7:58 PM)Ray Gill Wrote: Name:Xad Leurc III
BeyConfusedtealth shadow S80 S
Shadow Face:A menicing shadow with the word "shadow" on top
Shadow wheel:Think of a black pegasus wheel, then make it more spickey
Stealth wheel:Think vulcan + mercury, then color it in jet black
S(plit)80:An 80 with a thin titaniam disc around it.
S(talk):Has a computer chip in it that homes in on the nerest bey to mimic it's movement.

Dark moveConfusedplice
Shadow uses S80 to slice the other bey in half

Xad wears a black cape, black pants and dark red shirt.Short black hair.Red eyes.Likes to transform his opponents from happy bladers to miserable shells of people.
Age:16
I do not like the fact that it slices the bey in half, though that just adds on to the creppy effect! Ray Gil, Welcome to the great beyblade story, cause you're in!
(Feb. 06, 2011  7:36 PM)brielyranger Wrote: here:

Name: (No one know his name so they just call him Whirpool)
Bey: Whirpool Poseidon T120 RB
Look: Blue jeans, white T-shirt, blue jacket, blue hair.

Bey description: The metal wheel whirpool is blue and is shaped like whirpool waves in the outside and some pop up waves near the middle in the inside. The clear wheel is blue and is a whirpool. T120 (trident 120) is a blue 120 with four small gold tridents. RB (rubber ball) is a rubber ball. The facebolt is blue with a gold trident and two waves behind. Is a very powerfull bey.

Whirpool description: He is a 15 year old mysterious guy. No one knows nothing about him. Is a very good guy but no one talks with him. Whirpool is very strong blader and always is blading. He found Whirpool Poseidon when he was 8 yaers old. He was in a ship and a giant whirpool appear in front. The ship sunk and all his family died. He was the only one who survived. Under the sea he found his bey. Since then he is all mysterious.

Special Move: Giant Golden Whirpool. Appears water in the stadium and then Whirpool Poseidon Makes a giant whirpool . The tridents in his track get bigger.

He is a good guy.

Name: Briel
Beblade: Green Libra 100 WB ( Green Is like rock but bigger and green ) The bey is all green.
Special Move: Green Tornado. Libra makes a green tornado turning all things green and blowing the opponent bey away.
Look: He is obssesed with green. Green hair (hair is like ginka's), Green T shirt, Green jeans, Green shoes, Green skin.
He is a very strong blader and wants to get even stronger. He play all the time but when is time to get serius he get serius. And he is very very smart. He is good

Briel is 13 year old. From little he is beyblading. His bey was flame libra. When he was 6 there was a big explotion in his town and his fathers die. Since then he have been around the world beyblading and getting strong. In a town Green Libra felt from the sky hit him in the head. Flame libra disapered. When trainign with the very powerfull Green Libra 100WB the bey caused an explotion that turn him green.
Since then he uses his clothes all green.

They are best friends friends. They are friends since the fathers of Briel die.

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The combonation of two elements is nice, You are in.
Feb. 06, 2011  8:22 PM
 
awesome story.nice job.keep it up.and feel free to use kevin if you want to
Feb. 06, 2011  8:23 PM
 
Who Is Kevin, Dark Angel?
Feb. 06, 2011  8:38 PM
 
main charcter of my story
Feb. 06, 2011  9:51 PM
 
Darkangelkaieru, can you write a description of him please? I am now wondering about this character.
Feb. 06, 2011  9:59 PM
 
name:kevin hagata
bio:a nice,caring,and protective(of his friends but excepically of his bey he will not even let someone touch it) 12 year old boy.he wears black jeans,black shirt with a pegasis symbol HE IS A GOOD GUY
bey:shooting star pegasis(the second clear wheel version)aw85r2f
special move:shooting star overdrive
the bey goes around the oppenent in a circle and gets covered in a black energy that has little specks of sliver that looks like stars and the track gets covered in black fire and hits them six times from all sides but on the 6th hit my bey hits the spin track and send them flying upward then pegasis jumps up smashs them down to the ground and then pegasis goes straghit down and the metal wheel and track hits the face bolt
.aw85 stands for attack wings 85 so its pretty much uw145(killer beafowls track) except the track height is lowered and the sides of the have spikes on them also it is made of metal.also the wings on the track come right to the end of the metal wheel and on my command and during my special move the wings get covered with black fire .the metal wheel is pretty much vulcan except each of the wings has 3 slighty curved spikes and in bewteen the spaces of the spikes about 3 millimeters below that space are slighty curved spikes that are set the exact oppsite way
Feb. 06, 2011  10:24 PM
 
(Feb. 06, 2011  9:59 PM)darkangelkaieru Wrote: name:kevin hagata
bio:a nice,caring,and protective(of his friends but excepically of his bey he will not even let someone touch it) 12 year old boy.he wears black jeans,black shirt with a pegasis symbol HE IS A GOOD GUY
bey:shooting star pegasis(the second clear wheel version)aw85r2f
special move:shooting star overdrive
the bey goes around the oppenent in a circle and gets covered in a black energy that has little specks of sliver that looks like stars and the track gets covered in black fire and hits them six times from all sides but on the 6th hit my bey hits the spin track and send them flying upward then pegasis jumps up smashs them down to the ground and then pegasis goes straghit down and the metal wheel and track hits the face bolt
.aw85 stands for attack wings 85 so its pretty much uw145(killer beafowls track) except the track height is lowered and the sides of the have spikes on them also it is made of metal.also the wings on the track come right to the end of the metal wheel and on my command and during my special move the wings get covered with black fire .the metal wheel is pretty much vulcan except each of the wings has 3 slighty curved spikes and in bewteen the spaces of the spikes about 3 millimeters below that space are slighty curved spikes that are set the exact oppsite way

You have a very colourful character. You are in.
Feb. 06, 2011  10:25 PM
 
thanks and when will he be in
Feb. 06, 2011  10:39 PM
 
Darkangelkaieru. He will be in next chapter.
Feb. 06, 2011  10:40 PM
 
thank you very much and can he be a main charcter plz
Feb. 06, 2011  10:43 PM
 
He will be one of the main characters, just the main character.
Feb. 06, 2011  10:48 PM
 
awesomer thank you
Feb. 06, 2011  10:54 PM
 
no offense but hes basicly jack from the show but his blade is diffrent lol
Feb. 06, 2011  11:19 PM
 
Beyblade 713 I aggre with you because i used that character as a base for this one. btw he is not the main character of this story. I am giving each character a prologe to introduce each charater. if you have any suggestions please post on the thread wall

P.S. Thank you for noticing that

Here is a sneak peek at the next chapter.

Mark's prologue


It was night. A beautiful night. Mark was going with his friends to see the meteor shower tonight. "Man, I am so pumped for the meteor shower tonight!" said Kevin . "Well don't get to hyper, the chances of a meteor landing near us are zero to none". Replied Mark.

Chapter 3: The Blizzard Kyum
Feb. 07, 2011  10:49 PM
 
Whens the nxt chapter?
Feb. 07, 2011  11:28 PM
 
Here is the next chapter.

Mark's prologue


It was night. A beautiful night. Mark was going with his friends to see the meteor shower tonight. "Man, I am so pumped for the meteor shower tonight!" said Kevin . "Well don't get to hyper, the chances of a meteor landing near us are zero to none". Replied Mark.

Chapter 3: The Blizzard Kyum

"Okay, forget the thing I said about the meteors." said Mark. "I already forgot about that." replied Kevin. The meteor shower was more like a meteor blizzard. Meteors were coming from all directions. And the two boys where in the middle of it. "Hey, what's that?" Kevin pointed out. "What are you talking about, nothing's ther- oh there is something there." Mark replied. Indeed, just as Kevin said, there was something there. So as the two boys stood there trying to figure out what it was, the thing looked like it was moving closer to them. And it caught Marks attention. "Uh, Kevin, that thing is moving closer to us." Mark said to Kevin. "Should we leave?" Kevin asked. "No, you should not leave." a voice replied. "Who are you, and what do you want with us?" Kevin inquired. The meteor blizzard had now turned into an actual blizzard. It should have been freezing, but it was not. Well, at least for Mark. Kevin was shaking like a leaf from the windchill. The thing was now fully visible. "I am not your enemy. I am Kyum. The goddess of winter."

"So let me get this straight. You, the goddess of winter, came to tell me, a total nobody, that I have to find four beybladers who have already found the other four great beyblades so that we can defeat the four forbidden beys?" Mark inquired. The two boys and the winter goddess were sitting around a campfire. Kevin was still recovering from hypothermia. Mark was still figuring out what goddess wanted. "Correct. So now do you understand that this is the destiny you must fulfil?" Kyum responded. "But I don't even have a beyblade." Mark said. "Well, not to surprise you, but I am your beyblade and your beyblading spirt." Kyum replied. "Hahaha, Mark, I can't belive it! Your beyblade spirt is a girl! Hahahaha!" Kevin roared with laughter. "Shut up!" Kyum snapped. "At least he has a goddess for a beyblading spirit! Now after you are rested up, you must travel south until yo reach the Black Wolf base. At that point, infaltrate the base and find out the Black Wolf's motives. There you shall meet up with three beybladers called Jake Mikaru, Whirlpool, and Breil. Oh, and Mark, if you need any help, just summon me from your beyblade, because I will always be with you." Kyum said. And with that, she transformed into a beyblade, Blizzard Kyum I145 IS.

Charaters From The Great Beyblade Story

Mark: Likes to play in the snow, watch cosmotic events. he will always help a friend in need or do any task he is given. He is not bothered by the cold. Has blue hair, blue eyes, wears a white t-shirt and blue jeans. Uses Kyum.

Blizzard Kyum I145 IS

Face Kyum: Has a picture of an ice maiden
Clear Wheel Kyum: Has the shape of a maidens dress.
Metal Wheel Blizzard: A cross between Vulcan and Burn and its ice white.
Track I145 (Ice 145): A 145 track that is made out of ice.
Bottom IS (Ice Sharp): A sharp tip made out of ice and is the same height as MS.

Special Move: Howling Blizzard
A Ice Maiden summons an icy blizzard that sends its opponent to an icy end.

Kyum: Mark's partner and the goddess of winter.


name:kevin hagata
bio:a nice,caring,and protective(of his friends but excepically of his bey he will not even let someone touch it) 12 year old boy.he wears black jeans,black shirt with a pegasis symbol HE IS A GOOD GUY
bey:shooting star pegasis(the second clear wheel version)aw85r2f
special move:shooting star overdrive
the bey goes around the oppenent in a circle and gets covered in a black energy that has little specks of sliver that looks like stars and the track gets covered in black fire and hits them six times from all sides but on the 6th hit my bey hits the spin track and send them flying upward then pegasis jumps up smashs them down to the ground and then pegasis goes straghit down and the metal wheel and track hits the face bolt
.aw85 stands for attack wings 85 so its pretty much uw145(killer beafowls track) except the track height is lowered and the sides of the have spikes on them also it is made of metal.also the wings on the track come right to the end of the metal wheel and on my command and during my special move the wings get covered with black fire .the metal wheel is pretty much vulcan except each of the wings has 3 slighty curved spikes and in bewteen the spaces of the spikes about 3 millimeters below that space are slighty curved spikes that are set the exact oppsite way
Feb. 08, 2011  12:19 AM
 
Here's my character!
Name: Mioshi Tagana
Bey: Shining Leone90ES
S move: Leone shining claw: Leone starts to glow, then charges at foe and flips it from below.
Description: Very nice, but quiet. She wears a purple shirt and jeans.
Feb. 08, 2011  12:26 AM
 
(Feb. 08, 2011  12:19 AM)storm dranzer Wrote: Here's my character!
Name: Mioshi Tagana
Bey: Shining Leone90ES
S move: Leone shining claw: Leone starts to glow, then charges at foe and flips it from below.
Description: Very nice, but quiet. She wears a purple shirt and jeans.
Sorry man, I am all out of good guy spots but you could be evil if you want.
Feb. 09, 2011  4:28 AM
 
Hey guys, the next chapter will be up in the next two or three days so please be paitent.

Thank you for reading my story,
~Liam
Feb. 10, 2011  5:17 AM
 
Here is the long waited chapter four preveiw

Chapter 4: Into the Wolf's Lair!

"So we have to travel south to the Black Wolf's lair, right?" asked Kevin. "I believe so." replied Mark. "How far south?" Kevin inquired. "Let's ask Kyum." Mark said. "Hey Kyum, how far south do we have to travel to get to the Black Wolf's Base?" "Just ride on my blizzard, okay." Kyum replied. "What are you talking about? You can't ride a BBLLLLIIIIZZZAAARRDD!!! AGGGGGHHH!!!" Kevin screamed while being whisked away by the blizzard. Then Mark was swept away in the blizzard.

"Thanks for the ride, Kyum." Mark said. "No Problem, Mark." Kyum replied as she returned to Mark's beyblade. "Hey, Mark I think we are not alone." Kevin said. "What do you mean?" Mark asked. "Well, you know how that Kyum said that we would meet up with three other bladers, right? Well I think that things in the distance are the three beybladers that we are supposed to meet up with." Kevin told Mark. "Let's go take a look!" Mark said with excitement.
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