[Story]: Jason Kitaro Chapter 5 is up! [READ!]

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Cherish your siblings you never know if you'll forget them or loose them.

Character Request Format (Click to View)
Chapter 1 The Beginning (Click to View)
Chapter 2 Hiding Something (Click to View)
Chapter 3 A New Beyblade (Click to View)
Chapter 4 The battle (Click to View)
Chapter 5 WBBA tournament (Click to View)
Seems interesting, good luck!
thanks I didnt realize it would be this hard to write a story
Your welcome, keep up the good work.
Sounds.. actually quite cool.

Just work on your grammar a little bit. Good luck!
yeah i will but im not that good with grammar

Chapter 2 added
Seems like quite an interesting premise. You have a nice writing style but you need to work on the grammar, and chapters are way too short. I like it though. Keep it up.
Chapters need to be longer...
chapter 4 aded and its longer than the other chapters
I really think you should make your chapters WAY longer, and space them out more. You missed a few capitals, and some sentences were very hard to understand.
great this is awesome
(Sep. 15, 2012  5:08 AM)beybladefoever Wrote: attempt at a story suggest characters please

Prologue

Cherish your siblings you never know if you'll forget them or loose them.

Chapter 1 The Beginning
Chapter 2 Hiding Something
Chapter 3 A New Beyblade
Chapter 4 The battle

thanks this is harder than i thought though because my chapters have to be longer but i tried to fix my grammar
Okay new chapter every other day starting tommorow
Nice story man. Better stay that good.
thanks I'll try new chapter tommorow
Sorry for the long wait but I am now writing Chapters 6 & 7!