[Non-Beyblade Story] Remedy

Poll: How's the story?

It's just... Wow.
50.00%
1
Great! It could be perfect with some tweaking!
50.00%
1
Not good, but definitely not terrible.
0%
0
Leave the writing community!
0%
0
Total: 100% 2 vote(s)
Hey folks, that weird kid's making a new story again. This doesn't mean Kazuki's Quest and the Avatar FanFic won't be concluded, I just want to refresh my writing slate with a new story.

Without Further Ado:
Chapter 1: "Client (Click to View)
A good, interesting story. You just need to be careful about your grammar. Other than that, you're good.
(Sep. 11, 2013  8:18 AM)jacolal Wrote: A good, interesting story. You just need to be careful about your grammar. Other than that, you're good.

Thank you!
Can you explain the grammar issues in PM?