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Nov. 24, 2020  4:57 PM
 
(Nov. 24, 2020  4:55 PM)TakaraTheLord Wrote: Episode 11 : Awesome!

Fubuki Sumiye : Now let me battle you for once! I want to have some fun too!

Free delahoya : No matter how hard you try you will never be able to beat me

Fubuki Sumiye : Yeah maybe . Maybe not

Free Delahoya : If your so confident then let's do it

Everyone : 3! 2! 1! Go, Shoot!

Fubuki Sumiye : Take the center!Forneus!

Free Delahoya : The center is mine

(But forneus take the center first)

Fubuki Sumiye : Aquatic guard!

(Fafnir attacks then gets sent back and continues attacking)

Fubuki Sumiye : I know what your going to do!

(Then fafnir attacks then forneus purposely goes into one of the small stadiums and gets some more spin)

Free Delahoya : Wrong move

Fubuki Sumiye : What?!

(Forneus get out with lots of spin)

Free Delahoya : Now Fafnir! Ancient spin!

Fubuki Sumiye : Now Forneus Aquatic slash!

Free Delahoya : Hmm good thinking but fafnir already stole more than enough spin.Ahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!! Fafnir!!!!!!!! Ancient claw!!!!!!!!!!!

Fubuki Sumiye : Ahhhhhhhh!!! Forneus!!! Aquatic drift!!!!!

(Forneus burst)

Fubuki Sumiye : You beat my plan !

Free Delahoya : That was not as boring as the other matches

Aiden and Parker Umuzaki : Hey!

Rantaro Kiyama : You having fun without me!

Aiden Umzuaki Rantaro Kiyama!?

Parker Umuzaki : Yeah I think it’s him!

Rantaro Kiyama : Do I know you?

Aiden Uuzaki : No! But we know you from the triple legend battle!

Parker Umuzaki : Yeah! Can we have a battle!

Rantaro Kiyama : Sure! Just know that i’m going to rip ya to shreds!

Hikaru and Hyuga Asahi : Were her too!

Fubuki Sumiye : Let’s make this a tag team! Rantaro, Hyuaga, and Me! Vs Aiden ,Parker,and Hikaru!!

(Aiden, Parker, and Hikaru go on defense mode )

(And then Ares apperes on front of Aiden )

Aiden Umuzkai : We have been losing too much.Help me Ares!

Ares : Do you trust me Aiden?

Aiden Umuzaki : Yes!

Ares : Then show it to me.Let’s win this Aiden!

Aiden Umuzaki : Yeah!

(And then they fist bump)

(And then Poseidon Appears Infront of Parker)

Parker Umzuaki : How do we win? Were a serious losing streak!

Poseidon : Do you trust in me Parker?

Parker Umuzkai : Of course Poseidon!

Poseidon : Then show it to me! Let’s win this battle!

Parker Umuzkai : Yeah!

(Aiden and And Ares see Poseidon and Parker!. Parker and Poseidon see Are and Aiden!)

(And then the all take a step forward)

Aiden and Parker Umuzkai : Unleashing a new spirit level!

(Free is gone.He disappeared somewhere. Probable to go training)

Everyone : 3! 2! 1! Go, Shoot!

Everyone : Take the center!

(Every bey clashes! And then all sixe beys get sent into a crater)

(Flame Ragnaruk and Aquatic forneus in a spinning little stadium, with Crown Hyperion in one speed crater!) (Ares and Poseidon in a speed crater, with Gravity Helios in the little stadium!)

Everyone : Ahhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hikaru Asahi : Mega Counter!!!!!!

Hyuga Asahi : Crown Crater!!!!!!!!

Aiden Umuzaki : Rain Crush!!!!!!!

Parker Umuzaki : Hydro Crush!!!!!!

Rantaro Kiyama : Flame Tornado!!!!!!

Fubuki Sumiye : Aquatic Drift!!!!!!!!!!!

(Every bey clashes!)

Everyone : Ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!! I’m gonna win!!!!

(Everybey burst! Wait there are two more beys left spinning! It’s Ares and Poseidon!)

End of episode 11

A fine story.
Nov. 24, 2020  4:58 PM
 
(Nov. 24, 2020  4:57 PM)EarthHelios Wrote:
(Nov. 24, 2020  4:55 PM)TakaraTheLord Wrote: Episode 11 : Awesome!

Fubuki Sumiye : Now let me battle you for once! I want to have some fun too!

Free delahoya : No matter how hard you try you will never be able to beat me

Fubuki Sumiye : Yeah maybe . Maybe not

Free Delahoya : If your so confident  then let's do it

Everyone : 3! 2! 1! Go, Shoot!

Fubuki Sumiye : Take the center!Forneus!

Free Delahoya : The center is mine

(But forneus take the center first)

Fubuki Sumiye : Aquatic guard!

(Fafnir attacks then gets sent back and continues attacking)

Fubuki Sumiye : I know what your going to do!

(Then fafnir attacks then forneus purposely goes into one of the small stadiums and gets some more spin)

Free Delahoya : Wrong move

Fubuki Sumiye : What?!

(Forneus get out with lots of spin)

Free Delahoya : Now Fafnir! Ancient spin!

Fubuki Sumiye : Now Forneus Aquatic slash!

Free Delahoya : Hmm good thinking but fafnir already stole more than enough spin.Ahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!! Fafnir!!!!!!!! Ancient claw!!!!!!!!!!!

Fubuki Sumiye : Ahhhhhhhh!!! Forneus!!! Aquatic drift!!!!!

(Forneus burst)

Fubuki Sumiye : You beat my plan !

Free Delahoya : That was not as boring as the other matches

Aiden and Parker Umuzaki : Hey!

Rantaro Kiyama : You having fun without me!

Aiden Umzuaki Rantaro Kiyama!?

Parker Umuzaki : Yeah I think it’s him!

Rantaro Kiyama : Do I know you?

Aiden Uuzaki : No! But we know you from the triple legend battle!

Parker Umuzaki : Yeah! Can we have a battle!

Rantaro Kiyama : Sure! Just know that i’m going to rip ya to shreds!

Hikaru and Hyuga Asahi : Were her too!

Fubuki Sumiye : Let’s make this a tag team! Rantaro, Hyuaga, and Me! Vs Aiden ,Parker,and Hikaru!!

(Aiden, Parker, and Hikaru go on defense mode )

(And then Ares apperes on front of Aiden )

Aiden Umuzkai : We have been losing too much.Help me Ares!

Ares : Do you trust me Aiden?

Aiden Umuzaki : Yes!

Ares : Then show it to me.Let’s win this Aiden!

Aiden Umuzaki : Yeah!

(And then they fist bump)

(And then Poseidon Appears Infront of Parker)

Parker Umzuaki : How do we win? Were a serious losing streak!

Poseidon : Do you trust in me Parker?

Parker Umuzkai : Of course Poseidon!

Poseidon : Then show it to me! Let’s win this battle!

Parker Umuzkai : Yeah!

(Aiden and And Ares see Poseidon and Parker!. Parker and Poseidon see Are and Aiden!)

(And then the all take a step forward)

Aiden and Parker Umuzkai : Unleashing a new spirit level!

(Free is gone.He disappeared somewhere. Probable to go training)

Everyone : 3! 2! 1! Go, Shoot!

Everyone : Take the center!

(Every bey clashes! And then all sixe beys get sent into a crater)

(Flame Ragnaruk and Aquatic forneus in a spinning little stadium, with Crown Hyperion in one speed crater!) (Ares and Poseidon in a speed crater, with Gravity Helios in the little stadium!)

Everyone : Ahhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hikaru Asahi : Mega Counter!!!!!!

Hyuga Asahi : Crown Crater!!!!!!!!

Aiden Umuzaki : Rain Crush!!!!!!!

Parker Umuzaki : Hydro Crush!!!!!!

Rantaro Kiyama : Flame Tornado!!!!!!

Fubuki Sumiye : Aquatic Drift!!!!!!!!!!!

(Every bey clashes!)

Everyone : Ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!! I’m gonna win!!!!

(Everybey burst! Wait there are two more beys left spinning! It’s Ares and Poseidon!)

End of episode 11

A fine story.

Yeah! I added every other character they met! (Except Sisco Ranjiro, and Drum).I though that would be more interesting!
Nov. 24, 2020  4:59 PM
 
(Nov. 24, 2020  4:58 PM)TakaraTheLord Wrote:
(Nov. 24, 2020  4:57 PM)EarthHelios Wrote: A fine story.

Yeah! I added every other character they met! (Except Sisco Ranjiro, and Drum).I though that would be more interesting!

I liked how Rantaro appeared out of nowhere lol
Nov. 24, 2020  5:03 PM
 
(Nov. 24, 2020  4:59 PM)EarthHelios Wrote:
(Nov. 24, 2020  4:58 PM)TakaraTheLord Wrote: Yeah! I added every other character they met! (Except Sisco Ranjiro, and Drum).I though that would be more interesting!

I liked how Rantaro appeared out of nowhere lol

I thought making one episode week wasn't enough (Even though I wasn't doing ti on purpose.I didn't have time because of school.I wrote these two episodes while I was in school! (It was hard to pay attention and write and write a story at the same time!))
Dec. 04, 2020  4:52 PM
 
Here are the beys that have been mentioned so far and their parts

Aiden Umuzaki
Age : 15
Hair color : Blue and red (The whole hair is blue but two stripes are red)
Eye Color : Red
Ranking : Non
Role : Main Character
Beyblade : Rain Ares
Parts : Rain (Ring) + Ares (chip) + 1-Balance’(chassis) + Same (metal) + Lava (driver) spin right
Evolution : (Secret) Ares
Parts : (Secret) (Ring) + Ares 2 (chip) + 10-Balance (chassis) + Row (metal) + Lava’ (Driver) spin dual

Parker Umuzaku
Age : 15
Hair color : Red and blue (The whole hair is Red but two stripes are Blue)
Eye Color : Blue
Ranking : Non
Role : Main Character
Beyblade : Hydro Poseidon
Parts : Hydro (Ring) + Poseidon (chip) 1-Balance’ (chassis) + Same (metal) + String (driver) spin left
Evolution : (Secret) Poseidon
Parts : (Secret) (Ring) + Poseidon (chip) + 9-Balance (chassis) + Row (metal) + String’ (driver) spin left

Rantaro Kiyama
Age : 18
Hair color : Yellow
Eye color : Brown
Rankings : Not a legend anymore
Beyblade : Flame Ragnaruk
Parts : Flame (Ring) + Ragnarok (chip) + 4 Stamina’ (chassis) Sand (metal) + Apex (driver) Spin right
Evolution : Non

Ranjiro Kiyama
Age : 16
Hair color : Yellow
Eye color : Gold
Rankings : None
Role :
Beyblade : Flame Ragnaruk
Parts : Flame (Ring) + Ragnarok (chip) + 4 Stamina’ (chassis) Sand (metal) + Apex (driver) Spin right
Evolution : Non

Fubuki Sumiye
Age : 16
Hair Color : Blonde
Eye color : Red
Rankings : None
Role : Club captain
Beyblade : Aquatic Forneus
Parts : Aquatic (Ring) + Forneus (chip) + 6-Defence + Sand (metal) + Sea (driver) Spin right
Evolution : None

Amane Kusaba
Age : 16
Hair Color : Brown
Eye Color : Light green
Rankings : None
Beyblade : Shield Ashura
Parts : Shield (Ring) + Ashura (chip) + 1-Defense’ (chassis) + Typhoon (metal) + Stay(driver) spin right
Evolution : None

Hyuga Asahi :
Age : 15
Hair Color : Red
Eye Color : Red
Rankings : 4th Legend in rankings
Beyblade : Crown Hyperion
Parts : Crown (Ring) + Hyperion (chip) + 6-Attack’ (chassis) + Third (metal) + Show (driver) spin right
Evolution : None

Hikaru Asahi
Age : 15
Hair Color : Blue
Eye Color : Green
Rankings : 3rd In Legend rankings
Beyblade : Gravity Helios
Parts : Gravity (Ring) + Helios (chip) + 6 Balance’ (chassis) + Aura (metal) + Mega (driver) spin left

Free Delahoya
Age : 18
Hair Color : Yellow and red (Yellow and two stripes red)
Eye Color : Black and Yellow (Can turn yellow in battle when free goes all out)
Rankings : 6th In the Legends rankings
Beyblade : Ancient Fafnir
Parts : Ancient (Ring) + Fafnir (chip) + 5-Stamina’ (chassis) + Clash (metal) + Drain (driver) spin left
Evolution : None
Dec. 08, 2020  4:38 PM
 
Episode 12 : Rest
Aiden and Parker Umuzaki : Yeah!
Fubuki Sumiye : Seems like even such a close friend to Valt like you couldn’t beat these two
Rantaro Kiyama : These kids are interesting
Aiden Umuzaki : Everybody says that
Fubuki Sumiye : Now let’s go back to Japan
Aiden Umuzkai : Already?
(Fubuki’s stomach growls)
Parker Umuzaki : See? Even your stomach says you need to stay a little longer.Let’s go eat
(Sometime later)
Parker and Aiden Umuzk1 : Mmmm.Delicious!
Fubuki Sumiye : Don’t talk with your mouth full.Now let’s go were done
(They get to the plane)
Aiden Umuzkai :The sky is beautiful
Parker Umuzkai : Yeah!
(sometime later)
Fubuki Sumiye : We’re back
Aiden and Parker Umuzaki : Aww.Why now? I was starting to enjoy the ride
(Back at their house)
Dave Umuzkai : Welcome back kiddos
Aiden and Parker Umuzaki : Thanks dad. And today, we battled Free
Dave Umuzaki : Youn mean the one and only Free Delahoya?
Aiden Umuzaki : Yes!
Emma Umuzkai : How did it go?
Parker Umuzaki : He’s really strong.He crushed us
Emma Umuzaki : Don’t be so sad at least you got to battle someone so cool
Aiden and Parker Umuzaki : But we battled rantaro too.And it was a six way battle tag team.Fubuki, Hyuga, and Rantaro, vs Us, and Hikaru! And we won!
Emma Umuzaki : That must have been tiring
Aiden and Parker Umuzkai : Yeah i’m gonna get some sleep
(After an hour of sleep)
Aiden Umuzaki : Man talk about a good sleep
Parker Umuzaki : Yeah
Aiden Umuzkai : what time is it?
Parker Umuzkai : It’s 3:13
(They are out going on a walk)
Aiden Umuzaki : I hear beyblades
Parker Umuzaki : Me too
Aiden Umuzkai : I think it’s come from the bey club
(After they get to the club they see a mysterious blader beating everyone)
Parker Umuzkai : Who are you?
(The blader turned head head to look at him)
End of episode 12
EarthHelios Can you rate my fanfic?
Dec. 08, 2020  4:43 PM
 
The chapter was a 8/10. You need to correct your grammar for some words. But otherwise the chapter is very good
Dec. 08, 2020  4:47 PM
 
i like the fan-fic

but i dont like how he got so powerful in just ep 1
Dec. 08, 2020  5:17 PM
 
(Dec. 08, 2020  4:47 PM)DragonisBlader Wrote: i like the fan-fic

but i dont like how he got so powerful in just ep 1

He didn't. He lost he didn't win
Dec. 08, 2020  5:18 PM
 
(Dec. 08, 2020  5:17 PM)TakaraTheLord Wrote:
(Dec. 08, 2020  4:47 PM)DragonisBlader Wrote: i like the fan-fic

but i dont like how he got so powerful in just ep 1

He didn't. He lost he didn't win
do u want to be friends?
Dec. 08, 2020  5:19 PM
 
(Dec. 08, 2020  5:18 PM)DragonisBlader Wrote:
(Dec. 08, 2020  5:17 PM)TakaraTheLord Wrote: He didn't. He lost he didn't win
do u want to be friends?

you can talk with him in pm for that....its not on topic for the topic of the thread
Dec. 18, 2020  3:36 PM
 
Episode 13 : Mystery solved!

Parker Umuzaki : Who are you?

Mystery blader : My name is Harry Saku and I want to join the club

Aiden Umuzaki : Then how many blder are left to battle?

Harry Saku : This is the 96th battle

Aiden Umuzaki : Then after you this battle you get a rest

Harry Saku : I’m okay with that

Referee : Burst Finish! Harry Saku is the winner!
(After ten mins)

Harry Saku : Okay who’s next

Parker Umuzaki : Toko! You're up next!

Toko Aoi : You're facing me Harry!

Harry Saku : Stamina type huh? Just like my Spiral Horusood!

Referee : Ready, set!

Everyone : 3, 2, 1, Go, Shoot!

Harry Saku and Toko Aoi : Take the center!
(Trident’s heavy weight pushes Horusood away)

Harry Saku : Spiral Flight!
(Horusood Flies up and makes a tornado!)

Toko Aoi : You're not getting away. Ahhhhhh!!!!!! Trident!!!!! Central counter!!!

Harry Saku : Who said I was trying to run? Ahhhhh!!!! Horusood!!! Spiral Nightmare!!!!
(Horusood keeps hitting Trident with its claws on the driver until it burst.)

Referee : Spiral Horusood with a burst finish! Harry Saku is the winner!

Aiden Umuzkai : Not bad

Fubuki Sumiye : Get ready to lose

Hary Saku : I don’t think so

Referee : Ready! Set!

Everyone : 3, 2,1, Go, Shoot!
(Forneus doesn’t head for center stage)

Harry Saku : Good thinking but it’s still not going to work.Horusood! Take the center!

Fubuki Sumiye : Wrong move.Emperor slash!
(Horusood gets knocked out of the stadium)

Fubuki Sumiye : You’re not too heavy so that’s your weakness

Harry Saku : Next Battle is not going to be the same

End of episode 13
Dec. 20, 2020  7:08 PM
 
There is a new blader called Harry!
Mar. 11, 2021  6:10 PM
 
Sneak peek of episode 14

Episode 14 : Sneak peek

Harry Saku : Next battle is not going to be the same
Harry Sakyu [Thinks] : He’s right. I’m light but I can use that as my advantage
Referee : ready set!
Everyone : 3, 2, 1, Go, Shoot!
(Forneus and Horusood fight for the center)
Fubuki Sumiye : Don’t sweat it.
(Forneus kicks Horusood but Horusood floats down safely)
Harry Saku : Good try but it won’t work on me!Ahhh, Horusood!!! Spiral Nightmare!
(Horusood keeps hitting forneus with it’s claws  but at the last moment Horusood went back on the stadium and slammed forneus down and Forneus bursted)
(Silence)
Harry Saku : Oooyeah!!!!!!!
Referee : 2 - 1 Harry Saku is the winner!
Parker Umuzaki : Get ready!
Harry Saku : I already am!
Referee : Ready set!
Everyone 3, 2, 1, Go, Shoot!
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