(May. 05, 2021 2:04 AM)SSJBDoku Wrote: DragonBladerZ, mate you have the same problem i used to have.
When your writing you get excited and you want to get to certain points quick but you need to slow down take your time what i mean is your story has potential but you need to slow down the plot Danny went from having a new bey to going to the Raging Bulls and WBO and we got little to no information on who Danny is that's all i have to say for now
Soon In my chapter I’ll be about Danny
Beyblade Burst: Sparking Battle
Chapter: 4
Us VS BC Sol
Danny and Paul: We won!!!
Hyuga: Awww man
Hikaru: How though!!!
Danny: You two have to get along and use a strategy
Hyuga and Hikaru: Ok
(Danny’s sister somehow comes to Danny and Paul)
Danny’s sister: Danny and your friend you’re going to BC Sol
Danny: First we went to the Raging Bulls, and now BC Sol
Paul: Amazing!!!
(Danny and Paul get on the plane and they get to Spain)
Danny: Wow this is Spain where BC Sol is
Paul: So cool!!!
Valt: Come with me to BC Sol
Danny and Paul: That’s Valt Aoi!!!
Valt: Yep
(Danny and Paul follow Valt to BC Sol)
Valt: You’re going to battle Rantaro, Sisco, and our new member Lialus
Paul: I’ll watch the battles
Danny: Ok
Rantaro: Battle me first
Danny: Ok
Danny and Rantaro: 3, 2, 1, GO SHOOT!!!
Rantaro: Ragnaruk!!! Typhoon Tornado
Danny: Kitsune!!! Flame Tail
(After those attacks they get thrown into the air)
Danny and Rantaro: Survive!!!
(Both beys have survived)
Danny: Flame Launch
Rantaro: Free Typhoon Spin
(Ragnaruk gets ringed out)
Valt: Flame Kitsune with a ring out finish Danny wins
Danny: Wow
Sisco: Now you’re up against me pipsqueak
Danny: Don’t call me pipsqueak!!!
Kitsune: Danny focus on the battle don’t focus on Sisco
Danny: Ok I’ll focus on the battle
(Talk ended)
Danny and Sisco: 3, 2, 1, GO SHOOT!!!
Sisco: Satan use Triple Twister
Danny: Flame Launch
(Kitsune is attacking Satan, but Satan is repelling the attacks)
Sisco: Ha you don’t know how to blade don’t you
Danny: Kitsune!!!
(Kitsune’s avatar happens)
(Kitsune is glowing gold and red. Kitsune activated Ultra Fire-Flux)
Danny: Flame Sword
Sisco: Roller Defense
(Satan bursts)
Valt: Flame Kitsune with a burst finish Danny wins
Danny: I won again!!!
Kitsune: Don’t get yourself carried away
Danny: Ok Kitsune
Valt: Now you’re going to battle our other member
Danny: Ok
Lialus: I’m a member here, and I want to battle you!!!
Lialus: Meet my bey Flip Larry
Danny’s thoughts: Flip Larry is a dual spinning balance type that has one blade and if you flip the layer it goes left so I gotta take the center
Valt: Ready, and set
Danny and Lialus: 3, 2, 1, GO SHOOT!!!
Lialus: Take the center
Danny: Not on my watch
(Kitsune and Larry are attacking head on in the center)
Lialus: Larry use Flip One Blade Attack
Danny: Now Flame Defense
(Kitsune did not get attacked)
Lialus: That attack would normally make me win
Danny: This time not
(Kitsune hits the wall and goes up in the air)
Danny: Flame Dive!!!
Lialus: Flip Dive Defense
(Both beys burst)
Valt: Simultaneious Burst Finish Draw
Danny and Lialus: WHAT!!!
(The End)
Preview:
Danny: We’re going up against Free and Valt
Danny: And I’m teamed up with Lialus
Lialus: Hope we win
Danny: Next time on Beyblade Burst: Sparking Battle
Chapter: 5
The High School Prodigy and Wonder-Boy VS Danny and Lialus
So USN what do think of chapter 4 with your character in it
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