[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu

(Jul. 11, 2021  9:49 PM)AyoManWassup Wrote:
(Jul. 11, 2021  6:09 PM)USN Wrote: I did not ban or report you. I know nothing about your case and I am not staff. As far as I know, you do not deserve the ban, but staff decided that you do, and I believe staff. I have done nothing except for give you advice. We have very good staff and if you truly do not believe you deserve a ban, they will listen. Weather you be banned or not is your choice now.
BTW I don't make the rules, I just carry my weight.

Well then I am glad you understand. Sorry for the fuss.
dang bruh the one time i have to go somewhere the craziest stuff happens
Ikr crazy thing happens
After I post the next chapter Beyjitzu will go on break because in Dynachi the finale is coming up and I want to finish Dynachi so I can get to my next fanfic Beyblade Burst TechnoX
(Jul. 12, 2021  2:08 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: After I post the next chapter Beyjitzu will go on break because in Dynachi the finale is coming up and I want to finish Dynachi so I can get to my next fanfic Beyblade Burst TechnoX

nice!! TechnoX seems like a very lit name
Wow One Fanfic after the other
Chapter 23 is FLARING up!!
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:41 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: Great! Nice Chapter!!

Thanks, what was ur fave part?
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:41 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:41 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: Great! Nice Chapter!!

Thanks, what was ur fave part?

When Salamander bursts Pegasus. Rain of Swordfire!!!!!! Lol
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:28 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 23 is FLARING up!!

this episode is cool, didnt see any grammar, plot, character, story, or writing problems!
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:46 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:28 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 23 is FLARING up!!

this episode is cool, didnt see any grammar, plot, character, story, or writing problems!

Yes it was nice.
Beyjitzu is going on a small 1-week break so I can work on the Finale For Dynachi so swing by there!!
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:57 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Beyjitzu is going on a small 1-week break so I can work on the Finale For Dynachi so swing by there!!

k
“Me and Pam pull of beyjitzu launcher” don’t you mean Launches?

Is it Sam or Suilen cause I’m not sure you said that in the fanfic like “Sam Genji” but then it said

Suilen: Pegasus will burn!
(Jul. 12, 2021  9:21 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: “Me and Pam pull of beyjitzu launcher” don’t you mean Launches?

Is it Sam or Suilen cause I’m not sure you said that in the fanfic like “Sam Genji” but then it said

Suilen: Pegasus will burn!

I changed the name to Sulien mid way so I might've missed that
(Jul. 12, 2021  9:35 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021  9:21 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: “Me and Pam pull of beyjitzu launcher” don’t you mean Launches?

Is it Sam or Suilen cause I’m not sure you said that in the fanfic like “Sam Genji” but then it said

Suilen: Pegasus will burn!

I changed the name to Sulien mid way so I might've missed that

K (sorry if I sounded rude)
(Jul. 12, 2021  9:39 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021  9:35 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I changed the name to Sulien mid way so I might've missed that

K (sorry if I sounded rude)

Nah, your good
(Jul. 12, 2021  9:43 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021  9:39 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: K (sorry if I sounded rude)

Nah, your good

Okay
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:43 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:39 PM)TylerOfChaos Wrote: Blader: Ryan Evenos
Persona: cocky
Age: 11
Appearance: Messy, Spiky, Black and Purple hair, 4'7
Bey: Tenebris Reaper (attack type, counterclockwise rotation,  2 bladed, chassis 3a (rage longinus chassis)

wow bro i actually made an aether helios lol. one of its moves is Swirling Aether

Srry Ty but currently I'm not having any character contests

Chapter 20 is out!!
LegendJustice can you rate this chapter? I'll rate ur's later promise

Good chapter! Lol Shu cooks spaghetti faster than Papyrus.
UnseenBurst so here I’ll rate Chapter 23

Grammar: 4.2/5 I notice some mistakes like how you made Suilen become sam I was confused

Dialogue: 5/5

Characters: 5/5 you really brought them to life you know I could understand there feeling very much!

Plot: 4/5 so in one of the scenes I couldn’t understand where they where but besides that this was good!

Writing: 5/5 it’s nice some times I wanna steal your writing style lol

Length: 5/5 Nice! It’s like more than average long!

Over all: 28/30 this was good I like it!
(Jul. 13, 2021  2:27 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: UnseenBurst so here I’ll rate Chapter 23

Grammar: 4.2/5 I notice some mistakes like how you made Suilen become sam I was confused

Dialogue: 5/5

Characters: 5/5 you really brought them to life you know I could understand there feeling very much!

Plot: 4/5 so in one of the scenes I couldn’t understand where they where but besides that this was good!

Writing: 5/5 it’s nice some times I wanna steal your writing style lol

Length: 5/5 Nice! It’s like more than average long!

Over all: 28/30 this was good I like it!

I just wanna say, you're really good at rating when you rate my stuff I know exactly what I need to improve! Thanks so much!! Smile
(Jul. 13, 2021  11:17 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 13, 2021  2:27 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: UnseenBurst so here I’ll rate Chapter 23

Grammar: 4.2/5 I notice some mistakes like how you made Suilen become sam I was confused

Dialogue: 5/5

Characters: 5/5 you really brought them to life you know I could understand there feeling very much!

Plot: 4/5 so in one of the scenes I couldn’t understand where they where but besides that this was good!

Writing: 5/5 it’s nice some times I wanna steal your writing style lol

Length: 5/5 Nice! It’s like more than average long!

Over all: 28/30 this was good I like it!

I just wanna say, you're really good at rating when you rate my stuff I know exactly what I need to improve! Thanks so much!! Smile
No problem!
So I decided to create Percy in IRL he's way taller then I want him to be but whatever here it is Also Chapter 36 is out on Dynachi! so check that out!
i like it!
(Jul. 16, 2021  6:53 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: i like it!

same, he kinda looks like he's from britain (which is not a problem) lol