[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu

(Jul. 08, 2021  11:03 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  11:01 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Nice chapter, nothing too much, just an attachment for the driver and the first battle, but still nice

Thanks, it was supposed to be one of those filer episodes if you get what I'm saying where nothing too important happens

lol alright
(Jul. 08, 2021  11:01 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: i'll rate

Characters: 5/5 - You expressed the characters so well, I was able to fully understand their motives! Greatness!

Grammar: 5/5 - really?

Writing: 4/5 - It's great (but in my perspective some stuff looks a (bit) jumbled up) but only some stuff. Nice!

Length: 4/5 - This chapter wasn't your longest chapter, but definitely wasn't your shortest. Great job!

Plot: 5/5 - I understand how to plot progresses throughout the story very well. Awesome!

All 'n All (Total): 23/25 - Great job with this chapter, and keep on improving!

Thanks!!

(Jul. 08, 2021  10:56 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:43 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Srry Ty but currently I'm not having any character contests

Chapter 20 is out!!
LegendJustice can you rate this chapter? I'll rate ur's later promise

Nice! I'll rate in a while I'm on MK chat!?

Ok thanks

I just wanted to thank everyone for their support for Bejitzu even tho it's kinda bad lol
(Jul. 08, 2021  11:05 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  11:01 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: i'll rate

Characters: 5/5 - You expressed the characters so well, I was able to fully understand their motives! Greatness!

Grammar: 5/5 - really?

Writing: 4/5 - It's great (but in my perspective some stuff looks a (bit) jumbled up) but only some stuff. Nice!

Length: 4/5 - This chapter wasn't your longest chapter, but definitely wasn't your shortest. Great job!

Plot: 5/5 - I understand how to plot progresses throughout the story very well. Awesome!

All 'n All (Total): 23/25 - Great job with this chapter, and keep on improving!

Thanks!!

(Jul. 08, 2021  10:56 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Nice! I'll rate in a while I'm on MK chat!?

Ok thanks

I just wanted to thank everyone for their support for Bejitzu even tho it's kinda bad lol
lol yw
Dang USN 's on a role becuase the name I chose for the new Spryzen was Superior Spryzen
(Jul. 08, 2021  11:14 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Dang USN 's on a role becuase the name I chose for the new Spryzen was Superior Spryzen

alrighty dighty dippity scooby doo
Characters: You really made them feel 5/5

Grammar: was some mistake but it was good 4/5

Battles: just Incredible I don't know what to say 5/5

Diolouge: 5/5

Length: Felt like you where missing something but it was good 4.9/5

Plot: Nice it was clear and it was nice to understand 5/5
Basically chapter 21 in a nutshell
Lol this is just 😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱

UnseenBurst so it's true.... Vlad is the strongest?
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:09 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Lol this is just 😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱

UnseenBurst so it's true.... Vlad is the strongest?

wow... vlad is the strongest!
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:09 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Lol this is just 😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱

UnseenBurst so it's true.... Vlad is the strongest?

(Jul. 09, 2021  1:15 AM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:09 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Lol this is just 😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱

UnseenBurst so it's true.... Vlad is the strongest?

wow... vlad is the strongest!

Yes, becuase he's the Legend Champion and he's squared off with Valt before so yeah.
Wow I thought it was gonna be asher
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:18 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:09 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Lol this is just 😱😱😱😱😱😱😱😱

UnseenBurst so it's true.... Vlad is the strongest?

(Jul. 09, 2021  1:15 AM)BladeKingX Wrote: wow... vlad is the strongest!

Yes, becuase he's the Legend Champion and he's squared off with Valt before so yeah.
wait was that the last episode of DYNAAACHI
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:21 AM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:18 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Yes, becuase he's the Legend Champion and he's squared off with Valt before so yeah.
wait was that the last episode of DYNAAACHI

No way!!!
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:21 AM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:18 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Yes, becuase he's the Legend Champion and he's squared off with Valt before so yeah.
wait was that the last episode of DYNAAACHI

Oop srry I thought we we were talking about Asher well yeah Vlad's the strongest as of the battle with Apocalypse and he's already surpassed Valt at this point
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:23 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:21 AM)BladeKingX Wrote: wait was that the last episode of DYNAAACHI

Oop srry I thought we we were talking about Asher well yeah Vlad's the strongest as of the battle with Apocalypse and he's already surpassed Valt at this point

w0w amazing who's the least strongest
Asher (no offense)
I'd have to say Percy right now. Percy fans be like *Screams*
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:34 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I'd have to say Percy right now. Percy fans be like *Screams*

Being a vlad fan: Whatever
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:35 AM)LegendJustice Wrote:
(Jul. 09, 2021  1:34 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I'd have to say Percy right now. Percy fans be like *Screams*

Being a vlad fan: Whatever

lol
Chapter 21 is out!!
(Jul. 09, 2021  2:46 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 21 is out!!
this episode is awesome! it helps teach aiden a valuable lesson!
(Jul. 09, 2021  2:53 AM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 09, 2021  2:46 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 21 is out!!
this episode is awesome! it helps teach aiden a valuable lesson!

Yeah, shows that if you're lazy you'll never achieve anything (Now this reminds me of a kids show where they teach u a lesson)
Wait Aiden? Don't you mean ADAM?!!!
(Jul. 09, 2021  3:17 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Wait Aiden? Don't you mean ADAM?!!!

thanks justice, now you got me confused lol
(Jul. 09, 2021  3:17 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Wait Aiden? Don't you mean ADAM?!!!

Aiden is the Ashindra owner in Beyjitzu Adam is the Ashindra owner for Dynachi