[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade: Angels {~A Dark Beyblade Story~}

(Aug. 11, 2021  7:23 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: King Spriggan has now been renamed to Enchanted Spriggan

New Episode out soon

Spriggan is a magic whiz now, cool.
Why does Enchanted sound so familiar? (Eh no ones gonna believe me anyway) I'm excited for the next chapter
Wasn't it always?

I mean from spriggan Requiem onwards using them was like magic when you used them
(Aug. 11, 2021  10:21 PM)Dread hades12 Wrote: Wasn't it always?

I mean from spriggan Requiem onwards using them was like magic when you used them

hmmm

lol i love the new spriggan motif!

i mean, spriggan was a monster in mythology that roamed and protected the earth
(Aug. 11, 2021  10:24 PM)GenesisBlader Wrote:
(Aug. 11, 2021  10:21 PM)Dread hades12 Wrote: Wasn't it always?

I mean from spriggan Requiem onwards using them was like magic when you used them

hmmm

lol i love the new spriggan motif!

i mean, spriggan was a monster in mythology that roamed and protected the earth

Huh, that’s weird. As far as I know, Spriggan is supposed to be a mischievous faerie...
Episode 6
https://www.wattpad.com/1112681349-beybl...ng-a-group
nice episode! alena really showed her who's boss and even made a friend! i love it!
(Aug. 13, 2021  2:38 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Episode 6
https://www.wattpad.com/1112681349-beybl...ng-a-group

I have made the discovery of a lifetime Alena does have a Heart! Lol, good chapter! Again, your grammar could use a bit of tweaking (Also Haiden is just getting annoying just imagine a kid follows you around challenges you to a battle like every day that'd probably get old) Anyways I love Selena's, open heart! (She reminds me of Serena in Pokemon)
Episode 8: The Dark Princess Strikes! Alena VS Rangelina!!
Episode 9: The Dragons Revenge! Phantom Fafnir!!
Episode 10: Counterstrike! Crusher Death!!
Episode 11: Havoc Satans Challenge!
Episode 12: Axe Of Raging Fire! Enchanted Spriggan!
Episode 13: My Friend?!
Episode 14: Destroy Spriggan!
Episode 15: The Bey Of Destruction! Fallen Abaddon!

Episode 7
https://www.wattpad.com/1117554050-beybl...ng-inferno
UnseenBurst PinkRose GenesisBlader
(Aug. 19, 2021  11:40 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Episode 8: The Dark Princess Strikes! Alena VS Rangelina!!
Episode 9: The Dragons Revenge! Phantom Fafnir!!
Episode 10: Counterstrike! Crusher Death!!
Episode 11: Havoc Satans Challenge!
Episode 12: Axe Of Raging Fire! Enchanted Spriggan!
Episode 13: My Friend?!
Episode 14: Destroy Spriggan!
Episode 15: The Bey Of Destruction! Fallen Abaddon!

Episode 7
https://www.wattpad.com/1117554050-beybl...ng-inferno
UnseenBurst PinkRose GenesisBlader

Thanks for notifying me! I'll read it right now! (After playing Pokemon Unite lol jk)

Loved this chapter
keep up the great work! Reading your fanfics help me improve my writing and I really liked reading your fanfics just work on your grammar a bit and you're good to go Smile
Dub Names

Cannon Analine (Anahel)
Celestial Valtryek
Enchant Spryzen
Phantom Fafnir (Remains the same tbh)
Flaming Roktavor
Havoc Satomb
Fierce Alador (Abaddon)
(Aug. 20, 2021  3:38 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Dub Names

Cannon Analine (Anahel)
Celestial Valtryek
Enchant Spryzen
Phantom Fafnir (Remains the same tbh)
Flaming Roktavor
Havoc Satomb
Fierce Alador (Abaddon)

Seriously, TT just hire DeltaZakuro lol, he'd make Beyblade way more interesting XD
(Aug. 20, 2021  3:44 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Aug. 20, 2021  3:38 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Dub Names

Cannon Analine (Anahel)
Celestial Valtryek
Enchant Spryzen
Phantom Fafnir (Remains the same tbh)
Flaming Roktavor
Havoc Satomb
Fierce Alador (Abaddon)

Seriously, TT just hire DeltaZakuro lol, he'd make Beyblade way more interesting XD

TT should hire DeltaZakuro for Bey names and moves, CrazyAries to design them, and @"tenma" to draw the manga.
(Aug. 20, 2021  4:27 AM)BeybladeManiac0 Wrote:
(Aug. 20, 2021  3:44 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Seriously, TT just hire DeltaZakuro lol, he'd make Beyblade way more interesting XD

TT should hire DeltaZakuro for Bey names and moves, CrazyAries to design them, and @"tenma" to draw the manga.

THE TENTATIOUS TRIO, YES

it would only be complete with ya boi, of course 😏👌 (jk)
I feel like this story fails to be “dark.” Dark stories are defined as something that deals with things that would make people uncomfortable, things that probably aren’t allowed to be discussed in the WBO (things like horror of war, drugs, people trafficking, child abuse, genocide, terrible crimes, and terrorism).
(Aug. 28, 2021  9:58 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: I feel like this story fails to be “dark.” Dark stories are defined as something that deals with things that would make people uncomfortable, things that probably aren’t allowed to be discussed in the WBO (things like horror of war, drugs, people trafficking, child abuse, genocide, terrible crimes, and terrorism).

I mean, in Beyblade sense it's kinda dark
(Aug. 28, 2021  10:38 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Aug. 28, 2021  9:58 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: I feel like this story fails to be “dark.” Dark stories are defined as something that deals with things that would make people uncomfortable, things that probably aren’t allowed to be discussed in the WBO (things like horror of war, drugs, people trafficking, child abuse, genocide, terrible crimes, and terrorism).

I mean, in Beyblade sense it's kinda dark

I judge from a subjective point of view as that is what allows for a better story. In my eyes criticism should be done totally subjectively and not in the context of another story. The story is sort of edgy, but not dark
(Aug. 28, 2021  10:49 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote:
(Aug. 28, 2021  10:38 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I mean, in Beyblade sense it's kinda dark

I judge from a subjective point of view as that is what allows for a better story. In my eyes criticism should be done totally subjectively and not in the context of another story. The story is sort of edgy, but not dark

You should talk to DeltaZakuro when he's recovered, he can provide much more information then I can
(Aug. 28, 2021  9:58 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: I feel like this story fails to be “dark.” Dark stories are defined as something that deals with things that would make people uncomfortable, things that probably aren’t allowed to be discussed in the WBO (things like horror of war, drugs, people trafficking, child abuse, genocide, terrible crimes, and terrorism).

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Episode 8: The Dark Princess Strikes! Alena VS Rangelina!!
Episode 9: The Dragons Revenge! Phantom Fafnir!!
Episode 10: Counterstrike! Crusher Death!!
Episode 11: The Black Trident! Havoc Satan!!
Episode 12: Axe Of Raging Fire! Enchanted Spriggan!
Episode 13: Burning Hell! Anahel VS Satan!
(Aug. 19, 2021  11:40 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Episode 8: The Dark Princess Strikes! Alena VS Rangelina!!
Episode 9: The Dragons Revenge! Phantom Fafnir!!
Episode 10: Counterstrike! Crusher Death!!
Episode 11: Havoc Satans Challenge!
Episode 12: Axe Of Raging Fire! Enchanted Spriggan!
Episode 13: My Friend?!
Episode 14: Destroy Spriggan!
Episode 15: The Bey Of Destruction! Fallen Abaddon!

Episode 7
https://www.wattpad.com/1117554050-beybl...ng-inferno
UnseenBurst PinkRose GenesisBlader

The Dancing Inferno?! Cool. What I enjoy was the climate in this episode.
Episode 8
https://www.wattpad.com/1118280177-beybl...k-princess
(Sep. 01, 2021  2:12 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Episode 8
https://www.wattpad.com/1118280177-beybl...k-princess

I could offer you my critique, but I don’t think you would like it. DeltaZakuro would you like my advice?