World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc. Other Closed Threads

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Aug. 04, 2012  1:26 AM
 
A new story coming soon!
Prologue:
Twleve days. Your time. The school. The maze. 8. The players.

Think school is safe? People. Thoughts. The ingredients of danger. A storm. You are locked. You and your class.

"Welcome, students.
These are the games.
Eight of you.
Eight days.
You must use your knowledge.
Eight test. Pass them.
エスケープ.
Pick your path.
Make you decisions."
Takasu woke up. He glanced around the room.
"Wait, this isn't his room!"
He looked around. And it hit him. He was in his Homebase room. Back at school. What was he doing there?
Someone tapped his shoulder, scaring him.
"Do you know why we are here?" The person asked.
Takasu turned, and met eyes with his classmate, Yuni.
"Woah! You scared me. I don't know." He answered. Takasu looked at the ground.
Six more people laid their.
Um, I'm kinda freaked out. What the hell happened to us?"
"I do not know. We should try to Wake everyone else up.
People began awaking, their bodies looked stiff and tiered. Some yawned, some jumped up.
"Were the hell are we?" One asked.
"What's going on?" Said another. Everyone was confused. What were they doing at school? Its summer.
The eight people looked at each other. It suddenly hit all of them. They were all classmattes.
Before anyone could speak, the loud speaker went off.
"Attention students. Welcome. Welcome to the games."

Soundtrack coming soon!
Coming in 2 weeks. Based off 999: 9 Hours, 9 Persons, 9 Doors.

Aug. 04, 2012  1:35 AM
 
はい！いいですね！ホン　わすきです！Grin　BOOM POW! Grin I like gritty stuff like this... >Grin and my japanese may be a little off... they didnt have the particle "o" for objects
Aug. 04, 2012  1:44 AM
 
Iirc, you supposed to have at least a chapter of your story before you make a thread.
Aug. 04, 2012  2:12 AM
 
Sorry about the short chapter, but I am having problems with posting on my tablet. It has trouble typing and scrooling. I need to wait until I have computer access to type more.
My computer is at my grandmas house, and I wont bebgoing back until the 12th. I'm very sorry.
My mom wont let me use her computer, and my sisters computer is also at our grandmas.
But I do invite disscusion.

Thank you for your cooperation.
Aug. 04, 2012  2:16 AM
 
I know you said you were having trouble, but capitalization, spelling (there, they're, their) I still like it regardless >Grin
Aug. 04, 2012  2:20 AM
 
If you would read my discontinued story, I had no problems with that. I want to rewrite it, but its extremely hard. I am using a Kindle Fire.
Aug. 05, 2012  1:10 PM
 
Oh carp, I see the 999 thing going on here. But please, if you're going to "base off it" make it somewhat interesting. And I'd like to see how you incorporate the whole notion of the 8 because as far as I know, there aren't a lot of things that you could do with that number (puzzle-wise). You see, in 999 everything is related to that number (and I mean everything ).

Have you even played the game? Lips_sealed

And, I'd like to see how you go about executing this "game". And what is the purpose of it? Because, you see, the purpose behind the [Nonary Games] was so that [Cradle Pharmaceuticals] could research the accessibility of the [Morhpogenic Fields]. And the best way to do that was to put people into situations of extreme danger. And so, the basis of the games is "win or die" and that pretty much makes people have to solve puzzles and occasionally tap into the field to gain information.

[/999 Rant]

But yeah, I am quite interested to find out what the purpose is behind your version of the game. And I'd also like to know how you would incorporate this:

(Aug. 04, 2012  1:26 AM)Takasu Wrote: Pick your path.
Make you decisions.

I think making a "game story" with multiple options would be hard. Especially if you're getting into puzzles/concepts like 999.

Not to mention that you'd have to go through some pretty good code-proofing to make it all work and link out properly.


EDIT: Didn't realize I wrote that much ...
Aug. 05, 2012  4:22 PM
 
Well, I thought it over, and this is the concept:
No "pick your paths. Ive tlread those; aren't fun.
8 students. 6 hours. 10 rooms. I decided to do this because I had a bit of mix and match.
I have rewritten the story, but I have to wait until the 13th to post it.
But I do encourage disscusion.
Ending! Do nit read if you don't want it to be spoiled! (Click to View)
Aug. 06, 2012  12:40 PM
 
Hm okay, I see where you're going with this one. I get the concept now. So the kids are trapped in some "dream realm" and they must escape? That's what I'm getting from your last post.
Aug. 06, 2012  4:12 PM
 
Yes, they are trapped in a dream realm.
Also, I going to make it so they split up into two groups, and who you chose to go to which group changes the story; that means there will be two parts.

It wont be too hard. Just need to write a bit more....