[Closed]Beyblade metal universe

Hey, I have some things to say about your story....

-Your Chapters are very short
-I honestly think it could be better.

I know you will improve as time comes, but this story, honestly I don't like. Here is another tip, Put each chapter in a spoiler, so it is easy to find. Don't get mad over this post, it is just some criticism.
Gravity Brave
Fangs.of.Death
BattleBlader357
This is the order of who's character will appear first
TriSix
The next chapter will be long
(Jun. 02, 2012  11:51 PM)Gravity Brave Wrote: Name: Karan Brar

Age:12

Strength: 7

Bey: Meteo L-Drago LW105LF

Special Moves: Dragon Soaring Rage, Ultimate Roaring Dragon Blast

Appearance: Short Black Hair, a natural tan, a red and orange hat with a picture of a yellow L-Drago on it, Red sports jacket with a black shirt underneath, black skinny jeans, and some red Jordans

You requested the exact same character from me. And I already put him in the story. That's not fair and uncool. Angry


(Jun. 03, 2012  8:07 PM)Thunder Dome Wrote: Gravity Brave
Fangs.of.Death
BattleBlader357
This is the order of who's character will appear first
TriSix
The next chapter will be long

Karan can't be in the story. He's already in mine and is a main character. This isn't fair. Angry
He is. I had no idea. Sorry I will have to take him out of the story.
(Jun. 03, 2012  8:13 PM)Thunder Dome Wrote: He is. I had no idea. Sorry I will have to take him out of the story.

Thank you. Tongue_out
People vote if you want to choose the team because next time a put up a chapter (which will be later today) I will need the team name okay
(Jun. 03, 2012  8:11 PM)Ozone Wrote:
(Jun. 02, 2012  11:51 PM)Gravity Brave Wrote: Name: Karan Brar

Age:12

Strength: 7

Bey: Meteo L-Drago LW105LF

Special Moves: Dragon Soaring Rage, Ultimate Roaring Dragon Blast

Appearance: Short Black Hair, a natural tan, a red and orange hat with a picture of a yellow L-Drago on it, Red sports jacket with a black shirt underneath, black skinny jeans, and some red Jordans

You requested the exact same character from me. And I already put him in the story. That's not fair and uncool. Angry


(Jun. 03, 2012  8:07 PM)Thunder Dome Wrote: Gravity Brave
Fangs.of.Death
BattleBlader357
This is the order of who's character will appear first
TriSix
The next chapter will be long

Karan can't be in the story. He's already in mine and is a main character. This isn't fair. Angry
Its annoying when people use the same character in different stories.

The team will be called Fire-X
Quote:Its annoying when people use the same character in different stories.

I know right
(Jun. 03, 2012  8:24 PM)Ozone Wrote:
Quote:Its annoying when people use the same character in different stories.

I know right
That is what I call lazy
Edit: Lets get back on topic
This will return June 11
(Jun. 03, 2012  1:56 AM)Thunder Dome Wrote: This is not a RPG
Pyrus10000 your character will come back later

Just noticed this. Thank you for including my character in your story. I really enjoy your story so far Grin
Sorry guys read the OP
Character requests are bad, it turns your story from your idea to ''Kay gotta fit this character in'', and most of the requests don't list full details like the characters personality.
I want to submit a character:
Name: Manny
Last name: Mata
Bey: Rock Pegasus
Moves: Rock slide, Earthquake, Rock defense wall, and Hammer wing.
Looks: Black hair up to eyes, Dark brown eyes, Black t-shirt, Black fingerless gloves, Blue pants, and Black shoes.

Sorry if i submitted my character late. Hope I'm not that late to submit a character.
stormpegasus12 Wrote:I want to submit a character:
Name: Manny
Last name: Mata
Bey: Rock Pegasus
Moves: Rock slide, Earthquake, Rock defense wall, and Hammer wing.
Looks: Black hair up to eyes, Dark brown eyes, Black t-shirt, Black fingerless gloves, Blue pants, and Black shoes.

Read the first line in the OP. Plus the title says closed. He's obviously not taking requests. Tongue_out