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Oct. 15, 2020  7:35 PM
 
(Oct. 15, 2020  6:38 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Oooo, Sacred, could you rate my story? The first chapter is in one of the two newest pages of it :3
Beyblade Burst Spirit

Grammar:5/5 I didn't notice any errors and the formatting was great too!
Plot: 4/5: Great plot but it could use a little bit of improvement.
Characters: 5/5 they're all likable!
Dialogue: 4/5 its not bad but maybe you should working on making it sound a little more natural.
Length: 5/5 all the chapters are long which is really good!

Total: 23/25

Overall great fanfic!
Oct. 15, 2020  7:41 PM
 
(Oct. 15, 2020  7:35 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote:
(Oct. 15, 2020  6:38 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Oooo, Sacred, could you rate my story? The first chapter is in one of the two newest pages of it :3
Beyblade Burst Spirit

Grammar:5/5  I didn't notice any errors and the formatting was great too!
Plot: 4/5: Great plot but it could use a little bit of improvement.
Characters: 5/5 they're all likable!
Dialogue: 4/5 its not bad but maybe you should working on making it sound a little more natural.
Length: 5/5 all the chapters are long which is really good!

Total: 23/25

Overall great fanfic!
I understand with the plot, as it’s chapter one, and just a general introduction. I can assure you that I have a plan for it though.
Oct. 15, 2020  7:48 PM
 
(Oct. 15, 2020  7:41 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote:
(Oct. 15, 2020  7:35 PM)SacredXcalibur Wrote: Beyblade Burst Spirit

Grammar:5/5  I didn't notice any errors and the formatting was great too!
Plot: 4/5: Great plot but it could use a little bit of improvement.
Characters: 5/5 they're all likable!
Dialogue: 4/5 its not bad but maybe you should working on making it sound a little more natural.
Length: 5/5 all the chapters are long which is really good!

Total: 23/25

Overall great fanfic!
I understand with the plot, as it’s chapter one, and just a general introduction. I can assure you that I have a plan for it though.

can you rate the latest episode of my fanfic?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qXZN...sp=sharing
Oct. 15, 2020  9:04 PM
 
Shun was so close to beating Dimitri. Gwynn messed up shun big time
Oct. 16, 2020  1:53 AM
 
(Oct. 15, 2020  9:04 PM)kai edits Wrote: Shun was so close to beating Dimitri. Gwynn messed up shun big time

oof
Oct. 16, 2020  4:42 PM
 
Can someone rate the two new chapters of beyblade burst apocalypse
Oct. 16, 2020  4:45 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  4:42 PM)kai edits Wrote: Can someone rate the two new chapters of beyblade burst apocalypse

Chapter 12 preview suggests Shun is cheating on Dimitri with Free yet no previous romantic relationships have ever been established and Im confused, can you explain?
Oct. 16, 2020  4:50 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  4:45 PM)Eclipse Force Wrote:
(Oct. 16, 2020  4:42 PM)kai edits Wrote: Can someone rate the two new chapters of beyblade burst apocalypse

Chapter 12 preview suggests Shun is cheating on Dimitri with Free yet no previous romantic relationships have ever been established and Im confused, can you explain?

It's in chapter 12 of apocalypse . it's in a flashback
Oct. 16, 2020  5:32 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  4:50 PM)kai edits Wrote:
(Oct. 16, 2020  4:45 PM)Eclipse Force Wrote: Chapter 12 preview suggests Shun is cheating on Dimitri with Free yet no previous romantic relationships have ever been established and Im confused, can you explain?

It's in chapter 12 of apocalypse . it's in a flashback

So they were previously in a love triangle?
Oct. 16, 2020  6:03 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  5:32 PM)Eclipse Force Wrote:
(Oct. 16, 2020  4:50 PM)kai edits Wrote: It's in chapter 12 of apocalypse . it's in a flashback

So they were previously in a love triangle?

Yes pretty much
Oct. 16, 2020  6:07 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  6:03 PM)kai edits Wrote:
(Oct. 16, 2020  5:32 PM)Eclipse Force Wrote: So they were previously in a love triangle?

Yes pretty much

How old is everyone in the triangle now, and how old are they in the flashback
Oct. 16, 2020  6:17 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  6:07 PM)Eclipse Force Wrote:
(Oct. 16, 2020  6:03 PM)kai edits Wrote: Yes pretty much

How old is everyone in the triangle now, and how old are they in the flashback

Flashback 
Shun(17)
Free(18)
Now 
Shun(21)
Free(22)
Oct. 16, 2020  6:21 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  6:17 PM)kai edits Wrote:
(Oct. 16, 2020  6:07 PM)Eclipse Force Wrote: How old is everyone in the triangle now, and how old are they in the flashback

Flashback 
Shun(17)
Free(18)
Now 
Shun(21)
Free(22)
Dimitri age?
Oct. 16, 2020  6:27 PM
 
(Oct. 16, 2020  6:21 PM)Eclipse Force Wrote:
(Oct. 16, 2020  6:17 PM)kai edits Wrote: Flashback 
Shun(17)
Free(18)
Now 
Shun(21)
Free(22)
Dimitri age?

Flashback back 16
Current 20
I posted a teaser for the next episode
Oct. 17, 2020  4:31 AM
 
Can someone rate the newest episode of Beyblade Burst Legends?
Oct. 17, 2020  4:59 AM
 
Can someone rate the new chapters of beyblade burst apocalypse
Oct. 17, 2020  8:05 PM
 
Can some rate my fanfic beyblade burst apocalypse?
Oct. 18, 2020  2:33 AM
 
Beyblade Burst Combo Prologue

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Rankings

1.Dean Ren Bey:RDb Ds' 3A

2.Loki Brone Bey:BLu Ev' 2A

3. Helmer Welk WHy Ul' 1A

4.Drene Moken MDb Wl Mb

5.Aizen Propel JA.Bl.X'.Gk
Oct. 18, 2020  3:03 PM
 
What do you guys think of the new chapter of beyblade burst apocalypse?
Oct. 20, 2020  12:04 AM
 
Can we get a moment of silence for shun kurenai.
Oct. 20, 2020  12:09 AM
 
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:04 AM)kai edits Wrote: Can we get a moment of silence for shun kurenai.

No, can we get a moment of silence for Kobe Bryant
Oct. 20, 2020  12:16 AM
 
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:04 AM)kai edits Wrote: Can we get a moment of silence for shun kurenai.

Okay but wait Shun Shun Shun or Pun!
Oct. 20, 2020  12:47 AM
 
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:16 AM)SunBlader98 Wrote:
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:04 AM)kai edits Wrote: Can we get a moment of silence for shun kurenai.

Okay but wait Shun Shun Shun or Pun!
Shun died in the latest chapter of beyblade burst apocalypse.
Oct. 20, 2020  12:52 AM
 
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:47 AM)kai edits Wrote:
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:16 AM)SunBlader98 Wrote: Okay but wait Shun Shun Shun or Pun!
Shun died in the latest chapter of beyblade burst apocalypse.
Soooooooooooo, does that mean your WBO account died?
Oct. 20, 2020  12:54 AM
 
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:52 AM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 20, 2020  12:47 AM)kai edits Wrote: Shun died in the latest chapter of beyblade burst apocalypse.
Soooooooooooo, does that mean your WBO account died?
Nah she is the main character it's just temporarily. She will always come back.
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