Thought I'd make a story.

What's it about:

Toasty's a Blader; His number one dream is to win five tournaments. if he does, he wins a 10 sliced toaster.

But......... He will have to go on a long journy for that. As he's going to start his first tournament; will he win?

CHAPTER 1:

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Hi, I'm Toasty(Yeah I know funny name.) just your everyday Blader. I'm getting ready for my tournament; I just need a few things though: F230, Wyvang, E230 and CF.

"Toasty come down the stairs" Mum said.

"What, what do you want?" Toasty replied.

"The toaster is ready for you" Mum said.

I was, at that moment, Happy, Hyper and Hungry.

"YES! I can't wait too make my toast!" Toasty said.

"Damm, I'm gonna be late for my tournament! I have too go to the bey shop, bye mum. The toast is gonna have to wait" Said Toasty.

"OK, good luck!" Mum replied.

I went out to "Bey-Shop-Shiz" Witch is on the Highstreet. It's only a 5 minute walk from my house. I go in and ask: "One F230, Wyvang, E230 and CF please."

The shop keeper says: "Hahaha, yes, that'll be $70."

Toasty replied " Whoooo, your joking right?"

The Keeper said: "No, you buying or what?"

Toasty replied: Yeah, yeah, I'll buy them" I now know I got ripped-off.

"OK, now I'm ready for my tournament!." Toasty said out loud.

After leaving the shop, Toasty took the Train to the Beyblade stadium.

Toasty saw a sign: "Blade for your life to win a toaster" Toasty had too win that toaster!

"Are you ready world bladers?" The host said Host.

First match was Toasty against some kid.

Host shouted: "Are you ready?

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Go Shoot!"

Toasty says: "Go Revizer Revizer F230CF!"
The kid says: "Go Dark Leone M145Q!"

Toasty's shocked! It was winning! "What am I going too do, this isn't possible!" Toasty was thinking.

Toasty thought: I need to find out what's going on here. Something's not right!............

What An Amazing Story! Can't Wait To See More!

I saw a few spelling errors and the format is hard to understand when they are talking, but it's funny, just need to fix a couple things .

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Haha, edited. Yeah, I'm gonna correct them I'm just tired lol.

To be honest, it's not very good. There's no description, it's very choppy, and quite redundant. Just constructive criticism, not trying to be rude.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

Yeah, I couldn't do much.

1: I'm writing from my phone

2: I've been up to 2.00am.

Hope you guys understand

Well it is a good story and all...but here is the deal:
1. You need to be descriptive. I cannot even tell where Toasty is right now. You just made him jump from his house to the shop and then to the tournament! What does Toasty look like? How does he talk? What does he wear? Those are the questions you need to answer
2.You spelled "breakfast" wrong.
3.This is your main problem in this writing: You need to put-
"Ronald, could you do me a favor?" Joey asked.
"Yeah, sure," Ronald replied.
--Not just
"Ronald, could you do me a favor?" Joey
"Yeah, sure" Ronald----
What I am trying to say is that readers won't understand the writing if you don't format it correctly.

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To be honest, it's not very good. There's no description, it's very choppy, and quite redundant. Just constructive criticism, not trying to be rude.

The first chapter is always like that. I think its good. When there is more you will see that you are wrong and ya there are some mistakes but its hard to type well on a phone. But lso it is hard to follow because we have no idea where he is. Hey you should join Wattpad ( wattpad.com ) It is a website for writers to write books and share them. I cant remember if there is a refferal box when you sign up but my name is BLADERGUY2 on wattpad.

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"The first chapter is always like that." Yah ok. First impressions mean anything to you?
I won't even start an argument.

I never said the story was bad, it just needs work.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

You have a strange obsession with toasters, haha. You always PM me saying you are going to take mine XD!

It's kind of a humorous story lol.

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Yeah, haha, it's ment to be a funny story. I'll get your toaster one day Tri

I fixed a few stuff, but I can't wright anymore because: I can only type up to a set number of words. So........

I get the general plot of a tounrament, etc. but like Ultramarine stated, it's kinda choppy. There really isn't character development-aside from the fact we learn our main character loves toasters.

What's the deal with toasters, anyways?

EDIT: After reading more, there are some grammatical errors, like confusing "to" and "too".

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I get the general plot of a tounrament, etc. but like Ultramarine stated, it's kinda choppy. There really isn't character development-aside from the fact we learn our main character loves toasters.
What's the deal with toasters, anyways?

I got to agree. Also why would he buy bey parts for $70?

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Yeah, I runned out of typing space. I was going too do more on my character, but I cant type anymore words. Hahah, Toasters are one of my best machines. I guess I use it everyday.

Azl, it's ment too be funny. So that's why it's $70