Prologue

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I walked home after leaving the Weapons shop down the road,My Phone Rang *Buzz Buzz* I had it on vibrate,i hit the answer button "Yo Where you at?".....It was Desmond,i responded saying "Im walking home...why?"...."Im with Camille and Luke,we where supposed to meet in CrossRide"."Dammit...sorry can't make it",Thats when i met her."Cant make what?",i looked behind me...there was a girl,she looked about 15 or so."Just a meeting in a game" i said,I realized my katana was glowing white."My name is Yvaine Le-Peirce,and I'm taking you to my world.She was stunning.She has blond hair that was put into a long ponytail that was held by a black ribbon.Suddenly a white flash appeared by my eyes and I blacked out

Chapter 1-Welcome to Cerocaline Magic Academy

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I woke to a bell,as horrible as it sounds it was actually a nice clean bell not like the bells are on my planet.I then realized there kids my age,Boys and Girls eating food or more specifically...Lunch.My Katana was laid down beside me swell as the girl,Yvaine.At first i flipped out because I've never had a girl be this close.I asked "Who..What..Where *Huff*,Where the hell am I?" She responded with "Cerocaline,Alpha Reigon". I realized she had rainbow coloured eyes."Umm okay maybe a little more info please",Yvaine looked crossed "You mean you don't know" she crossed her arms while shaking her head "No frankly I'm a little confused,i live in Tokyo,Japan not here" She stood up and walked away I decided I would stay where I was suddenly i heard a voice "Don't mind her she is a sour puss,The names Desmond" I didn't know if i should strangle him or hug him "Desmond!?! Where the hell am i! i freaking out man!" He chuckled "Lets walk". We walked along a stone pathway,Everyone seemed to be looking at me I asked "Why is everyone starring at me?" i remembered wasn't the most japaneese looking,mainly because I'm not asian."Look Amani,I know your frightened but you gotta keep your calm just until you meet Headmaster Dyreusux".We entered a doors that lead into a dark room.I felt a cold shiver as if someone..or something was breathing on me.Suddenly the room flicked on,there stood in front of me..a large black dragon.

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Yes, Xaos is right. Try using MS word to fix any errors. You need some capitalizing for names and dates, spacing between periods and new sentences, and you MAY want to fix your spoiler, haha!
Other than that, this seems interesting!

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If this isn't a prologue, it should be much larger. Also you may want to fix the spacing, spelling, and grammar, as well as the spoiler.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

Thanx i might need to close it down

Thanx i might need to close it down

And why would that be Imperial?

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CLOSE IT DOWN?This is a great story and you should write more.

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CLOSE IT DOWN?This is a great story and you should write more.

^What the...I didn't write that!I would never write anythig that corny!THAT DOESN'T EVEN SOUND LIKE ME!!!!

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CLOSE IT DOWN?This is a great story and you should write more.

^What the...I didn't write that!I would never write anythig that corny!THAT DOESN'T EVEN SOUND LIKE ME!!!!

then how is it posted as you?!

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My rival is pretty obvious. POKEMO!!! I lost to him in a tournament match while he was using a friggin Gravity Perseus B:D!!! Lol

CLOSE IT DOWN?This is a great story and you should write more.

^What the...I didn't write that!I would never write anythig that corny!THAT DOESN'T EVEN SOUND LIKE ME!!!!

then how is it posted as you?!

I have no freakin idea!I would write this:
I like this story,keep going!

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^What the...I didn't write that!I would never write anythig that corny!THAT DOESN'T EVEN SOUND LIKE ME!!!!

then how is it posted as you?!

I have no freakin idea!I would write this:
I like this story,keep going!

I agree, and DusKIfraid. you should make a poll

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My rival is pretty obvious. POKEMO!!! I lost to him in a tournament match while he was using a friggin Gravity Perseus B:D!!! Lol